I like your peom for its musical quality. I can hear the music :) These are very good lyrics, you should put them in music or ask a friend to do so if you are not musician :)
Author's Response: Thank you very much for your review! I actually am a musician, and the poems I post on this site are songs that I have written, and then adapted to fit the HP canon. It means a lot to me that you noticed this particular thing, as it sort of means that I'm doing a good job as both a poet and a musician. Thanks again!