Lovely to see a new story from you! My head always spins a bit (in a good way) whenever I get a message you’ve posted another. A nice adrenaline swoop….
As always, you go for the complicated, layered, ambiguous, not-always-so-easily-likable characters—and handle them with intelligence and delicacy and and insight and humor. (In response to a comment someone made on your evolving Dumbledore/Gellert story: here’s where we see the Austen influence over the Bronte: in the subtlety and precision of the human observations, not to mention the always-impressive subtlety and precision of the phrasing. The small details carry the bulk of the meaning, and create the emotional wallop, sans melodrama. (Not that I don’t love the Brontes, sturm, drang, and all…. And *Melville* as an influence??? hmm…interesting….must ponder…)
Love the little nuanced twists and turns here—the little negotation about whether Regulus can come in, the tentative eagerness of the gift-giving, the sudden injections of hostility… the sense that, for Regulus, *Sirius* is the bad guy, the dangerous one, the incomprehensible betrayer of the family… and the sense of Sirius’ lingering shame at being the big disappointment to his parents (despite his very real and firm Gryffindor convictions)…. after all, he gave his dad cockroach clusters because his dad *liked* them… and he didn’t *stomp* on the heirloom pin (just carried it around, literally, as baggage), and he doesn’t mock his brother for taking pride in inheriting it. These are two young men in a confusing, lonely situation—they clearly miss each other, but can’t really reconcile without losing who they are, or at least who they’re becoming. (Nice to see you take a more sympathetic angle on the Sirius you’ve skewered so effectively [and delightfully, hee! hee!] elsewhere!!)
Love the pretty girl, motorcycle, pretty girl on motorcycle (oh, teenage life in the 70s…)…the idea that Regulus got them on a drunken Slytherin dare, but recognized Sirius would enjoy them, and *wanted* him to enjoy them (but isn’t yet publicly willing to be associated with giving them)…. gives a sense of the half-conformist / half-rebellious Regulus who’d go on to become a Death Eater, but who would ultimately turn on Voldemort, even knowing it would cost him his life.
The two boys are very different, yet you make them very believable as brothers, and both poignant in the inevitable damage they’re taking (and, as we know, will continue to take). A rich situation…. would love to see you go on with their story/stories (or, frankly, with any story you’d choose to turn your hand to)!!
Aw, this was a really nice moment, even if they ended up hating each other, as soon as they went back to school. I've always kind of liked the idea that Regulus wasn't evil to the core ... especially since book 7, of course. It's nice (but also sad) to think he had this whole other side Sirius never really saw ...
How sweet, it's a pitty how their lives turned out. I hope they really did have moments like this.
Always enjoy your stories. The ability to see all sides of a character is a gift. Thank you for sharing it with me.
I love how you weave details from JKR's stories into you writing.
good one...you know, i actually believe that regulus might have given his brother those Muggle things...
Nice work :)