Reviewer: captburke
Date: 06/03/09 22:35
Chapter: Enemy of the Confederation

You do write a good story. Thought a couple chapters of The Lands Below were a little mundane, I still enjoyed them. Can't wait to see if there is going to be an 8th grade story.
Will you be posting chapters here or on your LiveJournal?

Author's Response:

Of course there will be an 8th grade story. ;) I will post it here when I've finished writing it. I only use my LJ for announcements.

Thanks for all the reviews! Yes, I have to agree that there were probably a few chapters in this story that really could have been trimmed -- one of my goals for Book Three is to make the story a little bit tighter and less wordy. We'll see whether I succeed...

Reviewer: fan_fic_fan
Date: 06/03/09 21:12
Chapter: Enemy of the Confederation

Wonderfully done. Thanks again for a great story. I am greatly looking forward to the next one!

Reviewer: I-luv-Hogwarts
Date: 06/03/09 16:10
Chapter: Enemy of the Confederation

I am sorry that I haven't really rewiewed.
Your Story is really, really good.
You are offically on my top 3 authors list!
Wrie more!!!!

Reviewer: Silverah
Date: 06/03/09 15:38
Chapter: Enemy of the Confederation

I've been a reader of yours for a while now, but this is my first time reviewing. Anyway, now that that awkward introduction is out of the way, can I just say - What an exhilarating read! With both Alexandra Quick fics, one of the things that really amazes me is how you've managed to take the Harry Potter world's idiosyncrasies and conceits and to expand it out to something that is both incredibly unique unto itself but also feels perfectly enmeshed into the larger wizarding world. The American wizarding society you created is both something totally original and something that feels like it could have been something created by JK Rowling. I applaud you for accomplishing this.
You're incredibly versatile as a writer. I envy that you can shift pretty much seamlessly between emotional moments and action sequences without either one beginning to feel confusing or tedious. Your characters all feel like real people who respond to their surroundings and to each other. You strike a good balance between plot-driven characters and character-driven plot. :)

Anyways, excellent work all around and I am eagerly looking forward to Alexandra's next adventure!

Reviewer: Gingerbread Man
Date: 06/03/09 14:39
Chapter: Enemy of the Confederation

I really hope Constance and Forbearance come back, they've got some steel under them. A bit unfair, to drop on us that they might not return right at the end like that. ;)

Author's Response:

"They've got some steel under them" -- I like that, and you're absolutely right.

I think I won't be giving away too much by telling you that you will see more of the Pritchards, and their steel.

Reviewer: bigtimer
Date: 06/03/09 8:59
Chapter: Enemy of the Confederation

great ending, i knew her father had something to do with then people panicing. I"m soo happy to hear that this isn't the last story for alex, i love her chacter so much keep up the great writting and i can't wait for the next story.

Reviewer: fishstep
Date: 06/03/09 8:08
Chapter: The Mall

I am so enjoying your Alexander Quick story - you should really get this published someday! I look forward to the next installment!

Reviewer: captburke
Date: 05/30/09 20:36
Chapter: In Memoriam

Very sad time for Alex, Julia, Mrs King and Max's friends. Losing someone you love is never easy. Wonder if Abraham knew what was in store for Alex and Max and who would come back. That man needs a good swift kick.
And why is our old friend Diana meeting Alex? Will the WJD try again to find out what happened? How will everything that's happened affect Charmbridge? How will Alex make it through the summer?

Reviewer: hopelesslyhopeful
Date: 05/30/09 11:01
Chapter: In Memoriam

I am so glad that Alex and Julia talked about Max. I was worried Alex would just keep everything all bottled up and not let anyone help her grieve. I still don't believe Max is truly dead...his death is a perfect cover for him to become an active member of the Thorn Circle without being under suspicion.
Alex really needs to have a big conversation with her mother now, despite her mother's wish to remain ignorant of the wizarding world. Alex needs her mom to help her cope with the loss of Max and allowing her to visit the Kings over the summer would be good for both Alex and Julia.
The cliffhanger is fabulously frustrating. I wonder if Abraham Thorn now has the last piece he needed to bring the Confederation down and he has now begun his assault. I'm worried that Grimm is going to do something horrible to isolate her or something. I have been wondering for a while if the Dean and her sister have ever used their 'twinness' to exchange places or impersonate each other...this appears to be an instance where that would benefit Alex quite well.
In any case, an excellent chapter. The memorial service, meeting the White's, Martin's request to assist the was all written so well. Can't wait to see what happens next! Have you finished the next story already?

Reviewer: bigtimer
Date: 05/30/09 9:28
Chapter: In Memoriam

oh no what has her father done now, it's gotta be him. what will grimm do to alex, you've just gotta write another story after this one the charthers are just too good. well done another amazing chapter and i can't wait for the next one.

