Reviewer: greennotebook
Date: 04/13/09 13:58
Chapter: Prologue - To Keep Him Safe

Bine, it's a very creepy story so far. Kaziah the hag terrifies me. What makes a hag so different from a witch? Will we find out? I imagine all sorts of difficult consequences that might come to Lauda for dealing with one.

I hope we get to see more of James and Lily and find out more about that spell. Poor Harry, snatched out of his timeline and given a new mother! At least he seems to like his new parents....

Also, that comment James makes about how Peter would never "rat" them out? hahahaha.....

lovely so far! I look forward to more.

Author's Response: Thank you, Greenie! *hugs* Though, another chapter might take some time again as I'm concentrating on finishing Shining Through Blackness right now.

That's what the lexicon says about hags: "Female human-like magical being, but less adept than a witch at disguising herself from Muggles (PA4, GF19). Hags are what one might refer to as 'fairy tale witches.' Hags are wild in appearance." And you're going the right way when you imagine all sorts of difficult consequences for Lauda. Dealing with a hag is nasty busines...

And more about James and Lily is to come - in a much later chapter. So stay tuned (even if updates are jotted around and rare over months, sorry!).

Reviewer: Luna_Lover
Date: 04/13/09 12:27
Chapter: Chapter One - The Beginning Of It All

Curiouser and curiouser! Kaziah is clearly a powerful Legilimens, but I've never seen anyone remove memories at will the way she does. Also she doesn't seem to be able to perform tasks such as fixing her roof by magic. Was the Lord she referred to as causing the weather simply God in the traditional sense, or someone else?
I'm intrigued by the mention of Godric Gryffindor. Obviously Harry has been sent back in time by Lily's spell, but it is his own universe, or another? How is magic viewed in this day and age? Lauda and Fendryck appear to be Muggles, and Fendryck at least does not look favorably on magic. Lord Gryffindor is powerful, but is he open with his wizardry, or does he hide it?
Needless to say, I'm very curious. I'm especially interested in the character of Fendryck and how he will act toward Harry/Camalric.

Author's Response: Never forget that Kaziah is no witch in the normal sense. The lexicon doesn't state if their magic is less powerful than a witch's, so why not make her powerful in tinkering with people's memories? And the author has to have some creative licence, right? Right lol.

Yes, the God she referred to was God in the traditional sense.

Which time Harry has been sent to and more about Gryffindor as well as Lauda and Fendryk will come to light in the next chapters. It might take some time to get it written though. But I will update and finish this story one day.

Thanks for reading and reviewing, Lilu!

Reviewer: Luna_Lover
Date: 04/13/09 12:02
Chapter: Prologue - To Keep Him Safe

Bine! 'Tis I, LiLu. I was touched and saddened by the faith that James had in Peter. With Harry gone, I wonder what will happen to James and Lily, whether Voldemort will still target them, whether he'll even realize that Harry is gone. Also I'm curious about the magic that Lily did. Was it Dark Magic? How did she learn about it? Did she know of it already, or was she frantically searching for a way, any way, to save her son? How will James react to Lily having made this decision without consulting him? How much does Lily know about where she has sent Harry?
Luckily for me, there's another chapter that will hopefully answer some of my questions. ^_^
I do have one very very small bone to pick, for the sake of well-rounded review practise: If James was sitting on the sofa when he heard the glass break, why did he pull his wand from his back pocket when he went into the kitchen? Did he pick up his wand, put it in his back pocket, and then go into the kitchen and pull it out again?
Onward! ~LiLu

Author's Response: Thank you for this great review. So many questions, where to begin to answer them? Let's just say, it will be some chapters before anything of those questions is going to be answered. But in the story outline I have, there's at least one chapter that will answer everything and tie together the loose ends.

As for your nitpick: *headdesk* You're right. Seems unlogical. I might change that. Thanks for picking this up. *hugs*

Reviewer: jessie179
Date: 04/10/09 14:51
Chapter: Prologue - To Keep Him Safe


Author's Response: Thanks. The next chapter will be up in a bit.

Reviewer: Pinkcess of the Abyss
Date: 11/22/08 22:10
Chapter: Prologue - To Keep Him Safe

I can't belive it has taken me this long to leave you a proper review!

I really love how you've written this! It's so eerie and you really set the scene with the thunder strom! I really like how you feel part of the story due to the noise and you feel the characters fear.

I can't wait for you to write the next chapter! I've been wanting to read this story forever and I really can't wait!

Take care xx Chicklepea

Author's Response: Thank you so much for this review and plot bunny! *hugs* Chapter one is halfway written, but because of time restraints, I'm a bit slow on writing. Sorry that it'll take sometime longer for me to go on with it. But I will go on, promised.

Reviewer: GinervaPotter213
Date: 11/13/08 16:25
Chapter: Prologue - To Keep Him Safe

Bine- Wow, this was really well written. It was very suspenseful and spooky, I can't wait for more!

Author's Response: Thank you, Ayra! *huggles*

Reviewer: Eowyn89
Date: 11/13/08 16:02
Chapter: Prologue - To Keep Him Safe

Really really good start. I'm definitely interested in reading more! I agree with Carole in that it was a little spooky.

Author's Response: lol But thanks for reading and reviewing. *hugs*

Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 11/13/08 6:15
Chapter: Prologue - To Keep Him Safe

Bine- This is absolutely superb. The tension is unbelievable. I'm shivering with fright and anticipation. It is so evocative and spooky.

I cannot wait to read the rest.

Blown away!

Author's Response: Aww, thanks, Carole! *squishes* And yay for being the first to review!

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