Reviewer: ahattab33
Date: 03/02/09 19:27
Chapter: A Walk in the Woods


Okay, I'm going to comment on the things I had planned on commenting on before this humongous ending...I like the little talk between Alex and David when they had detention together...I know romance will be a while coming, but I like the romance, and I'm very curious as to see what happens among the friends in the future.

Darla--what they heck is her problem?! I'm still waiting to find that out.

I liked Max's protective behavior when Larry was using the Crucio...but that whole scene was really weird. I might have to go back and reread that.

I thought Max was participating in an undercover assignment...its a little suspiscious (ohhh bad spelling) that he came out like that. I'm just becoming suspiscious of Max the more I read the story.

OH MAN I absolutely positively cannot wait for the next chapter. Your stories are ridiculously good and hopefully it comes soon!!!!!! AHH!!!!

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 03/02/09 12:33
Chapter: The Dark Side

I was wondering if Max wanted to test Alex's ability among her peers and so set up this ambush. I think that Max probably thought that Alex had a chance. Afterall we still don't know why Max had her leave the school building to meet him.

I'm sure you know that Max needs a good reason for doing the Crucio Curse on Larry. What Larry did was terrible, but as a cadet, he should know that he was overreacting. The excuse that Larry was hurting his baby sister would be quite lame.

This destroys any chance of reconciliation of Alex and Larry. One wonders if Larry was invited to join the mors mordre society, because if he was it shows a different side to Larry that we haven't seen.

I remember in a previous chapter that Alex said she wouldn't want the Crucio done on even Larry and now there doesn't seem to be a way she can show this to be true.

Something tells me that Darla may have suggested to Larry that Alex might be afraid of the Crucio curse. It does seem a little curious that Larry would use that curse.

I am surprized I didn't anticipate Anna's POV as to what was going on. It very much parallels Darla's desire to be with older classmates. Makes me wonder if Darla realizes she's in over her head. I bet the only reason she joined was to get the attention of older students. If Martin wasn't so rude would she still have joined? Was she invited because of her parent's connection?

patiently awaiting next chapter.

Reviewer: captburke
Date: 03/01/09 23:40
Chapter: The Dark Side

Great chapter. I don't think Max set up that "meeting" with Larry and friends. But then again I could be wrong. However I don't think the boys will be picking on Alex anytime soon. Also glad she finally told Anna. Don't want to think about what will happen if Darla decides to tell anyone about Alex and Max.

Reviewer: jabantik
Date: 03/01/09 2:19
Chapter: The Dark Side


Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 02/27/09 16:45
Chapter: Wizard-Dueling

Compared to the last two chapters, this one was slightly disappointing. It seemed as though not much happened.

Still I think that your depiction of Anna and Alex seem realistic enough. I wonder what it would take for Alex to talk to Anna about her brother.

Reviewer: Calico
Date: 02/26/09 17:04
Chapter: Wizard-Dueling

I just wanted to take the time to say that I kept myself from reading this next installment of your series for as long as I could, because I knew I wouldn't be able to stop once I started. I really didn't want to get obsessed with a story again, but I couldn't help it. Now I'm so glad that I caved and read all fourteen chapters at once - Lands Below is, in my opinion, even better than Thorn Circle. I think what I like best is that Alex has grown up enough that she's lost a bit of her recklessness. But she's also so much like her old self in that she can't help getting involved in the MMS, and she's just as curious as ever about all the things that Max can tell her. Btw, I love Max, I love that Alex has a brother, and I love the way you fit him in. My favorite chapter was the one when Max explains who he is to Alex. The only thing still driving me crazy about Alex is that she's not being a very good friend to Anna right now, and she doesn't even seem to realize how much she's hurting her. But of course, you intended that. You intended all of this. It's incredible! It's stupendous! It's making me check the 'most recent' page almost daily! So thank you for writing this series, it's the best thing I've ever encountered on this site.

Reviewer: crystalphoenix
Date: 02/24/09 18:48
Chapter: Wizard-Dueling

Hmmm, Alex and Max are developing their relationship now, but Alex is kind of neglecting Anna a bit, isn't she? And I wonder what Darla thinks of Max and Alex's new friendship?

Reviewer: primagirl89
Date: 02/24/09 16:19
Chapter: Wizard-Dueling

Oh no did Darla see them? what would she think?

Reviewer: bigtimer
Date: 02/24/09 11:16
Chapter: Wizard-Dueling

max is quite the wizard, i hope he teaches alex a lot so she can be better then everyone too. and i hope max isn't up to anything too bad. darla and MMS are going down, at least i hope so, can't wait for the next chapter

Reviewer: ahattab33
Date: 02/23/09 21:54
Chapter: Wizard-Dueling

Another great chapter...I love that she has Max to turn to, but I wish that she could let Anna know. I think Anna's going to be hurt if she finds out from some other source than Alex herself. And Darla...what is up with her?! She is so suspicious..........

