Very cute. I can see Hermione's daughter sharing a book with a Muggle boy. Love that Victoire would have taken little Lily around but wouldn't she have been at Hogwarts at that time? Nice job, though. Very enjoyable.
Very cute. My only question is how old is Victoire supposed to be? She's at least a sixth year in the epilogue, though more likely a seventh year. Was she there to look after the kids since she was the older cousin? Otherwise well written, though how did Rose meet Rupert? Did she go to the Muggle school?
Wow. That is so funny! I'd like to see how harry would react.
Great. Only a Muggle would dress up as Vodemort. Only a Muggle. Love it.
That was so funny! I was laughing the whoile time, thinking of Harry's kids attacking the "Dak Lord"... I wonder what he would say... Great story!
LOL. Good story. I liked the way it’s centred around James being too old for trick or treating, though if James is too old, why is Victoire there? Isn’t she quite a few years older than the whole lot of them?
James strode confidently ahead of the others, jauntily swinging a cauldron in one hand and a lantern in the other. - yes, that sounds exactly like the James II I imagine. XD
The pride everyone feels in their monster costumes is funny. The idea of James dressed up as Nearly Headless Nick made me laugh. Hm… I wonder how he’d pull that one off?
The Weasley grandchildren had not been troubled by such oddities, and their cauldrons had begun to fill with sweets and chocolate, even some Muggle money. Rose was turning over a pound coin in her hand thoughtfully, wondering how many Knuts she could exchange it for.
My favourite part. I love the use of ‘oddities’ as the story is based at Halloween. And Rose examining the one-pound coin reminds me of Ron so much! In PS/SS (I think it was), Harry got some money from the Dursleys, which Ron found interesting. Though, admittedly, he probably wasn’t wondering how much he’d get in wizarding terms for it.
Rose lending a Muggle kid a wizarding History book - I like that. She’s Hermione’s daughter, so it’s quite an amusing concept when you consider her mother’s character.
A couple of nit-picks:
Victoire and Lily has smiled at them serenely and got on with business of finding silver cauldrons to match their outfits. - ‘had smiled’ and ‘the business’?
He wondered how the darkest being the wizarding world would react to having a lantern pole shoved up its… Rose! - ‘being in the’.
Good work. xx
i can only imagine what harry had to say about that!!! :-P good story!!