Reviews For His Eyes
Reviewer: Nagini Riddle
Date: 07/02/12 20:45
Chapter: Chapter 1

Wow! I think what would have made this even better was if those last three words were inverted to say, Empty. Hard. Cold. I think it would have wrapped this poem up much better, because it would start with the word cold, and then ends with the same word. Other than that, I think it was great!

Author's Response: Thanks so much. That's actually a really good idea.

Reviewer: eva_writes
Date: 02/14/09 14:56
Chapter: Chapter 1

This was a very nice poem. it wa the title that drew me in... when there are poems or even stories about Lily most of them talk about her eyes, and so I though this was interesting. Nice work.

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Reviewer: sam_1034_lily
Date: 01/05/09 22:47
Chapter: Chapter 1

i really liked this poem

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: amzing
Date: 01/05/09 17:31
Chapter: Chapter 1

What a lovely poem.. I like the emphasis of the words old, hard, and empty.. They make very fitting ending and beginning statements... Good job : )

Author's Response: Thanks so much! That was actually my favorite part, as well.

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