Reviewer: TarynSage
Date: 05/25/09 17:38
Chapter: Chapter 4: The Conversations of Others

Dun duuun! What on earth is it that Demetri knows and is trying to hide?? Stay tuned to find out! Lol

Short but good. More characters made an appearance, and we've seen Harry in boss-mode hahaha

Author's Response: Next chapter you find out, I promise. ;) Thanks for reading and replying! Yes, I love Harry in boss-mode; that makes frequent appearances here.

Reviewer: TarynSage
Date: 05/25/09 17:20
Chapter: Chapter 3: I Refuse to Become Another One of Your Mistresses

Oh god, Nathaniel =O he's like Savage, but with more money and darker....
Speaking of which... what happened to Savage and Olivia? Did they get together in the end? Lol xD

Anyhow, ugh I feel sorry for Genevive having to stand all of the stuffy purebloods. It seems she forgot all about asking Demetri about his family relations...hmm, that dress tut tut xD

Author's Response: Oh, please. Nathaniel makes Savage seem like a lovesick little boy. You'll see soon; Nathaniel's been the darkest character I've ever created. Savage and Olivia: you know, I hadn't thought of that.... As for Genevieve, she had some sort of idea of what she was getting into when she chose Demetri over her family. The couple tends to stay out of the pureblood scene unless the Aurors need them there or his family asks (although Genevieve gets a bit touchy there). Thanks so much for the reply! :)

Reviewer: TarynSage
Date: 05/23/09 1:32
Chapter: Chapter 1: Wait... I Love You?

Wow, that was brilliant!!! I like the strange relationship these two have, and Teddy's entrance at the end was priceless xD

Big revelations in this chapter. Let's see how that changes things with the whole family...

Author's Response: Thanks so much, Jackie! I'm glad you liked this. Haha, about Teddy's entrance. For some reason, I love how Teddy and Genevieve absolutely hate each other; so much fun. Thanks for reading and replying!

Reviewer: Crystal99
Date: 05/07/09 10:37
Chapter: Chapter 4: The Conversations of Others

Oh my, this chapter was full of suspense. I wonder if Nathaniel is the one killing all those muggles. Something makes me think it's Demetri, or his father. Just guessing. It will be interesting if Genevieve agrees to be used as bait. Lol, I loved the part where Teddy told Tonks to go home and be with Remus, and she told him Remus was boring. Please post again soon. :)

Author's Response: I can safely say that Demetri is not killing Muggles; he's too busy with Genevieve. As for Genevieve being used as "bait", she will outright say no and no one will question the decision. Besides, little is still known about the entire thing. The next chapter will reveal a lot as to what is going on. Hopefully it will be up soon; its in the queue at this moment. Oh, and for Remus and Tonks, I've always had the image that Tonks will still want to be working for a long time (if they hadn't died *sob*). Thanks again for reading. :)

Reviewer: Crystal99
Date: 05/07/09 10:25
Chapter: Chapter 3: I Refuse to Become Another One of Your Mistresses

Nathaniel seems like quite the character. I can honestly say I don't like Demetri's father. I'm still not sure about Demetri though. Anyway, I enjoyed reading this chapter and now I'm off to read the next chapter. :)

Author's Response: Oh, Nathaniel. His character is definetely an interesting one to write; he is easily the most evil one that I have ever written and I enjoy it all the same. At that same token, Leopold is funny and Demetri, I love writing his character. Thanks for reading, Crystal. :)

Reviewer: Crystal99
Date: 05/06/09 9:50
Chapter: Chapter 2: A Change in Command

It was nice to read this chapter and see Tonks and Remus as an older couple, and to read about Teddy and Victoire as a married couple. Nice job. I'm looking forward to reading more.

Author's Response: Oh, yes, Remus and Tonks together. You knew I couldn't keep them apart! As for Teddy and Victoire, it's just so natural to me for them to be a couple. Same with everyone else. Again, I'm glad you liked this.

Reviewer: Crystal99
Date: 05/06/09 9:42
Chapter: Chapter 1: Wait... I Love You?

I'm sorry I didn't read this sooner. I missed your stories. I must say Genevieve reminds me of her Aunt Ginny. Full of fire and able to stand on her own two feet. Right now I have mixed feelings about Demetri. I don't know whether to like him or hate him. Anyway, I'm enjoying this story and look forward to reading more.

