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Name: gene24 (Signed) · Date: 09/06/09 16:44 · For: Chapter 5- Opportunities
Just finished reading chapter 5, and I have to say I hope to see more of Snape! I also like how you add in Lupin's thoughts through the chapters, and how he and Tonks are unashamedly falling in love with each other. Great job so far! I'm completely loving this story. Keep up the good work, I can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: Thank you very much for reviewing ... there will be more Snape (you may have read a bit more by now and there's more coming at a later date). Glad you're enjoying the story. ~Carole~

Name: rosemerta (Signed) · Date: 09/06/09 15:05 · For: Chapter 1- Cool!
WOW. another person who understood the love between james and sirius -and who knew all four- who has reason to believe sirius has been falsely imprisoned. very interesting twist you threw in at the end there! i was shocked. i was also shocked to find out about andromeda's real reason for leaving tonks there. not surprised though that you portrayed narcissa as cruel and suspicious of her sister but andromeda as compassionate enough not to harm her pregnant younger sister, even when threatened. very insightful.

Author's Response: Thank you, Rosmerta. I'm glad you found this story and hope you continue to enjoy it. (Romania scenes are round about Ch 6 btw) ~Carole~

Name: YouMaySayNymphadora (Signed) · Date: 09/05/09 22:13 · For: Chapter 13 - Old Marauders Never Die
As I read this chapter, I was becoming increasingly uncomfortable with Charity's infatuation with Remus. I was worried she might become a problem for Tonks, vying for Remus' affections. I was greatly relieved when she became frightened by Remus' lycanthropy.

At the same time, I was sad for Remus. Once again he thought he had found a friend, and perhaps something more, only to be disappointed and hurt by fear and rejection. Also, I really loved that Remus didn't feel right about becoming intimate with Charity, though he doesn't yet realize his true feelings for Tonks.

I loved the end! I was very sad for Tonks' with her broken heart and disillusionment, of course. I've been there myself. I loved that she came to Remus for the truth and he dropped what he was doing to comfort her. And his words, "You have me,"... made me melt!

With enthusiastic applause, a loyal and devoted fan,

Author's Response: Thank you so much for such a lovely review (and the email). I feel a bit sorry for old Charity, she can't fight fate after all. ~Carole~

Name: LuNaLoVeGoOdLoVer (Signed) · Date: 09/05/09 1:46 · For: Chapter 4 - Grudge Match
uh, this was such a good chapter!!! i loved it!!!
the twins were mean though. *glares*
it was such a good chappie *sighs contently* i want to read the next chapter!!! i love how remus came!!!
doesn't quirrel get his stutter after he goes to albania? coz he's all fightened and enlightened and whatnot? well, i'm probably wrong, just wondering....

Author's Response: We don't know when Quirrell got his stutter. According to Hagrid he was always nervous but got worse after his trip abroad. I just always imagined him with a stutter. Ta for the review ~Carole~

Name: LuNaLoVeGoOdLoVer (Signed) · Date: 09/05/09 1:09 · For: Memories and Revelations
oh, do you have the time of PoA in this fic? that would be quite interesting, tonks spzzing that he didn't do it....
and i didn't expect THAT. i mean i dind't expect that they would kiss. or that remus would kiss her.
good chapter!

Author's Response: I'm at POA time now, so if you get to Chapter 13 soon, you'll see exactly what Tonks thinks during that year. Chapter 14 is being written. Thank you so much for all your reviews and I shall fit the nit picks.

Name: LuNaLoVeGoOdLoVer (Signed) · Date: 09/05/09 0:29 · For: Chapter 2- More of a Miss than a Kiss
ohoh. carole, you are cruel. it's 1.30 in the morning, and i am sooo tired, but SUCH a mean cliffe! urrrrg
another great chapter, as I expected. but poor, poor charlie. *huggles*
And I feel a big 'I told you so!' coming from tonks after charlie and tonks both enter the order.
another nit-pick. at the lake, when charlie and tonks are talking about quidditch, you forgot the " again, at the beginning of a sentance
and also when tonks took the veritasirum, you did the same thing.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review - go and get some sleep, the story will still be there in the morning - LOL. I shall fix the errors now. Thank you. ~Carole~

Name: LuNaLoVeGoOdLoVer (Signed) · Date: 09/03/09 22:23 · For: Chapter 1- Cool!
OMG, carole. I SO should have read this fic earlier. I just LOVE it. it was really funny, but the ending.... urg, how i wish i could continuw reading it now. but it's really late and it's a schoolnight.....arg...
never noticed that a-dore ya, Dora..... huh, nice.
Tinks is SO like a 6 and 8 month year old tonks would be. NICE.
And I like how she looks up to sirius-who's characterization was also very nice- and how she keeps 'tonks' as her name. I'm loving it.
Oh, and how he wonders how tonks can bear living in secret-that was a nice touch, too, as we all know HE must do it later.
um when james first enters, tonks sais her name i s'just tinks' you forgot the " at the end of it.
how you can always add humor and suspense.... brilliant.
hm, is your peter always so... down? because at first i thought it was because he knew he would betray them, but i always thought the prophesie was made after harry's brith. i might be wrong though....

Author's Response: Thank you for the review and the nitpick - I shall sort that out now. Hmm, Peter. Well, according to Sirius in POA Peter had been passing secrets for at least a year before James and Lily died. At this point I know he's not passing secrets, but he is finding life without the constant company of his frineds difficult - hence starting to look for other 'big boys in the playground'. I don't explain it in this fic, but I have a oneshot (possibly chaptered fic) running around my head about Peter. The prophecy may have been made when Lily was pregnant, actually. JK Rowling says something about the Potters going into hiding when she was pregnant. Timeline issue so I'm not totally sure. Prophecy was made sometime in 1980, though. Thanks again -~Carole~

Name: AshTonks (Signed) · Date: 09/03/09 20:02 · For: Chapter 13 - Old Marauders Never Die
Tonks and Remus are my two very favorite characters in the series, and this is the love story I REALLY wanted to read! Thank you so much! I love your story. You get the characters down SO well, and you stick to the canon, but you add your own flair. It's my favorite story ever! Major Kudos!!