Reviewer: captburke
Date: 05/27/09 12:39
Chapter: Return to Roanoke

Don't want to be Abraham Thorn when Alex sees him again.

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 05/27/09 8:29
Chapter: Return to Roanoke

Makes me wonder if all the memories were returned.

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 05/27/09 8:14
Chapter: Beneath Charmbridge

I reread the previous two chapters to see what I might have missed on the first read.

Very subtlely one can see what the generous ones were saying, though I don't think it was contract in the sense that Maximillian agreed to. Is it possible that the Generous Ones have been in contact with Abe before and deduced that he wanted one of his kids to die. The contract was always with Abe Thorn not Maximillian.

This does make Alexandras rage against Daddy Dearest all the more justified. What was the original plan. Was Max supposed to go alone? It appears not unless Abe was really clueless about what the Generous Ones were really all about. I would think after 20+ years Abe with all his contacts would know that a sacrifice had to be given.

I had previously thought that between Max and Abe that they had come up with a way to cheat the Generous Ones and not have to kill anyone. My only reasoning for this was that I felt that Alex coming back alone would be too suspicious for Dean Grimm. (I also assumed that time did not pass the same in the underworld). I did not account on Alex being Obliviated.

The question is now is Abe as evil as we and Alex think he is?

Unlike Alex, I do not think Abe intended to sacrifice her. I think he meant to have Maximillian offer to die himself to save her.

Reviewer: fan_fic_fan
Date: 05/26/09 23:48
Chapter: The Mall

Let me echo the previous reviewer. It is a great gift that you are willing to share your talent with us in this forum. I am as engrossed in this novel as I have been in any book in a long time. What a wonderfully rich story you are telling!

Reviewer: ahattab33
Date: 05/26/09 18:00
Chapter: Return to Roanoke

All the way through to the end, your story is gripping and leaves the reader wanting more! Although you hear it a lot, I'm sure you don't tire of hearing how great this story is, of how great these characters are and this world with Alex is. I frequently read this on my phone, and therefore don't always leave reviews (or leave reviews that are short), but I wanted to tell you here towards the end of this journey that I will follow your stories to the end of Alex's journey, however long you decide to write them.

I am conflicted on how I feel about Thorn's actions concerning Alex's memories, but I think ultimately in the end it probably helped her, regardless of his motives. I wonder if it is possible to make a copy of memories, if he would want to do so for further studies of the Lands Below?

Though I've never lost someone close to me, and certainly never in this tragic a situation, this chapter was wonderfully written, for it conveyed throughout it her grief and numbness without becoming overwhelming. I teared up at several points.

I firmly, however, refuse to believe that Max is dead! (Imagine a stubborn girl, arms crossed, pouty lips.) All of the signs that are pointing to that could point to that even if he were separated from them in the Lands Beyond but still alive, if someone could figure out a way to help him. No one knows anything about it, really, so there's no reason to think it wouldn't be possible. So I'm going to think it is.

Can't wait for the next two chapters (for I thought I read that it was 37 for this part of Alex's saga?), but at the same time it will be bittersweet waiting for the next installment.

Reviewer: crystalphoenix
Date: 05/22/09 23:34
Chapter: Beneath Charmbridge


Reviewer: ahattab33
Date: 05/22/09 19:17
Chapter: Beneath Charmbridge

OMGOMG He did not! (That soundsl like an indignant valley girl wagging my finger at him) I'm surprised that Alex's rage really didn't break the spell, I could almost feel it coming out of my computer. Wow. This story became very intense, and I feel for Alex. Great writing as always, and I hope to see the next chapter up soon...I made the mistake of finding your illustration thread on the boards...

Reviewer: captburke
Date: 05/22/09 13:08
Chapter: Beneath Charmbridge

I'm thinking he Obliviated her.

Reviewer: potterchassid
Date: 05/22/09 3:54
Chapter: Beneath Charmbridge

“Just how clueless were you, really, about what the Generous Ones wanted, about what you'd have to trade?” she demanded.

Her father rose to his feet, and his expression became a scowl. “Generous ones? I don't understand you.”

“Maybe you knew that someone had to die to get what you wanted,” she went on. “You're the one who knows so much about how terrible the Confederation is and how it makes deals –”

“Alexandra, you're making no sense!” he snapped.

So Abraham Thorn was clueless about the Lands Below?

Anyway, barely two chapters after AT started becoming more likeable, when we discovered he had pushed for the Elf Protection Act, he is becoming less likeable once again.

Is Max really gone? Poor Alexandra. Is there no way to still rescue him?

Reviewer: Gryffindor93
Date: 05/18/09 21:28
Chapter: The Most Terrible Gift

This story is really amazing so far. The plot is well structured, complex, and full of unexpected twists. The characters are also well developed, and I have really come to care about them. I particularly like the dynamic between Alexandra and her brother. I was really sad when I read this chapter, and I can't believe Max is dead. You're a great writer and I hope you continue.

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