This is the first fic I've read concerning an era outside of Harry's and I thought it was very well done indeed! I've always been wary of fics where the characters are mostly OCs, but I thought yours fitted perfectly into the HP world.
A very interesting portrayal of what teaching the Final Battle would be like from this era's perspective. I particularly liked Scorpius' inability to say Voldemort's name. A small point - was Scorpius reading from a book or making up this story as he went along? I assumed the latter because of the detail of the stone, but then his description was so vivid it seemed a little unlikely. Unless he was just really getting into it!
I loved the costumes for the Halloween feast - a wonderful touch. And this line was very good: "It was the type of place where, no matter how often and how fast you whip your head around, the shadows are always in your blind spot."
Lovely characterisation of Roxanne - she reminds me of a cross between Ginny and Fred! Interesting decision to have her as the one who shows off about her famous relatives. Whereas Scorpius is like a slightly nicer and cheekier version of Draco... Both, however, manage to maintain a strong sense of personality in their own right.
Nice reference to Harry, Ron and Hermione's first encounter with a troll. And I do like the fact that you've included Draco's apparent long-lasting respect for the fact that Harry and Ron saved his life. All in all - a very well executed fic! It's a shame you're not continuing, but would you consider writing another story using the same characters? Well done!
P.S. "He blinked in befuddlement, but stepped back and did as he was told." Good boy ;o)
!Well I thought it was positively wonderful! I loved it ^^
I think Scorpius and Roxanne would make a cute couple hehe.
I liked the way you incorporated so much into it from the books, it makes me want to watch the movies and read the books again XD
unusual pairing, cute story. kudos for referencing one of the hallows and george's daughter. I enjoyed reading it. Cheers!
Author's Response: Yay, thanks! Great to hear you actually enjoyed it. I didn't think anyone would, to be honest! Thanks for the review!
wow, great story! i usually dont read scorpius/rose, but i really like this one. good job!
Author's Response: Thankyou! :) I don't usually write it either, this was a challenge designed to test me. Glad you found it bearable!