Reviewer: crystalphoenix
Date: 03/16/09 18:06
Chapter: Leave That World Behind

haha, I'm glad she's continuing the JROC. i think it will be good for her- especially now that it's actually by her choice. this was a really interesting chapter; it really gives us things to think about. what happens if bonnie turns out to be a witch? wait, how old is she anyway? well, it would be interesting, at any rate. i wonder if Alex is going to wear the locket her father got her? anyway, can't wait to read more!

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 03/16/09 12:52
Chapter: Leave That World Behind

Enjoyed reading this chapter.

Reviewer: wodcdre
Date: 03/16/09 12:37
Chapter: Leave That World Behind

This last chapter really had me asking some questions about how much Alex's mom remembers about her past. Very "Dursley-ish" in her responses to Alex, but for muggle families, that's probably the tip of the iceburg. I like how alex is trying to hook up her buddy David. The southern drawl really had me going...since I'm a southerner myself. Funny thing was, I could actually see that situation unfold in my mind. Good way of translating from words to mind pictures. I really love this story and can't wait for the next chapter!!!

Reviewer: jabantik
Date: 03/15/09 0:51
Chapter: Leave That World Behind

i like that alex and the seaburys cleared the air a little bit. they must have always known theirs were two different worlds, and after eventually accepting this, decided they can attempt to be civil to each other.

it is somewhat disappointing that alex's mother is aware of the magical world, rejects it, and will not discuss it. alex seems ready to discuss and deal with the baggage of her past, but her mother won't? it's a shame she (and us) will have to wait for the answers.

hehe where did charlie get such a big vocabulary?

another semester of jroc! discipline, drills, and obedience did not suit troublesome. it is nice to see alex's growth away(?) from her stubborn, rash, and headstrong personality. and her loyalty to max, shirtliffe, and the stormcrows is nice too.

i am enjoying your development of the characters and this story. with each chapter, i feel i have more invested in alex, and the next chapter and books can not come soon enough

Reviewer: captburke
Date: 03/14/09 20:31
Chapter: Leave That World Behind

Very interesting chapter. I am sorry for Alex that her mother wants nothing to do with her place in the wizarding world. Maybe someday she'll tell Alex the reason. At least she has her brother, and maybe she'll get to meet some of her sisters one of these days.
Not at all surprised by Brian's reaction. Poor Bonnie though.
Wonder what her mother would do if she told her she had a brother and sisters? Might make an interesting conversation.

Reviewer: ahattab33
Date: 03/14/09 16:03
Chapter: Leave That World Behind

Hmmm...interesting conversation with her mother. She definintely has some secrets, especially seeing how easily (at least that we've seen) that she has kept everything from both Archie and Alex.

I like David and Alex's relationship and how it's progressing...interested to see her plan put into progress, lol.

Max's gift was sweet! Another great chapter, I am always waiting in anticipation for the next chapter!

Reviewer: stark40763
Date: 03/12/09 7:56
Chapter: Abraham Thorn

So she finally met her father. I was wondering about why he went to see Voldemort, and I like the answer you gave. Thorn doesn't seem like such a bad guy, though he is a bit cocky, which is obviously where Alex gets it from. I can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 03/09/09 18:52
Chapter: Abraham Thorn

As to be expected, Abraham Thorn is still a mystery. Does he care about Alexandria because she is her daughter or just because she is a secret keeper. I can accept that Thorn isn't the evil guy that Hucksteen says he is, but I'm sure he has an agenda. Is Hucksteen as corrupt as Thorn asserts or is Thorn just in this for revenge?

Did Thorn remove the curse from her or will her tongue swell again if she tells someone else?

I wonder if Max's fear is that his temper will cause him to hurt someone?

I suppose Alex could tell her mother that she met her brother and would liike some more information about her father.

Reviewer: crystalphoenix
Date: 03/06/09 20:31
Chapter: Abraham Thorn

Hm. Interesting meeting with Abraham Thorn. I'm glad we finally got to see him. I think you portrayed Alex's feelings very well in this chapter- both her anger and her unwillingness to be viewed as a child. Can't wait to read more!

