I never thought of Luna as one who plays the viola, but...I like it!
And I got the "it's often infested with..." thing. She was gonna say, "nargles," wasn't she? Just like she said to Harry in OotP? Or was it HBP?
Anyhow. I love this story.
Author's Response: She was indeed going to say "nargles". Just like OotP. :-) I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I've always envisioned Luna playing the cello or the bassoon - something rather large and unusual. But the viola is a lovely instrument. And I love the name "viola".
:D Great job!
I really like the theme you used for the piece, and I think you characterized both Neville and Luna pretty well. It was well written, simple and elegant. The end was perfect: sweet and akward. :)
Author's Response: I've been thinking of writing another story (although not one about Neville and Luna) and getting a new review after such a long time is very encouraging. Thank you!
Awww! Indigo! That was adorable! Neville and Luna are just adorable together! You had both characters bang on. Luna's explanation of the musical instruments was brilliant and Neville's lack of bravery was so... it was just an amazing story Indigo!
A few teensy nit-picks:
"Neville grabbed her hand and ran towards the dysfunctional toilet." I think here it would be better to say "Luna's hand" otherwise it kinda sounds like he grabs Mrs Norris' hand :-p
"Moments later, in a cubical with scorch marks on wall." I think you mean "Scorch marks on the wall."
"No side excursions, right?" Maybe: "No outside excursions"?
Apart from those very nit-picky things, the story was fantastic and totally adorable! Well done! *hugs*
Russia xxxxx
Author's Response: Thank you, thank you! You are bang right on the first two. On the last point... I did mean "side excursions" as opposed to "outside excursions". A side excursion would be Luna going off an unrelated corridor to look for some fabulous beast she thought she saw... it could also be outside, but not necessarily. I don't really think that Neville lacked bravery, though. I think *he* thought he wasn't brave. After all, he was doing these very dangerous things, even though he was scared. To me that is the epitome of bravery - doing something you are afraid of because you think its the right thing. I'm so glad you liked it! *hugs back*
Thank you so much!!!!!!
I love it.
And the viola you slipped in there.
xxx
Author's Response: I listened to a lot of chamber music with viola while writing this! It expanded my horizons considerably. Merry Christmas!
That was simply charming - and very true to the characters! Thank-you!!!
Author's Response: And thank you for the review!
