I thought you did the skeleton in the closet slant very well! Very lovey, and sweet, too.
Great job!
-Avery
Author's Response: Thanks Avery, I'm glad you liked it!
Cute idea. I enjoyed this much more than another 'Rarepair' story I read the other day. If I might say, though, after Susan arrives home some more careful editing could be done. Some examples: you have Susan throwing "his" arms around Neville and she felt "delight and what he had done" (instead of "at what he had done"). Later, Neville's mind was whirling "with the thought of what HER was going to do", Susan letting go of his hands "making Neville's hands feeling empty and cold", and further down, someone, (can't remember who) thinks, "get one a hold of one'. But enough nitpicking, I liked the part with the proposal in the skeleton. Nice touch. cj
Author's Response: I've been wondering what people would say about the skeleton proposal. I'm glad you liked it. And thank you for the nitpicks as well. I'll read everything over more carefully next time. Thanks again. :)