Reviewer: xesaulx
Date: 12/14/08 6:28
Chapter: Chapter 1

The green light hit Harry square in the chest and he stumbled backward. He looked at Voldemort for one last long second, delighting in his look of complete shock and horror, and then felt all of his senses shut down. If I'm not mistaken, I believe it should be delighted and not delighting. Only "mistake" I could find throughout this passage. Overall, I really liked it. The fight with Voldemort and Harry in book seven always disappointed me. I was looking for something more epic. So far, I'm disappointed too with how Harry didn't even put up a fight in this. Of course, I don't know what's gonna happen until I read the second chapter, and the other ones in the future. Good job with this. I like your style.

Reviewer: yukikiyokiralacus
Date: 12/01/08 21:18
Chapter: Chapter 1

Wow Harry kidnapped...that's interesting. I'm interested who's behind that. Who's going to save the day? My guess is Harry and Ginny?

Author's Response: No, Harry's dead. By the way, I sent in Chapter 2, but I wrongly capitalized something and spelled Fleur's last name wrong, so I guess I have to submit it again, but soon enough it will be up.

Reviewer: Ginny_Alamalexia
Date: 11/15/08 19:28
Chapter: Chapter 1

Wow, an interesting start to what seems to be an intriguing story. I am definitely going to eagerly await the updates to this! Nice work!

~~Azhure~~



Author's Response: Thank you! I'm kind of torn because I've got another idea for another story that I like better, but I'll keep working on this one. Thank you for reading.

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