First, I have a confession to make: I was partial to this story from the moment I understood it was about an English queen. I love everything that relates to monarchy and kings and queens! (I'm a big fan of Eleanor of Aquitaine) So to me, you did a great job at describing the interaction between the queen and her chambermaid. I don't know much about Queen Katherine, but she seemed to me like a fair person, which made me like her. I also liked the insight you gave us on how important it was for Maria to not give away her secret and how everything could be destroyed with only one little suspiscion. Times must have been really hard for witches/wizards at the time...
Your dialogues are well written too. I like the tone you gave to the Queen, firm, royal, but still friendly. I think you captured well the way people used to talk back then, the little twists in the sentences and the expressions. It's when I read stories like yours that I notice I could never write something like this; I still many things to learn in English!
There's maybe one part where I got a little confused... As the queen continued to moan, Maria kept her back turned to the room and pulled out her wand.
“Smart girl,” she heard rasped from behind her.
Does this mean that the Queen knew about Maria real identity? Or did she just mean it was a smart move to close the door? It wasn't very clear to me... Other than that, I had a nitpick, but now I can't find it anymore, so I guess it wasn't very important. Hehe. :P So all I can say is great job my dear. I really enjoyed your story! Can't wait to read the sequel!
Hello, Kat :)
This was an absolutly awesome story. I couldn't help but think it would end with her being burned at the stake, or something.
But that was a really nice ending.
A couple of questions, though. Did all this stuff really happen to Katherin? As in, did she really have still births?
I only ever heard that she never brought about an heir. Lol, I'm not too good on this topic.
And also, did Richard tell the Queen purposely to get Maria to run away with him?
This was a really interesting oneshot. I actually do love it. I haven't a clue why no one else has reveiwed yet.
I do have one problem though. Although it is really small.
I find it odd when Richard says '“Milady, what happens now?”'
Up untill then he has always used her given name. So I find it odd that he suddenly goes polite.
But that was all.
That was seriously cool, Kat :)
Author's Response: Yes, this really did happen to Katherine. She had many still births (I think it was 5 or 6, however many I've mentioned.) And she did give birth do Princess Mary, who later became Queen Mary (Bloody Mary), whom Elizabeth I took the thrown from. I love history xD And Richard didn't tell! >.< I'm writing a sequel, no worries, much will be cleared up. Thank you so much for the review!