Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 03/13/10 21:16
Chapter: Snakes in the Grass

Wow--snake stuff. I hate snakes but I don't think I hate them enough to do the mean things the MMS was doing to them. I'm totally with Alex on this one. Why conjure something for your convenience and then kill it. I'm so happy to have found your stories. Alex is such a wonderful character. Great chapter.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 03/13/10 20:30
Chapter: Threats

I think Alex's injuries were a little suspicious. I think Max had something to do with it. I was happy to hear that he'd been disciplined. I can appreciate Alex's threats to Tomo. I don't like Tomo. She's a little brat. Great chapter.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 03/13/10 19:56
Chapter: The Mors Mortis Society

I agree with Alex regarding Anna--there are times when you have to stop whining about your life and get on with things. It sounds like the MMS has quite an odd assortment of people. To be honest, I'd probably join. It's the intrigue and pull of that Dark power. Great chapter.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 03/13/10 8:19
Chapter: New Wands

I smiled a lot during this chapter. If Alex thought Bible camp was bad her military training could be worse. While I feel bad for Alex and Anna I think this experience will be good for them in the long run. Alex, in particular, needs to learn more self control. Anna should've known better. I also feel bad that Tomo doesn't seem to have been punished more severely. It looked to me like she started this whole thing.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 03/12/10 19:32
Chapter: Cultures

That was a really interesting and relevant chapter. I can't believe Anna is involved in any trouble. This is going to be interesting for Alex to figure out--Anna's going about things very sneakily. Great chapter.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 03/11/10 21:25
Chapter: Stormcrows

Did I mention that I love the Pritchards? Actually I love all of Alex's friends. You've done such a great job of creating all of these new characters. I'd forgotten that they'd been banned from Grundy's. Poor Darla. She really didn't deserve to be be embarrassed in this way. Sometimes people can be so mean. Why is it that sometimes we wish for someone to get their comeuppance but when they do it's so painful to watch? Great chapter.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 03/11/10 14:03
Chapter: The Special Inquisitor

Alex is way faster than I am. I didn't realize that this Ms. Grimm was Lilith's twin. Life would be a lot easier if Alex could talk to her mother about being a witch. I have an odd feeling that this Ms. Grimm knows Legilimens and knows that Alex is lying about hearing from her father. Great chapter.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 03/11/10 13:44
Chapter: The Mall

I loved the first Alexandra Quick book so I thought I'd read the second one next. It's hard to believe but there really are some church groups who think that witches are evil. What Alex made happen at Bible camp was pretty funny. I wonder if anyone associated those things with her. I was so afraid that dumb Billy or one of his friends was going to grab Alex's wand. Thank goodness Ms. Grimm showed up. She must be keeping an eye on Alex over the summer. Great chapter.

Reviewer: AnDream
Date: 12/15/09 15:42
Chapter: The Mall

I love this! I read both of them in like a week. (Your probably responsible for me not doing homework in the past few days:P) Keep writing! This stuffs aMaZiNg!

Reviewer: bellanca
Date: 07/27/09 12:59
Chapter: Enemy of the Confederation

Wow! That's about all I can say. I am so in love with your writing, your characters, your massive brilliantly thought out world, wow. I started the Thorn Circle a couple days ago to get an good idea for some drawings and read both stories as straight through as I could manage. My only complaint is that I stayed up Way to late reading, I couldn't stop! I can hardly wait to read more, I'm not great at reviewing but I'll be one of the frist to read every chapter. I am working on some fan art I hope to do some scenes out of both stories. Wow!

Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad you liked it. Can't wait to see what you draw!

Reviewer: hpotterfan339
Date: 07/12/09 23:36
Chapter: Enemy of the Confederation

This story was well written and thought out. Usually, a lot of details crowds a story and detracts from the actual plotline, but you've managed to enhance the story with the multitude of details that you provide. If there is one fanfic online that can surpass Alexandra Quick and the Thorn Circle it is this one. Thank you, and I can hardley wait for the next installment in the fantastic Alexandra Quick series

Reviewer: MetamorphmagusLupin
Date: 07/06/09 14:27
Chapter: Enemy of the Confederation

These stories are so captivating. I get just as much into the story of Alexandra Quick as I do the story of Harry Potter. I am so intrigued to find out more about Alexandra and Abraham Thorn and the Confederation and the Thorn Circle. You have done an excellent job of creating an American wizarding world that really feels like it completely works within what J.K. Rowling conceived. Fantastic! When do we get to begin reading about Alexandra's third year at Charmbridge?

