Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 04/01/13 17:06
Chapter: Chapter 27 – The Tiniest Scrolls of Parchment
A little surprised that Draco tried to apologize by note. I was expecting something more sinister.
Reviewer: American_Witch
Date: 03/30/13 22:08
Chapter: Chapter 36 - Days After the Battle
Hi,
Great story. I recently found this story and have loved reading every moment of it. I'm very excited to read the final installment. I will be said to see it end. You have done a great job inserting a new character into the world of JKR. Its always interesting to read other points of view during the Trio's time at Hogwarts. Again, very interested in how the story ends.
Author's Response: Thank you for your nice review! Hope you'll like the story till the end! :)
Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 03/29/13 10:59
Chapter: Chapter 26 – What Happened at the Yule Ball
ominous ending.
Author's Response: Hehe... Will Draco say the S word? ;)
Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 03/29/13 10:46
Chapter: Chapter 25 – The Unexpected Dance Partner.
The Au is not too much of a stretch.
Author's Response: I'm happy it isn't. They will dance together again in a later chapter :)
Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 03/29/13 10:35
Chapter: Chapter 24 – The Tormented Tutor
loved Neville!
Author's Response: Thanks! There will be more of him :)
Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 03/29/13 10:28
Chapter: Chapter 23 – Sleeping Beauty
Kinda amusing, seeing Draco embarassed.
Author's Response: It's challenging, to embarrass Draco while not going too OC. He would typically goes angry and aggressive, I reckon...
Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 03/29/13 10:20
Chapter: Chapter 22 – Sunday With Friends
spelling alert-- the word is not "picked", but "piqued" both words do sound similar.
Author's Response: Thanks!
Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 03/29/13 9:53
Chapter: Chapter 19 – The Nightmare Before Christmas
Your portrayal of Malfoy is good. definitely torn between two world and too cowardly to make the right decision.
Author's Response: Thank you :)
Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 03/29/13 9:45
Chapter: Chapter 18 – An Imperfect Trap
Dumbledore's conversation with Cybele makes alot more sense now that we heard the after conversation with Snape.
Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 03/29/13 9:36
Chapter: Chapter 17 – Last Stroll
Tis very dangerous if making a choice will result in death.
Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 03/29/13 9:27
Chapter: Chapter 16 – A Night in the Kitchens
Was hoping to actually hear/read the tale of the Magi. (puts on sad pouty face)
Author's Response: There will be an other tale in the epilogue ;)
Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 03/28/13 18:30
Chapter: Chapter 14 – A Bit of Muggle History
Amusing chapter. finding info in the muggle world.
Author's Response: After all, most of the Wizarding World looks suspiciously like Muggle tales and legends ;)
Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 03/28/13 18:18
Chapter: Chapter 13 – Last Chance
Just wanted to say that sometimes Fred reminds me of James (Harry's father) in that he really hates nasty behavior. It may seem wierd since both James and Draco are bullys, but one of the characters said that James really hated the dark arts. It seems like that spirit of James is in your Fred.
Author's Response: I always perceived Fred and George as profoundly tolerant and loyal. They are pranksters and rule-breakers but throughout the all HP adventure, they are also brave, involved and standing up for what they believe in.
Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 03/28/13 18:04
Chapter: Chapter 12 – Detention With Snape
Good chapter. You did Snape's POV quite well.
Author's Response: Thanks, I love doing Snape's POV!
Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 03/28/13 17:55
Chapter: Chapter 11 – What Eslis Knew
Wow, it's been a long time since I first read this story. Most of the time, I dont get updates, but last week one slipped into my email. Back to the chapter.
I thought it was odd that Cybele felt terribly guilty. I don't recollect Ben saying or doing anything. Should she feel more guilty than Ben? And why should others judge her more harshly?
Also Caroline says she saw Cybele disappear, I'm thinking Cybele apparated to the library; so I go back to tthe last chapter and see no such apparition taking place. Then I realize it was just a figure of speech.
The Magian thing has interesting consequences. Maybe it explains why she felt so upset.
Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback! I should probably say "run away" instead of disappear, you're right!
Cybele's panic attack is explained by later chapters ;)
Reviewer: rose lilly marie evans
Date: 04/06/11 6:02
Chapter: Chapter 1 - The Unexpected Guest
Very nice descrpitive details. An unusual sort of story and therefore a good story. Enjoyed it immensley.
Author's Response: Thank you! And sorry for not updating the end yet. I have finished writing the story and it's betaed, too. But I don't seem to be able to upload chapters anymore. Need to sort it our with the mods :)
Reviewer: Bastet
Date: 08/13/10 17:09
Chapter: Chapter 35: The Final Battle
Hum, when I read the sum up I thought this story would be so much more centered in Harry, or at least the main events in the books, and I was very surprised to see that my "suspicions" were unfounded! I liked it a lot! Even if it isn't exactly "plot compliant" I believe you wrote here quite a story. Just have one thing to say though, I think that the last 2 chapters seem a bit rushed... I don't mean it in a bad way, I just think that there is a lot left unsaid... But maybe you will be developing that in the next chapters!!! Please keep up the good work and update soon!
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing :)
Hum, yes, the last chapters have been quite rushed up indeed. I think I need to develop the next ones better. I'll take a bit longer before I post them but hopefully, they will feel more complete!
Reviewer: RavenclawAspirant
Date: 08/12/10 19:25
Chapter: Chapter 35: The Final Battle
Thank you for answering my last review. It is really fun to be able to read something and ask questions about it and get answers in return (I always wished that were true of all books....sigh). I liked this chapter but i felt as you put at the end it was a bit fast and a lot was thrown at you at once. Just a suggestion but what if you had her go to freds and carolines funerals? THat would allow for a short break in the pace and would make Cybele more human. I also would have liked to see more of what she did in the battle because with all of her abilities you would think that she would be able to make a real impact and it would be cool if maybe in a flashback or something we heard about what she did in that year with Caroline because it seems like so much could have happened then. I really liked how you had the follow up of them saying that if she was needed just call her (a lot of stories have that but never use it). One last suggestion: I think it would be helpful to have someone end up traveling with her or at least talk about people she meets in her travels because then you get to hear about the others too and the story doesn't just become about Cybele (not that there is something wrong with Cybele just that at least for me hearing about the same character without anyone else around can get a bit boring and i like the other characters). I just want to say though that i really like your story, think you're a great writer and i hope the next chapter comes soon!
Author's Response: Thanks for this long review :)
And I'm again afraid that you are right... I'm not too satisfied with my last chapters, because I leap forward in time a lot and though I will get all the lose ends together (I hope); I realize it must not be very satisfying to read. I'll try to follow your advice and add on some more to my last chapters, maybe even one more chapter. As a matter of fact, I think your idea of having Cybele go to the funerals gave me an idea... So if next chapter comes after some time, well, consider the delay is your "fault" ;)
Looking forward to your opinion on it!
Reviewer: RavenclawAspirant
Date: 08/03/10 13:24
Chapter: Chapter 34 – What is left to do
I liked it but i was suprised that Cybele didn't want to stay and help. Doesn't she want to fight voldemort? and also doesn't caroline? She seems so selfless that it is hard to imagine that she would just leave when her friends need her most in order to do something for herself.
Author's Response: Thanks and you are right: I will try to explain and make that clearer in future chapters.
Beside her strong desire to discover the truth about herself, Cybele also feels sincerly useless in the wizarding world, as her training to fight magic with Snape was a failure. She's afraid she would be a burden to the magical world more than help. As for Caroline, well she's a very faithful friend and seeing that all of the other friends of Cybele were giving her up, she felt she had to be the one to stay beside her.
Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 07/26/10 16:04
Chapter: Chapter 13 – Last Chance
And not a mention of Harry or the Sorcerer's Stone. What restraint! What I mean is so far I like what I have read.
Author's Response: Thanks, and no worries there: the story shall remain quite Harry-free untill the end!