Reviewer: captburke
Date: 03/06/09 19:48
Chapter: Abraham Thorn

I like Thorn. This is really a good story. A lot of very hard work has gone into it. The plot/storyline is well developed and very believeable.
Thank you.

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 03/06/09 15:16
Chapter: A Walk in the Woods

Still wary about Max. I presume that the meeting the previous evening was to meet her father? As Alex says, he has Anger management issues. Is his anger a product of BMI or being messed with by the American ministry or something else? I am skeptical that at BMI they use the Crucio curse on the students but if it is true I would question sending my kid there.

Reviewer: primagirl89
Date: 03/06/09 2:39
Chapter: The Mall

that's a little odd that max announced their relationship like that to the world without even telling Alex first...not a good character sign. As a matter of fact, he should have told her where they are going. I don't think he sees her as a capable witch..yet. what a shocker...wasn't expecting to meet thorn so early in the series.

Reviewer: wodcdre
Date: 03/05/09 13:52
Chapter: A Walk in the Woods

OMFreakinG!!! What a twist!!! I'm riveted and am screaming for more!! What a Cliffie!!!! PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!!! I'm waiting on pins and needles for the chapter!!! Oh HOW will I get through this weekend...ooooooo.....such great suspense!!! I love this series!!!!!

Reviewer: Kantaka
Date: 03/04/09 19:04
Chapter: A Walk in the Woods

Gasp!!!

Max lead her to Abe!!!!

Alex's meeting her Dad!!!

Will she kick him in the shin!!!??? THrow a fit??? Listen politely what he has to say???

YIKES!!!

Please, update sooon!!!!!

Reviewer: bigtimer
Date: 03/04/09 10:58
Chapter: A Walk in the Woods

sweet i'm so glad that he came to talk with her, and max is the one who brought her to him it's one big happy family

Reviewer: crystalphoenix
Date: 03/03/09 20:11
Chapter: A Walk in the Woods

oh, wow. she finally meets her father. is she going to tell him off for never trying to contact her before last year? is she going to get any answers from him? I can't wait to read more!

Reviewer: crystalphoenix
Date: 03/03/09 19:46
Chapter: The Dark Side

Yeah, but I really hope Alex would never be so stupid and cruel as to cast an Unforgivable. I still can't believe Max did that. Well, I guess I can see the potential in his personality, but... I was really starting to like him, and then he has to go and do something like that. I think that trait is one they probably inherited from their father- the deep rage that would spur someone to do something drastic.

Reviewer: lostinside1
Date: 03/03/09 10:50
Chapter: A Walk in the Woods

:D:D:D:D I haven't logged in for so long but I have been reading pretty much every story including yours and it is the only one in about 6 months I have actually felt the need to review. (Y)

This chapter is perfect and all chapters leading up to this event are excellent when it comes to building up the suspense. You released all the tension at the right moment and succeeded in creating an enigma which will capture your audiences attention yet again. You OC is remarkable and she really comes to lie in this story more so than in the prequel. Well done. :)

 

 

Reviewer: lostinside1
Date: 03/03/09 10:50
Chapter: A Walk in the Woods

:D:D:D:D I haven't logged in for so long but I have been reading pretty much every story including yours and it is the only one in about 6 months I have actually felt the need to review. (Y)

This chapter is perfect and all chapters leading up to this event are excellent when it comes to building up the suspense. You released all the tension at the right moment and succeeded in creating an enigma which will capture your audiences attention yet again. You OC is remarkable and she really comes to lie in this story more so than in the prequel. Well done. :)

 

 

Reviewer: captburke
Date: 03/02/09 20:08
Chapter: A Walk in the Woods

Great chapter!. Alex' friends are there for her, especially when they think she's doing something stupid. She is starting to trust Max, though that has been and I'm sure will again be tested. It's an open secret now that she and Max are siblings and only time will tell what trouble that is going to cause. And now she is about to meet her father. What more could any girl ask for Christimas?

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