Rhi, your Lucius has just blown me away here. You have his character so marvelously depicted – his mannerisms, thought process, superiority, properness – it was all spot on.
the cooks had produced their finest; the butlers had been unassuming yet accommodating, as was proper; and the maids had committed extra effort to making the house spotless—but then, that was what he paid them for. He expected no less.
I thought that this snippet portrayed not just Lucius well, but purebloods as a whole in perfect light. They feel themselves superior, and I think it is very much so in their character to take the credit for such things. Their worlds are to be perfect, so why should Lucius have expected anything else from his employees? You depicted that very, very well throughout the passage.
No one likes the role they were born to play, but they play it nonetheless, for the audience is waiting and the show must go on.
Um, wow. That was my reaction to this line – it was such an amazing metaphor, full of power and truth in Lucius’ world. And I could also see Lucius saying this. He tends to speak very formally, and I think that this would fit his speech and dialogue as well as character.
So you see, Draco, only by wearing our masks could we do our duties so well, save our families black shame
I adored this line because it was had some really great imagery, particularly ‘black shame’. I really like the concept of the Malfoys wearing masks, even though it’s a popular idea among fanfiction writers, because it fits them so very well.
You took this idea and gave it a sweet little twist by having Lucius envision himself telling Draco his own little story about having once loved someone else, even though he never actually told Draco. It gave Lucius that bit of a fatherly side because he wanted to talk to Draco, but showed that he also remember that it probably wouldn’t be accepted by his ‘society’, and so he just continues on to bed. I thought it was really good characterization.
This was very good little Lucius Malfoy one-shot, dear. His character really shone through in this and gave the reader a little insight into Lucius’ head. Good work; keep it up!
Author's Response: *hugs teh Haylee* This so totally made my day. (I <3 SPEW!) I appreciate your thoughtful and kind review so much. Thanks for all the effort you put in. You make me happy. :) <333333 Rhi
Excellent! It was great to see inside Lucius's head for once. I've always liked how much the Malfoys cared about Draco.
It did make me a bit sad, how they wear 'masks'. At least the Malfoys care about each other, if they don't care about their party guests. "We were already dead to each other." =[
Also, I particularly liked the imagery in the beginning. Great story!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for a great review! :) I like how Lucius & Narcissa dote on him, too-- though, you know, I've seen in a fair amount of fics Lucius portrayed as cold and/or abusive to Draco-- I mean, yes, he had firm standards he expected his son to meet, but all parents do... Ahem. I'd better stop now before I really get going! XD
I thought this story was very well done and showed an interesting facet of Lucius’ personality. It was a nice slice of life of the privileged pure-blood set and I particularly liked how he took credit for the success of the party.
The only criticism I had for the story was the use of butlers and maids, since I think they would exclusively use house elves, or at least that form of magic wherein everything would appear and disappear automatically, but that’s just me.
Otherwise, I thought the title suited the story perfectly and Lucius’ musings were very effective. It was sort of sad that he decided against sharing this moment with Draco.
Author's Response: *huggles teh secret santa* Thanks so much for reviewing, Leah (especially this story-- oh so sad without any reviews)! I just put the butlers and maids in there 'cos I figured they only had Dobby but you're right, they probably had tons of house-elves. Meh. Thanks again... Slyths rule! <33 Rhi