Author's Response: Crystal! I don't mind about not being able to read this sooner. Lol, I knew you would say that about Demetri. If you had read the prequel to this (which I'm sorry you can't), you would have greatly disliked him. As for this story... I'm keeping my mouth shut on that. I'm glad you liked this story. :)

Reviewer: olivia_weasley
Date: 04/27/09 16:27
Chapter: Chapter 4: The Conversations of Others

This story is quite interesting so far. I usually can't stand changes in POV, but you do it pretty well.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Usually, I don't like reading changes in POV either, but I like writing it that way since I like getting more than one perspective into the fic. It especially works nicely for this fic. Thank you again for reading and reviewing! :)

Reviewer: fruitandextranutcase
Date: 04/26/09 11:33
Chapter: Chapter 4: The Conversations of Others

Hey...

I really enjoyed your story. I liked all the connections between the characters, and of course with the original books. I'm also intrigued by the plot, and look forward to future updates. :)

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it and I'll be sure to update soon. :)

Reviewer: AlexPotter
Date: 04/15/09 11:45
Chapter: Chapter 3: I Refuse to Become Another One of Your Mistresses

Great story! It's so cool finding out a bit more about Teddy's life, and yay, Remus and Tonks are alive! Loved Demetri and Genevieve too! Well done

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! I'm glad you liked it. Yes, it is nice to Remus and Tonks alive again. :) I love Demetri and Genevieve, too.

Reviewer: inspirations
Date: 04/14/09 13:55
Chapter: Chapter 2: A Change in Command

Hello, Mercy. –hugs-

Right, then – chapter one. Well, at first I wasn’t sure whether I liked your beginning, because it kind of dives straight in, but then I thought about it and realised that knowing what their relationship was like was good. But, at the same time, the pairing bugs me. Purely because I find nine years a long time to be together – and they’re living in the same apartment, too – and only just get thinking about where they are. Do they love each other? Yes, they do, but they only realise this in this chapter. But Genevieve seems almost reluctant to bring it up because she’s afraid he’ll leave her. Which I understand, but... yeah. I’m beginning to confuse myself, sorry.

I like how Teddy comes in at the end; that was a nice touch – it made me grin. =)

Second chapter: firstly, I love you for keeping Remus and Tonks alive. And they’re exactly how I would imagine them too. Especially Tonks XD Anyway, you changed Teddy’s name to Theodore – why? /curious.

I loved the familiar atmosphere in this chapter, and the awkwardness that shrouds Genevieve’s name when it’s mentioned. Thing is though, all the names confused me, and then you piled a tonne of description of their appearance on top of that, and all in one big clump, too. Honestly, it is a lot of fun to describe your characters, build them up and all – but your readers won’t remember the details. When I describe my characters I will slip adjectives in now and again when they speak to build up a picture. It works better than all the character’s descriptions all together, and there’s possibly more chance that your reader will take it in too. You could try something similar, but if you do I’d recommend spreading the process out over chapters, as you have a lot of characters.

And one last thing – how cute are the kids! So sweet, I like that. And I have a few nit-picks for this chapter, too:

“Mum, maybe its time you retire.” - you need an apostrophe in ‘its’

Diana said frustrated as Hamish asked her why [...] “He’s makes his decisions before the trials - you need commas around ‘frustrated’ and ‘He’s’ should be ‘he’.

Cecilia, Bernadette, and Libby suddenly ran in the room. - ‘ran in to’ would sound better, I think. And you repeat ‘ran’ in the next sentence, too, which is slightly distracting [and there’s quite a bit of repetition in your ch. 20 extract.]

Sorry, I don’t have time to R and R the third chapter now. But intriguing story so far. xx

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading. I'm glad to finally have an opinion on this story. Okay, so about Demetri and Genevieve's whole "love" thing; Demetri knows where he stands and Genevieve is still unsure. The significance of all of it will come up later. Genevieve does contradict herself, since she doesn't want him to leave, but she doesn't want be "committed" at the same time (marriage is a big issue with her). Being with the same person for nine years, she would feel a bit lost without him and she doesn't want the whole "I told you so" from her family (which she knows she would get if he left). For chapter two, looking back, I do realized I introduced a lot of people at the same time (I keep doing that). After this chapter, though, it is a steady flow of introductions. I love the children, too. Thank you for catching the grammatical mistakes; I'll fix those right now. Thank you again for reviewing this. I greatly appreciate having an opinion and I'm glad you found it intruiging.

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