Reviews For Checkmate
Reviewer: Hermione101
Date: 02/14/09 8:49
Chapter: Only a Girl

I really like Savaric so I was kind of sad to see you portray him as so evil. i mean, i know he is ruthless and manipulative but I think he cares about Isla. Sorry, for kind of bashing you, I just want Savaric to marry Isla.

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing. Don't feel bad about giving your honest opinion. It just shows that you feel with the characters which is a good sign for every author, and me especially since I created Savaric.

Reviewer: clabbert2101
Date: 02/01/09 19:00
Chapter: Only a Girl

*waves* Guess what? It's your number one fan come to review! Aren't you surprised?

Interesting. You managed to show all the facets of Isla and Savaric's relationship in just this one little scene. The choice of chess was quite....hmm...how to put it, intriguing in light of all the chess references in chapter 13. Somehow, I get the feeling that Savaric is sadly mistaken when he thinks he'll win. Ah well. I feel sorry for him sometimes. When I'm not railing at him......

Always a pleasure to read about Isla!

Author's Response: Thanks a bunch, Bella! *hugs* Your reviews are always a pleasure to get.

Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 02/01/09 11:38
Chapter: Only a Girl

Intriguing story. At last I understand why she didn't marry Savaric. I enjoyed this very much. The tension throughout the tale is very well spun. I also enjoyed the characterisation of the pair.

I do have some nit picks:

and that she had learned playing it by her brother. To me this reads a touch awkwardly. I would rephrase it to something like 'and that she had been taught by her brother' or 'and that she had learned playing with her brother'

If you would like to play again, without the attitude,

I think that the phrase 'without the attitude' is an anachronism. It seems far too modern for someone like Isla Black. In my opinion, she'd be more likely to say 'If you would like to play again without this aggressive attitude' or, perhaps, 'without the harsh manner'.

Good story, though. I wanted to punch Savaric's smirk off his face at the end and it's not often I get so involved in a story - especially a one shot. Carole xxx

Author's Response: lol Carole. And thanks a lot for the review. I'll look into the sentences you nitpicked.

Reviewer: inspirations
Date: 02/01/09 5:56
Chapter: Only a Girl

Hey!

First off, unique idea. It was very interesting to read.

I loved the characterisation - of Savaric especially. The typical pureblood. I liked his sexism toward Isla and her calm way of dealing with his temper. It’s intriguing to wonder what was going on in her head - I think I would’ve been furious, but that doesn‘t seem to be a part of Isla‘s character. At least in this situation. xD

I like that Savaric believes in the old ‘boys beat girls’ thing. Obviously, he doesn’t like losing to anyone, so losing to a girl… Lol. And, is Isla his love interest? I haven’t read ‘Shining through Blackness’ yet, so I don’t know, but that‘s the impression I got in places.

This piece flowed really well - you must’ve worked well together to get it so.

Two nit-picks:

Sighing in silent disappointment, Savaric pulled back but didn’t let yet go of her. -’let go of her yet’.

‘A game?’ she asked confused, looking up at him. - I think there’s a comma after ‘asked’.

Good work!

xx

Author's Response: Thanks, spire! I'll look into your nitpicks.

Isla is Savaric's fiancée, and the engagement had been arranged by their parents. He wanted her and got her hand for the engagement, so yes, she's his interest. But if you want to know why he wanted her, whether or not he feels something for her and if they're going to get married in the end, you'll have to read "Shining Through Blackness". ;) *hintnudgeshint*

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