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Name: iLuna17 (Signed) · Date: 10/27/10 15:55 · For: Chapter 1: Trains and Friends
I like it. I think that this has some great potential, and up to now, I do not have any complaints. Keep it up!

Author's Response: thanks a lot! I'm really glad you liked it :).

Name: nesyatatiana (Signed) · Date: 10/26/10 8:45 · For: Chapter 8: Impacts and Consequences
like father like son... i cant wait for the next story..

Author's Response: :) Thanks for the review! I'll try and update ASAP. :D

Name: Xx-BananaBookworm-xX (Signed) · Date: 10/02/10 10:13 · For: Chapter 7: Spells and Flames
Ooh, update soon please!

Author's Response: hey! :) Thanks for the review! And I'll try to update ASAP. Right now I've got LOTS of homework and a crazy science Olympiad on top of my head, not to mention designing the yearbook and all... Basically RL's been keeping me so busy that I didn't have any time to write. :(. But I PROMISE the next chapter will be up by this month, ok? :) Thanks again! --Nadia

Name: Hermione759 (Signed) · Date: 09/19/10 18:31 · For: Chapter 7: Spells and Flames
I really like this. The idea of one of harry's kids running into the same problems as he did is interesting. Please keep writing

Author's Response: thanks a lot! :) I'm glad you liked it! And don't worry, I'll keep updating ^_^. Though the next update will be a wee bit late cuz I've got RL problems, school and a partial writer's block :P. But I will submit the next chapter by the end of this month, I promise! Then you just gotta wait till its validated! :D Thanks again!--Nadia

Name: American Weasley (Signed) · Date: 09/14/10 12:45 · For: Chapter 1: Trains and Friends
Great story so far this is the first I've read it and I just loved George's reaction to Fred being a Prefect this seems to me to be exactly what George would say. Also nicely done on Al being the one to give Scorpius a chance given the family history there between Draco & Harry. Can't wait to read more.

Author's Response: hey, thank you so much! I'm really glad you liked it all :). --Nadia

Name: verypotterfan (Signed) · Date: 09/12/10 14:26 · For: Chapter 7: Spells and Flames
I love it!!!!!!!!!!!!! I hope that you keep along this awesome path!!!! just don't make it seem to much like GOF cause then it would just be wierd.

Author's Response: Hey, thanks a lot! I'm glad you liked it! :D And yes, I'm trying to make it as un-GOF as possible, I dunno how much I'll be able to do.... I mean, the next chapter is probably a lot like GOF. I'm trying to work on it though... but please dont stop reading! The rest is completely original, I assure you :) Thanks a lot for the lovely review!--Nadia

Name: Shingo (Signed) · Date: 09/10/10 3:08 · For: Chapter 1: Trains and Friends
Well, it's quite an interesting story, and I am enjoying it very much. However, I feel like I got to point out a few things: first of all you are staying too close to J. K. Rowling's style, some parts even feel like word for word extracts but at the same time you are lacking her descriptive skills (you shouldn't be offended by that, her descriptive skills are what make her amazing), so I personally think you should try to show your own style a little more (that doesn't mean you shouldn't try copying her considering the good job you are doing).
Now the dialogues are what bug me the most. Then again they are what bug me most in most fan fictions (even the ones I write), in your case I feel like the dialogues are kind of clumsy, but I can't really complain considering mine are probably worse...
Now story wise, I have to say it's really enjoyable. funny and entertaining. It resembles a lot something Rowling would write. However, I'm confused on some points: who is Louis? I'm guessing the second kid of Fleur and Bill considering his name is french and that he is a cousin of Albus, but Louis is a boy's name, while when you spoke about Victoire, you spoke about her little sister, so I am confused on that point. And finally, the way you narrate the story has a rather Hermionish organisation to it, which sometimes is good, but at some points it kind of breaks the flow.
I hope you are not offended by any of those points, because all in all, I think your fanfiction is really good, and I can't wait to read the rest.

