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Name: captburke (Signed) · Date: 02/07/09 20:50 · For: The Beginning of a Plan
There could be an adventure forthvoming.


Name: Equinox Chick (Signed) · Date: 01/21/09 12:54 · For: Out of the Frying Pan and Into the Fire
I love this! You have perfectly captured a moment after the prequel. Well done and so original. Your characterisation of the Marauders is, as ever, perfect. And you know how much I like my Marauders. Lily and Albus were good too. James and Sirius don't quite realise how much trouble they're in, do they?

As Sirius walked out of the kitchen, James pulled Lily into his arms. He knew her fears were justified. The sad part was, there was nothing he could say or do to alleviate her fears. Working for the Order was dangerous, just as it was the right thing to do, and he planned on continuing. This line just about says it all. It stopped me smiling because I remembered that they were working in a dangeous world.

Okay two nit picks. One, I'm afraid, is a pet peeve, so feel free to ignore.

So that’s why we haven’t gotten an owl from the Ministry yet.

'Gotten' is very much an American word. We don't use it in Britland and Sirius certainly wouldn't have used it in that era.

When we the two of you realise you are not invincible?

I think you mean 'will' not 'we'.

Minor, minor quibbles in a wonderful story. Are we going to get an insight into Wormtail's betrayal? Or will we find out why Sirius and Remus mistrusted each other?

Carole xxx


Name: captburke (Signed) · Date: 01/21/09 12:39 · For: The Disappearance
Good chapter. I can picture everything that is happening as if I was there.


Name: captburke (Signed) · Date: 01/16/09 19:05 · For: Out of the Frying Pan and Into the Fire
The beginning is good. I shall be looking forward to reading more.


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