Reviews For Wandless
Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 03/28/13 18:04
Chapter: Chapter 12 Detention With Snape

Good chapter. You did Snape's POV quite well.

Author's Response: Thanks, I love doing Snape's POV!

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 03/28/13 17:55
Chapter: Chapter 11 What Eslis Knew

Wow, it's been a long time since I first read this story. Most of the time, I dont get updates, but last week one slipped into my email. Back to the chapter.

I thought it was odd that Cybele felt terribly guilty. I don't recollect Ben saying or doing anything. Should she feel more guilty than Ben? And why should others judge her more harshly?

Also Caroline says she saw Cybele disappear, I'm thinking Cybele apparated to the library; so I go back to tthe last chapter and see no such apparition taking place. Then I realize it was just a figure of speech.

The Magian thing has interesting consequences. Maybe it explains why she felt so upset.

Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback! I should probably say "run away" instead of disappear, you're right! Cybele's panic attack is explained by later chapters ;)

Reviewer: rose lilly marie evans
Date: 04/06/11 6:02
Chapter: Chapter 1 - The Unexpected Guest

Very nice descrpitive details. An unusual sort of story and therefore a good story. Enjoyed it immensley.

Author's Response: Thank you! And sorry for not updating the end yet. I have finished writing the story and it's betaed, too. But I don't seem to be able to upload chapters anymore. Need to sort it our with the mods :)

Reviewer: Bastet
Date: 08/13/10 17:09
Chapter: Chapter 35: The Final Battle

Hum, when I read the sum up I thought this story would be so much more centered in Harry, or at least the main events in the books, and I was very surprised to see that my "suspicions" were unfounded! I liked it a lot! Even if it isn't exactly "plot compliant" I believe you wrote here quite a story. Just have one thing to say though, I think that the last 2 chapters seem a bit rushed... I don't mean it in a bad way, I just think that there is a lot left unsaid... But maybe you will be developing that in the next chapters!!! Please keep up the good work and update soon!

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing :) Hum, yes, the last chapters have been quite rushed up indeed. I think I need to develop the next ones better. I'll take a bit longer before I post them but hopefully, they will feel more complete!

Reviewer: RavenclawAspirant
Date: 08/12/10 19:25
Chapter: Chapter 35: The Final Battle

Thank you for answering my last review. It is really fun to be able to read something and ask questions about it and get answers in return (I always wished that were true of all books....sigh). I liked this chapter but i felt as you put at the end it was a bit fast and a lot was thrown at you at once. Just a suggestion but what if you had her go to freds and carolines funerals? THat would allow for a short break in the pace and would make Cybele more human. I also would have liked to see more of what she did in the battle because with all of her abilities you would think that she would be able to make a real impact and it would be cool if maybe in a flashback or something we heard about what she did in that year with Caroline because it seems like so much could have happened then. I really liked how you had the follow up of them saying that if she was needed just call her (a lot of stories have that but never use it). One last suggestion: I think it would be helpful to have someone end up traveling with her or at least talk about people she meets in her travels because then you get to hear about the others too and the story doesn't just become about Cybele (not that there is something wrong with Cybele just that at least for me hearing about the same character without anyone else around can get a bit boring and i like the other characters). I just want to say though that i really like your story, think you're a great writer and i hope the next chapter comes soon!

Author's Response: Thanks for this long review :) And I'm again afraid that you are right... I'm not too satisfied with my last chapters, because I leap forward in time a lot and though I will get all the lose ends together (I hope); I realize it must not be very satisfying to read. I'll try to follow your advice and add on some more to my last chapters, maybe even one more chapter. As a matter of fact, I think your idea of having Cybele go to the funerals gave me an idea... So if next chapter comes after some time, well, consider the delay is your "fault" ;) Looking forward to your opinion on it!

Reviewer: RavenclawAspirant
Date: 08/03/10 13:24
Chapter: Chapter 34 What is left to do

I liked it but i was suprised that Cybele didn't want to stay and help. Doesn't she want to fight voldemort? and also doesn't caroline? She seems so selfless that it is hard to imagine that she would just leave when her friends need her most in order to do something for herself.

Author's Response: Thanks and you are right: I will try to explain and make that clearer in future chapters. Beside her strong desire to discover the truth about herself, Cybele also feels sincerly useless in the wizarding world, as her training to fight magic with Snape was a failure. She's afraid she would be a burden to the magical world more than help. As for Caroline, well she's a very faithful friend and seeing that all of the other friends of Cybele were giving her up, she felt she had to be the one to stay beside her.

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 07/26/10 16:04
Chapter: Chapter 13 Last Chance

And not a mention of Harry or the Sorcerer's Stone. What restraint! What I mean is so far I like what I have read.

Author's Response: Thanks, and no worries there: the story shall remain quite Harry-free untill the end!

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 07/26/10 15:55
Chapter: Chapter 12 Detention With Snape

A somewhat unusual Snape here. There is no Harry in the vicinity, so there is no anger. It is a somewhat softer side of him but not melodramatic.

