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(Signed) · Date:
06/28/10 21:06 · For:
And it’s finally here!!!
My long-awaited review of the Epilogue, of course. Did you think I’d forgotten about it? Surely not. Stupid RL…
Anyway, all that aside, I’m so glad that I know now what happened after Albus fell through the veil. I have to admit, it has been eating at me a bit that I didn’t know. I had been waiting to read the previous chapters again, all in succession, just so I could grasp it in it’s entirety, but that was completely unnecessary. This story isn’t one that I’d ever forget, anyway.
Your portrayal of raw grief is mind-blowing. Have I ever told you that? Probably, but I’ll say it again. Just the power of James’s emotions was gripping and wrenching at the same time. We both know how much grown men hate to be caught crying, but this was one of those few, few times that none of them would care. The ache and the emptiness that he felt after losing his brother made me want to sniffle and to hug him all at once. I have always maintained that, despite their difference, the Potter boys have always loved one another fiercely. Even when they say they don’t, even when they think they don’t, that fraternal bond has always existed for me in my heart.
That is why you, missy (am I even allowed to call you that? lol), are brilliant. Though I have no idea whether you’ve experienced these things firsthand or if you just have a fantastic power of extrapolation, but I feel like, in reading this, that James’s loss was my loss. That’s both an amazing and a bad feeling, because I love both these boys and don’t want them to suffer this badly. On the other hand, some of the most powerful things I’ve ever read were driven by characterisation and emotion, both of which you’ve managed to capture for me.
I would be remiss if I failed to bring in the ‘crit’ part of my review, but I know that you’d rather hear it than not. I do have three nitpicks, two of which are canonical and the other is about ‘fuzzy’ canon. The first is the colour of James Classic’s eyes. You have them as green, but James Potter’s eyes were brown. Harry got his green eyes from Lily. Not a big thing, but I know you’re a canon girl and would want your story to be correct.
The second is when you said that James was the master of the three Hallows, which allowed him to use the ring. In The Tale of the Three Brothers, the second brother did not need to master all three Hallows to use the Ring. If that was the case, then Dumbledore would have never been able to use the Elder Wand, and generations of Potter boys would have been out of one of their most favourite playthings.
The last is the fact that Sarah can see Albus’s ring form (dunno what else to call it). In DH in The Forest Again, only Harry can see his parents, Remus, and Sirius, and it was specifically defined that this was the case. If this is, indeed, canon, then Albus would have been for James’s eyes and James’s eyes only. Not even James’s wife would have been able to see him (or Marcum or James Classic). I don’t know if this is actual canon or not, but it is an assumption on my part that it is.
Okay, now that part is out of the way, and I can get back to praise. I love it that you made the Ring reappear in James’s pocket. Some mysteries just aren’t meant to be understood, and keeping the Hallows from being probed in the Department of Mysteries just seems right to me. I never really thought about it, but Harry did the world a favour when he hid the darker of these objects from others. No one should own a wand of such repute as the Elder Wand, and the power to bring back the dead, even if in a hollow form, isn’t an ability that any mere man should possess, even with the aid of magical objects.
All in all, this chapter was a lovely sum up of the story that got me so into the mind of Albus Potter. You sewed up loose ends, yet you left just enough of a thread from which you could construct a new story for our intrepid Potter clan. I can’t wait to see the Epic of Doom, if your drabbles are any indication of how it will happen.
Farewell for now, and thank you for being so awesome. Knowing you, you’ll probably be off straightaway to fix the little glitches, and I will, of course, end up reading this story again soon and reviewing it…again. Take care and happy writing!
Author's Response: Ah, Jess! Thanks so much for the review! You have no idea how much it means. Remember back when MNFF went down and we were all crying about it on FB? You said something about this story and just knowing one person was reading it motivated me to keep going and finish it, so thank you for that! And thank you for the amazing compliments, too. *blushes*
I think we are pretty much on the same page when it comes to the Potter boys. I love 'em too, but then we are on the same page about beating up our favorite characters too, aren't we? ;) I sure hope I can get the EoD off the ground someday because I really want to write more about Harry and James now.
Thanks for pointing out all those stupid mistakes. Of course I know Harry got his green eyes from Lily - dumb mistake, easy to fix. I went back and reread some stuff in DH last night about the Hallows. Like I said in my PM, you're right - one doesn't need all three Hallows for one (ie, the Ring) to work, but for some reason my mind got stuck on that, probably because Harry had them all and Dumbledore called him 'Master of Death.' So I'll be tweaking that, at least here at the end with James. Albus still wanted them, because I think he would have wanted to be 'Master of Death' and not just bring back Marcum through the Ring for a chat. And the bit about Sarah seeing Albus - well, there's loads of ways around that. Who says only the person who turned the Ring can see the dead person they called? Maybe only Harry saw his parents in DH because that's what they wanted. I think Albus would have wanted the others to see him off. Plus, it's the DOM, and to me, just about anything is possible there. (Seriously - I've loads of crazy ideas, lol.) I'll tweak it, though - thanks! You'd make a spectacular beta, you know. I might have to beg it of you if I ever get to the EoD, then you could find these things for me. :)
Thanks again for reading and reviewing this story! I'm so glad you enjoyed it and wish you luck with your own! *hugs* ~Gina :)
(Signed) · Date:
03/30/10 9:31 · For:
Author's Response: Hopefully that's a good wow, in which case - thanks! ~Gina :)