i think you wrote this really really poignantly. i like the story very very much. it's really too bad gellert didn't master occlumency. or maybe he had been too many years away from practising magic.
awesome story nonetheless. i really like this story ^^
Author's Response: Thank you very much!
Thumbs up. Entertaining
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Interesting. I'd love to read more about that romance.
And ...very credible. Esp. where he says most of the time it works.
Author's Response: Why, thank you very much! I can't promise anything, but this may not be the last I write of that storyline. Maybe. Hopefully. Glad you enjoyed it!
ooh! cool. Rather creepy, how you show Grindelwald and Dumbledore dueling, and Dumbledore says he is still somewhat ambitious. :) I think you nailed Grindelwald's attitude towards Voldemort. :)
All in all, I like it.
Author's Response: Why, thank you!
Greetings fellow Badger! How have you not had any reviews for this :o! I hate seeing people without reviews, especially when it's a story as good as this!
A brilliant way to start off the story, it really sets up the atmosphere. Although, I think by putting it in italics it could make it seem so much poignant, the idea of the sound echoing around the room.
He knew exactly where it came from; the little crevice in the corner, right beneath a stone basin for preserving the rain water on the roof. There had to be a tiny hole somewhere.
I really liked this part as it really showed the extent of his boredom.
Whatever happened, you were a part of, and you must face the consequences!”
Was that meant to be 'you were a part of it'?
Odd, wasn’t it, how a top-security prisoner received coffee with his breakfast.
Hmm, intriguing! I'm guessing that this isn't your run of the mill Azkaban prisoner then?
You keep forgetting; there isn’t a Kaiser or Kaiserin any longer.”
Ahah! Now I have a good idea who the character is, thanks to my History student knowledge lol. Although, I suppose the title does hint at it being Grindelwald. I like how you've not directly specified who the prisoner is. It adds a lot of intrigue.
She was the only exception in his quest for purity, she was his little secret. No one knew of his feelings for her, at least that he knew of. She, or rather her Muggle blood, was the one flaw in his plan.
I liked how this showed the hypocrisy of Grindelwald's convictions. He preaches one thing and yet does another... interesting idea.
“I will not come quietly, Albus. You know me better than that.”
Gellert whipped his wand out…
All else was a dull glow of spells being fired.
I really liked how you wrote this. It showed the power of their beliefs and that their views of what was right overpowered their friendship.
Now he, Gellert Grindelwald
This was good as you finaly left no doubt in the readers' mind as to who the prisoner is.
as though trying to determine what could possibly be great about this pile of filth.
In a way I felt as if this signified the advance of magic. Voldemort would view Grindelwald as insignificant because Voldemort has a lot more magical techniques at his disposal and can therefore have the appearance of being more powerful.
but then, his fame could penetrate even these thick walls.
Haha! Loving Voldemort's arrogance here :).
“And yet he escaped from you, while still a babe!”
“I would beware, if I were you?”
Does this really require a question mark at the end?
“Forgive me, Albus,” Gellert whispered, as a thin green ray flew at his chest.
Aww, so touching that Grindelwald took the chance to repent at the end, and that his finally thoughts were of Albus.
I really liked the dynamic you created by showing Voldemort and Grindelwald together. It was sort of like a passing of the baton moment. With Voldemort taking over from Grindelwald. And through seeing Voldemort, Grindelwald is able to fully realise his own mistakes. Very powerful, well done!
You've made me feel bad though, because I've suddenly realised how little of DH I remember :o! I think I may have to read it again now... what a shame lol.
But seriously, this was wonderful! And you really do deserve waaaaaay more reviews.
Author's Response: Thank you! Reviews like this make me want to write more.