Author's Response: Hey there! Thanks for the review, and no, Iím not offended at all. In fact, I appreciate it a lot :). Constructive criticism helps me improve the story, so donít worry! Anyway, Iím really working on how to improve my own style. You see, I wrote the first six-seven chapters when I was around fourteen. Iím sixteen now. My writing style then and my style now is totally different. Before, I used to try and exactly copy JKRís style of writing. Now I try to keep her tone with my own plots and style, because technically this is supposed to be my version of a sequel to the series. So basically as you read on, youíll see a dramatic change in the style of writing :P. Itís the same case for dialogues, too. And to answer your question, by the way, Louis IS Bill and Fleurís son. They have 3 children in total: Victoire, Dominique and Louis. You can check out the Weasley family Tree for more reference, just google it :) Anyway, thanks a bunch for the lovely review! And Iím glad youíre enjoying the story. I hope youíll come back for the next chapters! And good luck for your own stories, by the way! ^_^

Name: RavenclawAspirant (Signed) · Date: 09/09/10 19:33 · For: Chapter 5: Sacks and Glass Jars
Once agian i liked it a lot i just had one suggestion. It seemed wierd to me that Nearly Headless Nick was calling them "kids" it think he is too formal for that.

Author's Response: Aww, thanks again! I'll go change the "kids" thing right now, ok? And once again, thank a bunch for your lovely reviews and feedback :) They mean a lot to me!

Name: RavenclawAspirant (Signed) · Date: 09/08/10 20:33 · For: Chapter 3: Surprises and More Surprises
This is great! I am having so much fun reading this story. The one thing that i would suggest is to work on the bit when they talk to Scorpius i think it is a bit to abrupt. Also i really like your idea of having other countries (maybe it is just because i am an american :-) but i always wished the US was mentioned and i love the name)

Author's Response: Wow, thanks! I'll keep in mind about the Scorpius thing too... I'll try to work on those bits. And about the different countries... I'm Bangladeshi :P. I always wondered how it'd be if Bangladesh was mentioned somewhere, so this thing just popped into my head. I needed another country, and America came into my head first and as we already knew about Salem, I decided to write it. Glad you like the name! Anyway, thanks for the review and I hope you come back for more! --Nadia

Name: RavenclawAspirant (Signed) · Date: 09/08/10 20:13 · For: Chapter 1: Trains and Friends
I really like this story! My favorite thing is how you manage to follow the books so well while making it something new. I really feel like i am reading a sequel!

Author's Response: Oh, wow, thanks so much for the compliment! It's very flattering^_^... I'm really glad you liked it! And originally in my draft I had begun the first chapter like, "The train rounded the corner and Albus caught a last fleeting glance of his father and blah blah blah" like I'm starting off from the epilogue... but then people told me not to do it, So I gave an introductory paragraph :P. Anyway, thanks a lot for reading, and I hope you come back for more! :)--Nadia

Name: LunaLover203 (Signed) · Date: 09/08/10 14:13 · For: Chapter 7: Spells and Flames
Really good
write some more soon i want to find out what harry'll say and how his name got there

Author's Response: Thanks a lot! :) The next chapter has a lot of Harry in it, so you won't be disappointed :P. I've already sent chapter 8 to my beta, so... it'll be around a fortnight before you get it! Please come back for more! :)--Nadia

Name: lilypotter1326 (Signed) · Date: 09/07/10 16:10 · For: Chapter 7: Spells and Flames
Oh MY GOSH!!!!!!!!!! i love this story the whole under age thing in the triwizard tournoment has now happened twice

Author's Response: :D :D :D Wow, thanks a lot for the review! Imagine my surprise when I see this first thing in the morning! I'm glad you liked the story... there's more to come, so don't forget to come back for the later chapters! :) --Nadia

Name: LunaLover203 (Signed) · Date: 09/03/10 7:43 · For: Chapter 1: Trains and Friends
Love the idea of Scorpious being a gryffindor and Harry being one of the judges
Great Story PLEASE write soom more soon!

