Um, eleven-year-old daughter AND three-year-old daughter a few lines apart? Get rid of it!
Your writing is great, I like the style, and the fact that it is going to fit into the universe at it exists...I can't wait for the next chapter! Ron and Hermione seemed slightly OOC at first...they were really pretty mean to each other! While bickering has always been a part of their relationship, purposefully hurting each other necessarily hasn't been. Marriage, however, can do things to people and pride can get in the way...I hope there is more interaction between Ron and Hermione before the story progresses to the other pairing, which I don't really support, but is so much fun to read about :).
Author's Response: Thanks! The strain of marriage has turned them into a bit meaner characters than where we left off in the books. A lot more is yet to come before any real interaction between Draco and Hermione occurs. Thank you for taking time to read when you don't like Hermione/Draco!
im kinda confused....it sounds very intreresting...but is it draco who died? if so...y did th driver call her mrs. weasley....did ron die? did both of thm die? did hermione cheat....and in th begiinning i didnt like th fact tht she was 39...but it works out bcuz shes writing a book...thts really cool....im just confused thts all
Author's Response: If I tell you who died it won't really make sense! You'll find out very soon though!
i just absolutely LOVE your story, i hope you update soon! waiting breathlessly
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I am submitting the next chapter right now actually. Let's hope it is approved!
oh!...dis sounds nice...if d guy whoz dead is draco n now hermione is married to ron.....dat wud b so, u knw, NICE.....cuz draco wud b hermione's FIRST LOVE afterall.....
Author's Response: You shall soon find out! :-)