This was a wonderful piece of work that really captured Percy as we have never seen him. The language was beautiful and I think you really nailed down the emotional turmoil Percy went through. I especially loved the use of the picture and how each family member reacted differently to Percy. I loved the comparison between that lonely little tree and Percy.
One of my favorite line is this "Pain and loss emanated from within me in synchronicity to the bittersweet memories – every one like a knife’s thrust to my heart."
I think you did a wonderful job with this story. I did find one tiny mistake and it is here:
"Whatever I it was I had hoped to find, however, did not exist in reality." I think you meant to write "Whatever it was I had hoped..." without the "I".
Other than that, fantastic job!
This is a very wonderful and touching story. Never had much thought of how it might be viewed from Percy's side. Very well written indeed.
Author's Response: Thanks very much. I'm so glad you enjoyed the fic, and thank you for leaving such lovely comments!
AWwww this is a scene that should have been in JK's books. Great imagery and detail btw...wow you are good! I don't say that lightly!
thanks for bringing my favorite Weasley to life!
Author's Response: Aw, thanks for such a compliment! I'm really glad you enjoyed this story, and thanks so much for reciewing - you're my one faithful reviewer, lol!
Loving it! Good job...great attention to detail...banishing his clothes? YIKES! I am wondering why you didn't just make Maria...Audrey and kill the cannon bird with one stone...it would give the story a bit more drama because you know they wind up together so you'll wonder how they got from estranged to betroved but thats just an observation...great stuff so far!
Author's Response: Lol, glad you're enjoying it. Audrey was actually my initial plan, but the challenge prompt said the character I introduced had to be an original one... which rather killed the idea of Audrey! Last chapter coming soon x
A Percy fic! WOW finally! Very well written too, I might add! You gave him depth, remorse, pride, haughtiness...and made it all breathtakingly sympathetic. BRAVO! Please continue!
Author's Response: Thanks very much, I'm really glad you liked the characterisation and I'm definitely continuing, don't worry!