Author's Response: Aww, thanks a lot! :) The next chappie will be up soon, promise! It's in queue right now. I hope you'll come back for it! --Nadia

Name: emck_21 (Signed) · Date: 08/16/10 8:54 · For: Chapter 4: Howlers and Classes
Poor little Scorpius...no one deserves a Howler from their abusive, psychotic ex-Death Eater grandfather...

Author's Response: yeah, I know... Howlers suck, don't they? I'm glad WE don't have howlers. Instead, we get voicemails and telephone calls :P

Name: emck_21 (Signed) · Date: 08/16/10 8:49 · For: Chapter 3: Surprises and More Surprises
Ha, I love it - it's called Albus Potter and the Triwizard Tournament, and...guess what, there's a triwizard tournament! I never saw that one coming :)

Kidding, by the way. I actually really like it so far :)

Author's Response: LOL. Hope you don't mind the changes in the tournament! And I'm glad you liked it! :D

Name: emck_21 (Signed) · Date: 08/16/10 8:46 · For: Chapter 2: Songs and Sortings
Scorpius is a Malfoy? I mean...Scorpius is a Gryffindor? I wonder what his daddy thinks...

Author's Response: lol, yes, Scorpius is a Malfoy AND a Gryffindor :P. And his Daddy is ok with it. :) Why, you may ask? You will find that out in the next few chapters... OR in the third book ;)

Name: emck_21 (Signed) · Date: 08/16/10 8:43 · For: Chapter 1: Trains and Friends
Told you I'd read it :) It's actually really good, so far. Eventually I might even read the rest...

Author's Response: Ooo, thanks, Emily! I'm really glad you liked it! :D

Name: HP526 (Signed) · Date: 08/13/10 14:29 · For: Chapter 6: Trains, Stars and Goblets
Great story so far... I would like to see the story get finished. Nice ideas.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it. And yes, I'm definitely gonna finish this story, and once that's done, keep your eye out for the sequel! :) --Nadia

Name: bigtimer (Signed) · Date: 07/16/10 13:11 · For: Chapter 4: Howlers and Classes
i do how like how you've written malfoy jr. and draco. can't wait for the triwizard tourny it's going to be great.

Author's Response: Aww, thanks! I'm glad you liked it :) I hope you like the tournament too.... now I've got to live up to your expectations! :D Thanks again, and hope you come back for more!!--Nadia

Name: Abigail Weasley (Signed) · Date: 07/12/10 14:47 · For: Chapter 4: Howlers and Classes
I loved the idea of Scorpius being in Gryffindor. Very original, definitely something I wasn't expecting. However, it does seem a tad out of character, in my opinion, for Draco Malfoy to be so keen on the idea. The way I understood it in the actual books was that he may be able to shake hands with Harry, even have a glimmer of respect for him-- but for him to suddenly be a muggle-lover that goes against everything he believed as a kid is a bit much for me. Then again, that's just me.

I also loved the idea of Fred Weasley being a prefect and George's initial reaction to finding out that he had become a prefect. Pure Gold, again, because it's not something you normally expect. However, it does make the characters more believable. After all, just because you have the Weasley name doesn't necessarily mean you have to live up to it by being an all-around prankster.

The story is starting off a bit slow, but I would like to read more of what there is to come! Keep it up!

Author's Response: Hey, thanks for the awesome review!! I really appreciate it. :) And yeah, I know that it really seems quite OOC that Draco would be so considerate and all, but Draco didn't really become a Muggle-lover. Its just that he realized his mistakes, and though he still is quite like before, he doesn't want his son to grow up like that. You'll see more of that in the next chapter :). He doesn't think that Muggles are worthless, but he wouldn't be so keen on them like Harry or the Weasleys. Draco's change is actually a subplot in itself, but I'm not sure if I should give it in this book or not. .And Fred and Scorpius-- those were just strokes of inspiration :P. I thought that they would be fun to read about. Anyways, I hope you'll come back for more! The next chapter is basically about more classes, but the pace picks up from chapter 6 and 7 Thanks for reading! --Nadia

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