Author's Response: OOOH, thank you so much. That has made my day. I love writing it because they are my favourite characters and I think they deserved a longer history together given that they died so young. ~Carole~

Name: ProfPosky (Signed) · Date: 09/03/09 19:55 · For: Chapter 13 - Old Marauders Never Die
I like your depiction of Charity Burbage. I'm a bit confused about the Wolf'sbane potion - how many nights in a row did he have to take it? I would have thought just the one, but here it seems either that he takes it a day early, or else takes it at least twice.

The Tonks bit at the end is fantastic. Does Remus have any idea at all what he's letting himself in for?

Author's Response: Wolfsbane - he has to take it at least twice in the run up to the actual night. When Harry sees Remus take the Potion, he hears him tell Snape that he should probably take some the next night too. He also tells the Trio that as long as he takes it in the week leading up to the full moon then he'll keep his mind. I had it in mind that he had to drink it probably once a day for the whole week, but I don't really know. Glad you like Charity, poor love, she doesn't stand an earthly with the force that is Tonks. Thanks for the review, Thea. ~Carole~

Name: MaraudingMarauders (Signed) · Date: 09/02/09 19:44 · For: Chapter 13 - Old Marauders Never Die
Awwww, I love it when Tonks falls apart and Remus seems to make everything all better :-) Very well written, Please update soon!!!

Author's Response: I'm writing the next chapter as we speak, but got a bit muddled with time line issues (and went on holiday). Remus does seem to make things better ... wonder what will happen when he falls apart ... ~Carole~

Name: MaraudingMarauders (Signed) · Date: 09/02/09 19:27 · For: Chapter 12 Tea at the Tonks' House
Terrific chapter!!! I am totally hooked on this story :-)

Author's Response: Glad you're hooked (heh heh) Thanks for reviewing.

Name: MaraudingMarauders (Signed) · Date: 09/02/09 19:04 · For: Chapter 11 -Old Stories and New Friends
Whew, talk about sexual tension... Any chapter now....LOL Fabulous chapter :-)

Author's Response: Ahh, now originally Chapter 14 was in my mind as the 'Infamous Chapter 14' ie when something might happen... However, the story has run away from me and I think that has to get postponed until at least 17. They do belong together ~Carole~

Name: MaraudingMarauders (Signed) · Date: 09/02/09 18:37 · For: Chapter 10 - The Seeker
Hahahaha Gotta love Tonks! She is one of the most interesting characters in the Harry Potter Series and I wish we had seen more of her :-) Wonderful chapter!

Author's Response: Tonks is my favourite character in the books. She deserved more space in the books (and the films ... don't get me started on the films!). Thanks for reviewing ~Carole~

Name: MaraudingMarauders (Signed) · Date: 09/02/09 18:06 · For: Chapter 9 - The Raid
LOL, She deserves to have some fun but it should be with Remus!!!hahaha, Oh well amazing chapter as usual :-)

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing. Ahh, she'll get some fun with Remus as some point

Name: MaraudingMarauders (Signed) · Date: 09/02/09 17:53 · For: Chapter 8 "Expecto Patronum!"
Fantastic chapter! I really love this fan fic. I have not really read any Remus/Tonks fics so this one has really caught my eye ;-) Loved it!

Author's Response: Thank you. Sorry, i haven't replied before now. ~Carole~

Name: MaraudingMarauders (Signed) · Date: 09/02/09 17:37 · For: Chapter 7 - Damsel in Distress
Lovely chapter yet again! I really like the length of these chapters...but then again in my case the longer the better LOL

Author's Response: Thank you. Sorry, i haven't replied before now. ~Carole~

Name: MaraudingMarauders (Signed) · Date: 09/02/09 17:23 · For: Chapter 6 - Old Mad-Eye
Yeah not a bad chapter, but we could have used a bit of Remus in it...LOL Superb chapter, Really looking forward to the next Tonks and Lupin moment ;-)

Author's Response: Ahh, Remus is absent in a few chapters - sorry. There's a few good Remus chapters coming up though. Thanks for the review ~Carole~

Name: MaraudingMarauders (Signed) · Date: 09/02/09 17:08 · For: Chapter 5- Opportunities
Oooo, very good questions in the Chapter End Notes! You better be answering those questions :-) Terrific chapter!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review and glad you're still enjoying it.

Name: MaraudingMarauders (Signed) · Date: 09/02/09 16:30 · For: Chapter 4 - Grudge Match
Oh dear, That would be just like Tonks getting knocked off her broom. I can really see James setting that record in the first place ;-) Wonderful chapter!

Author's Response: Ahhh, now then, Potter's record may just appear in a future chapter of Lions of Gryffindor (my Marauder fic - plug plug). They're not really supposed to be conversant stories but certain things link (Martha Mcdonald for one) ~Carole~

Name: MaraudingMarauders (Signed) · Date: 09/02/09 16:17 · For: Memories and Revelations
Oooo, I really love how inventive Tonks is... I am sure she got into almost as much trouble as the Mauraders...LOL Great chapter :-)

Author's Response: I think Tonks believes she got into more trouble that the Marauders, Fred and George combined - I kinda doubt it, but she was a handful. Thanks for the review

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