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm trying my best with my Slytherins ;)

Reviewer: 11234lol
Date: 07/05/10 21:25
Chapter: Chapter 33 Farewells

Wow. Just wow. I can't belive she slept though the battle. She must be a hard sleeper. End is confusing.

Author's Response: Well, I'm afraid that's how it is in the books. Non DA members were not involved in the original JKR's story. The story doesn't say if they were sleeping but I guess they were: if they'd have been wandering the corridors to see what was happening, there would have been casualities, don't you think? They probably woke up toward the end when the Death Eaters were already flying away... otherwise, Fenrir would have had a field day...

Reviewer: DownWithTheCarrows113
Date: 05/25/10 15:42
Chapter: Chapter 32 - Tom and Pansy

Aww!! I had hoped that Draco would stop being the git he is and finally go out with Cybelle, because she brings out the best in him and they seem meant to be together in their own strange, special way.

Author's Response: Keep reading - there's still hope untill the final chapter ;)

Reviewer: Homeless Hippogriff
Date: 05/16/10 21:22
Chapter: Chapter 28 Some Unintended Things

I've really enjoyed this story; thank you so much for sharing it with us! It's an intriguing idea and you are obviously very knowledgeable about legends and myths, not to mention creative. I'm enjoying the growing relationship between Cybele and Prof. Snape; I think you portray Snape sympathetically but realistically. One thing that confused me about this chapter: when did Cybele and George start dating? I might have to go back and read it again; it was conveyed in a very subtle way, I think. I'm looking forward to reading the next two chapters tonight!

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm happy you're enjoying. You're right about my having sort of skipped Cybele and George getting together. It happened after the Yule ball, in my head... I'm not into describing kisses and fluffy things, sorry :P

Reviewer: RavenclawAspirant
Date: 05/08/10 19:19
Chapter: Chapter 1 - The Unexpected Guest

I really enjoy reading this story. I like how Cyble manages to make friends with people in all the different houses (I always wished that would happen more in the Harry Potter books). I also really liked your tales! Did you leave the part when Malfoy calls Hermione a mudblood in book two out on purpose or did Cyble just not hear about that?

Author's Response: Thanks for your review. Well, Cybele doesn't know Hermione or anybody from her bacth at that point of the story... but above all, Cybele has a very sellective memory when it comes to Malfoy; lucky him ;)

Reviewer: Ks11234rofl
Date: 05/05/10 19:52
Chapter: Chapter 27 The Tiniest Scrolls of Parchment

Omg I looooove this story! So well written!

Author's Response: Thanks! :D

Reviewer: James Jameson
Date: 04/24/10 15:32
Chapter: Chapter 8 - A Tale

one nitpick: after the title of the story she finds, there's a section of action which should not be italicized... :]
otherwise it is and interesting story

Author's Response: Thanks, I'll try and fix that!

Reviewer: bigtimer
Date: 04/20/10 8:51
Chapter: Chapter 26 What Happened at the Yule Ball

what is that git going to do?

Author's Response: Knowing him... whatever might fail best ;)

Reviewer: James Jameson
Date: 04/18/10 21:00
Chapter: Chapter 7 - The Unexpected friend

i think that she'll be good for him :)

Author's Response: Let's hope ;) Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: the-wizardess
Date: 03/30/10 19:37
Chapter: Chapter 22 Sunday With Friends

I have to say that I am *really* enjoying this story. Cybele is a very engaging OC; entertaining, complex, and quite likable. The magi mythology is melding quite well with J.K. Rowling's plot, and it also doesn't hurt that I'm quite the fan of both Draco and Severus. You've treated them both quite well, and left them their wonderfully complex and prickly selves. I hate to see fics that soften them up and make them completely out of character, so thank you for not straying down that road lol. :)

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm really happy that you like how I'm treating Draco and Severus far now :D I feel the same way about OOCing them too much and I hope you will like how they evolve!

Reviewer: Lympha
Date: 03/27/10 11:28
Chapter: Chapter 21 Out of a Fairy Tale Book

Thank you for updating again! It was a nice chapter even though Cybele didn't have a chance to talk with her friends yet.
Keep up the good work because I am really looking forward to reading the next chapter. :)

Author's Response: Thanks! Cybele's reunion with her friends is posted already :) Looking forward to your reviews!

Reviewer: dominiqueweasley
Date: 12/17/09 21:41
Chapter: Chapter 1 - The Unexpected Guest

I'm rather hooked on this...

Great story and very suspenseful. I feel so sorry for Cybele! And I like the characterization of Snape...
:)

Author's Response: Thanks! I really appreciate that because characterization of Snape being almost nice is not easy; I'm happy you like it :)

Reviewer: Lympha
Date: 10/28/09 9:30
Chapter: Chapter 13 Last Chance

Wonderful chapter. I'm so happy Phil is going to survive and Cybele made up with Fred and Georg. I'm sure their second year together shall be very interesting and I'm really looking forward to reading it.

Author's Response: Thanks a lot again! Nice to know that you're still following the story :) My betas already saw to year two, so i's coming up very soon.

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