Reviewer: lotus
Date: 06/19/09 10:29
Chapter: Enemy of the Confederation

its a great story, i did cry when max died. please do continue alex's story. you are doing a fabulous job.

Reviewer: Hedwig_is_my_owl
Date: 06/09/09 18:52
Chapter: Enemy of the Confederation

Oh goodness...I cannot wait to read year 3....I have had tears streaming down my face *sigh* I did not want Max to be gone....

Reviewer: potterchassid
Date: 06/05/09 1:31
Chapter: The Mall

I also notice that you have this streak about house elves not carrying more than one person while Apparating. As I pointed out in a review to HHD, Dobby Apparates with a bunch of people from Malfoy Manor, and comes back to get the Trio, in DH.

Author's Response: Thanks for your comments and observations. You were right in the case of HHD, but the situation here was slightly different -- Quimley explained that he was unable to Apparate with both Alexandra and Maximilian because the Generous Ones had Alexandra (and then Maximilian) in their power. Their magic was too powerful for Quimley to overcome, so it wasn't just a case of Quimley only being able to carry one person at a time.

Reviewer: potterchassid
Date: 06/05/09 1:29
Chapter: The Mall

Your books are masterpieces. I already posted one review where I pointed out how you expand magical theory, providing answers to some of the things J.K Rowlings left open.

* how do spells formulas work? While we still don't know why, we have seen how spells don't need to be in Latin, and that spontaneous spells also work (dogerell verse. Both points from book I)
* How did house elf enslavement happen
* why do children travel to Hogwarts with a train. Portkeys may be tricky to create, and are regulated, as we see in the beginning of HP GoF (the ministry prepared them) and at the end of OOtP (Fudge is furious when DD makes a portkey for Harry) When you say they are expensive, you tie in to that and answer the Hogwarts Express question for those who missed the above two HP references. But boy, does the Confederation clamp down on portkeys; sounds like "1984."

The last scene, with Quimle, is masterful. Now Alexandra is going to wonder whether by coming along she prevented her brother from escaping the Generous Ones. May be Quimle is in cahoots with Abraham Thorn? Then again, he didn't seem to know what the Generous Ones were.

Will we get to glimpse into the Lands Beyond (without anyone dying) by book 7? Before that?

Thank you for these marvelous books. And by the way, you should consult with a copyright lawyer; your stories seem original enough that they might be publishes without infringing on JKR's copyright. But, IANAL.

Reviewer: Lilystar_12
Date: 06/04/09 19:36
Chapter: Enemy of the Confederation

You, my dear Inverarity, are a genius. I wait and check my email every day for an update on Alexandra. I have no idea if I'm your only reader, but even if I am, can you promise to keep writing about Alexandra and her father? The stories fascinate me, and I always am looking forward to more!

Author's Response: Thank you so much. I do plan to keep writing about Alexandra and her father. Book Three is in progress now.

Reviewer: fallennxstarr
Date: 06/04/09 12:58
Chapter: Enemy of the Confederation

As usual you did a fantastic job, there's never a dull moment in any of your stories. I really enjoyed reading it and I can't wait to see what you post next whether it's Alex or another story. There is one thing I an still a little confused about though, the train crash, the train normally passes through the lands below, but Abraham blocked it?

Author's Response: Yes, that's how Thorn caused the crash. Thanks for your review, and I'm glad you enjoyed the story. The next story I post will be Alexandra's eighth grade year.

Reviewer: Dylan1213
Date: 06/04/09 10:57
Chapter: Enemy of the Confederation

Wow.... If these were regular novels, I would absolutely buy them. Your stories are well thought out, well planned and well written. Please keep writing them, I very much look forward to reading them.

Reviewer: indigo_mouse
Date: 06/03/09 23:13
Chapter: Enemy of the Confederation

This was a thrilling read and over much too soon. Alex and Max are fully realized characters with minds of their own and it has been delightful to watch them get to know each other in this book. I have been encouraged to see Anna mature and become more of her own person, too.

I think you did a wonderful job of describing the Lands Below and incorporating Native American myth and stories into the mix. Your particular mix of social commentary and politics has been interesting and seems very real.

I can't wait for the next book

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