Reviewer: Love_is_4ever
Date: 11/07/08 15:22
Chapter: Chapter One: Now We're Back To The Beginning

Wow, Jenny, that was amazing.

I loved the way the story starts; it goes on in a really nice pace. The dynamics of the trio are just so perfect. You've really got a good hang of them. I like how you didn't use clichés like Harry being powerful enough to Apparate half-way around the world. =)

I love how Ron's so protective of Ginny and how comfortable and realistic his relationship with Hermione is.

This is a great start to the story, which is definitely going into my favourites. I had seen the plot bunny in the adoption center, so I'm looking forward to what more you're gonna come up with for it.

*huggles*

~ Samarie

Author's Response: Thank you, Samarie! I'm so glad that you liked it. I thought perhaps this chapter was a little slow, but apparently not. :) *sigh of relief* And yay for favourites! Love you, dear!

Reviewer: Tariel
Date: 11/07/08 4:34
Chapter: Chapter One: Now We're Back To The Beginning

ineresting...very intriguing...i look forward to reading more!

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: rayasunshine
Date: 11/06/08 5:35
Chapter: Chapter One: Now We're Back To The Beginning

I saw this in the Adoption thread, it seems great so far!
Update soon!

Author's Response: Thank you, and I'll try!

Reviewer: Cirelondiel
Date: 11/06/08 1:14
Chapter: Chapter One: Now We're Back To The Beginning

This was a lovely start, my dear!

I think your vision of how the wizarding world would be after the war is very accurate, and I really liked the opening (with Hermione remembering all the losses, and the nice summary of things that have happened in the last month).

There were some nice little things in there that showed that you're not leaving loose threads, too - I loved the idea of Harry researching his family history, and the sad little part about getting a new owl.

The romance in this chapter was sweet - Hermione and Ron in the early stages of their relationship are so cute! - and the characterisation mostly spot on.  I'm surprised Hermione accepted Harry's money so easily, though. Even if she knew the only way to get the money was to ask him, I would have thought she would offer to pay it back eventually, or be very grateful to him. But other than that, I thought they were all perfect :D

Your spelling and grammar was all perfect, too - no less than I'd expect from you and Jo ;)

 The only nitpick I found was in this line:

‘It’s not going to be a holiday,’ she replied, having resigned to the fact that they were coming, whether she liked it or not.

It should say 'resigned herself '.

This chapter ended nicely. I liked the image of the pair in peace... but the last sentence, "Hopefully their expedition to Australia would go just as well", hints that there's going to be some bumps in the road ahead... heehee, I can't wait :D

All in all, lovely job. You have such a nice, sweet writing style, not too bogged down with detail. I can't wait to read more of this fic.

By the way, Jen, if you're not already one of my Favourite Authors, you're going on there.

 <3 Chels



Author's Response: Ooh, what a fabulous review, dear! I'm so pleased that you like the beginning - it took me about five rewrites to get it perfect, lol. I think in the next few chapters you'll see Hermione's guilt at taking Harry's money. And I see what you mean about "resigned herself", but it still works as it is, so I'll leave it. :) And yay for favourite author! lol. Love you!

Reviewer: Stubbornly_appeared
Date: 11/06/08 0:34
Chapter: Chapter One: Now We're Back To The Beginning

I can't wait to see what happens in Australia! The romance is so cute in this and your writing is great.

Author's Response: Thank you, dear!

Reviewer: cassie123
Date: 11/06/08 0:08
Chapter: Chapter One: Now We're Back To The Beginning

Eep. I'm excited for the rest of this story. You've started it wonderfully and I can't wait till they get to Australia. I've attempted to write this same idea before, but failed miserably. Although, I did use the plane idea, too. It'll be good to see Ron's reaction. I'll keep reading, dear. Good job. ~ Cass xox

Author's Response: Yay Cass! Thanks for your kind comments, dear. And I'm sure you didn't fail miserably! *rolls eyes* *squishes*

Reviewer: James Jameson
Date: 11/05/08 22:19
Chapter: Chapter One: Now We're Back To The Beginning

OMGGGG JENNNNYY!!!!
I read the title help or plot help or SOMETHING for this on the forums, so when I saw this, I'm like: SUCCESS!!! HUZZAHH!!! MUST READDD!!!
great job! What Hermione said to ron is almost EXACTLY what I always have to say to my bf about reacting to things :P

Author's Response: Thanks again!

Reviewer: James Jameson
Date: 11/05/08 22:19
Chapter: Chapter One: Now We're Back To The Beginning

OMGGGG JENNNNYY!!!!
I read the title help or plot help or SOMETHING for this on the forums, so when I saw this, I'm like: SUCCESS!!! HUZZAHH!!! MUST READDD!!!
great job! What Hermione said to ron is almost EXACTLY what I always have to say to my bf about reacting to things :P

Author's Response: Thank you, Tine! :D I really appreciate the review.

Reviewer: phoenix_fille
Date: 11/05/08 19:00
Chapter: Chapter One: Now We're Back To The Beginning

Very, very good start. Can't wait to find out what happens!

Author's Response: Thank you, dear! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)

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