Reviewer: captburke
Date: 02/23/09 21:33
Chapter: Wizard-Dueling

Like it. Looks like Alex is starting to listen to Max and take his advice. I think she might even be liking JROC.

Reviewer: Kantaka
Date: 02/23/09 20:53
Chapter: Wizard-Dueling

Oh oh oh!!! I see what you're doing!! You're laying it down so that the school thinks Alex and Max are an item!!!

When they're brothers!!! That's wicked!!!!! Hehehe!! Darla, clearly will be livid, since Alex is once more getting the attention she wanted!! Wicked! Awesome!

Need I say once again I love your fic!!!???? I feel it's my obligation to do so! Love it!!! :)

Reviewer: lotus
Date: 02/17/09 4:48
Chapter: The Mall

Great story. Cant wait to read more and very glad that you have continued the series.
Its very natural on one end everything is flowing very perfectly with all the twists and turns.

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 02/13/09 17:43
Chapter: Maximilian's Mission

Very interesting chapter. If I understand it correctly, Alex can talk to Anna about what is going on since Max's friend took the curse off the contract.

I doubt that Dean Grimm will be happy to know what her sister is up to now.

I'm reserving judgement on Max. He seems sort of decent, but he doesn't seem to have any problem having animals get hurt.

Author's Response:

Martin took the curse off of Max. Taking it off of everyone who signed the contract would have been a more difficult feat.

Alexandra is reserving judgment on Max too. ;)

Reviewer: redhotfire
Date: 02/10/09 17:12
Chapter: Maximilian's Mission

I realy enjoyed that chapter. A lot of new info. It was great. Thanks for updating so fast.
Can't wait to read more

Reviewer: ahattab33
Date: 02/10/09 6:23
Chapter: Maximilian's Mission

Wow. I...really like Max. Alex actually got information out of someone! Great, great chapter!!!! This story is phenomenal, I can't wait for updates; I'm so glad you continued this series.

Reviewer: crystalphoenix
Date: 02/09/09 23:08
Chapter: Maximilian's Mission

I really enjoyed this chapter- especially all the interaction between Max and Alexandra. They really do act like brother and sister. I'm glad Alexandra got the chance to learn more about her family.

Reviewer: captburke
Date: 02/09/09 21:31
Chapter: Maximilian's Mission

What a great chapter! I think I'm going to like Max. Will Alex ever get to meet any of her sister's? And the fact she realizes they are somewhat alike might help her start looking at school, her friends and life in a new and better light. Maybe a little less pigheaded?

Reviewer: Kantaka
Date: 02/09/09 19:54
Chapter: Maximilian's Mission

"Don't you have any homework?"

That phrase alone just proves he's a geniune big Bro. Most of his jerkish attitude in the JROC sort of contributes to that as well. Personal experience, big brothers are more protective, but also have a tendency to take over parental roles when those are vacant... Such as 'bullying' and pushing younger siblings, demanding more of them.

You've created a superb character in Maximilian King. His story, as well as the whole battalion of half-sis Alex now has was higly interesting. And we are also suddently introduced to his fears, weaknesses and learning of things that bugg him as well... (like the talk around his parent's wedding) Kudos!

BTW, was Abe trying to father a Quidditch team or something? My compliments if he did! He seems to have archieved his purposes.

I enjoyed particularly the walk'n'talk of the sibblings in this chap! Both for all we learn of Max, and for all the new information on Abe Thron. And first hand, too! *smiles*

To be completely honest when you first introduced the half-brother twist a skeptical vein stroke me. I was afraid the Alex/Max realtionship might come out far fetched, too cliché or soap opera-ish.

I am thrilled to announce such a faithless vein is currently dead, dry, burned and burried!! You made it absolutely believable. Everything, from his explanations to Alex's unsuereness... perfect!

Kudos for incredible characterisation!

On a side note, I really, really, really what to see what on Earth is going on with that brainless punk of Darla!! I got a half mind that she might be under blackmail from the MMS. If they rat on her she'll be sooo dead, after all. Still, I think she's awful. Kidnapping her roomate, her friend's pet, knowing they'd curse her with it!

I wonder how would she react if her famniliar was to say, get lost for a day or two? *wicked smile*

Anyway, I must know what transpired between those two when Honey came back. You left us with a conversation pending!

Allrighty, I leave this neverending review here. I'll just say it once more; AWESOME CHAPTER!!

It was a nice, not to mention smart touch (to silence pestering reviewers), to mention Martin's curse breaker habilities!

Reviewer: stark40763
Date: 02/09/09 17:28
Chapter: Maximilian's Mission

Wow! Alex went from having no siblings to a whole bunch! Is she gonna meet the rest of them perhaps?

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