Reviews For Apparently Asleep
Reviewer: silver slippers
Date: 10/01/09 20:00
Chapter: Chapter 1- Cool!

I absolutely love this story. I had never even considered Tonks' experience throughout the hunt for Sirius, but I feel that you write it so accurately. I hope she gets to find out he's innocent sooner rather than later! I can't wait to read what happens next!

Author's Response: Thank you very much for the review, and I hope you're still enjoying the story. ~Carole~

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 10/01/09 8:50
Chapter: Chapter 14 - Disillusioned

Lovely chapter! I like how real Nymphadora comes across... :-)

Author's Response: She wouldn't be happy with you using that name ... but thanks for the review.

Reviewer: captburke
Date: 09/30/09 23:00
Chapter: Chapter 14 - Disillusioned

Really good chapter. Charity clearly isn't Remus type, neither is Septima, so they should just bugger off and leave him to Tonks who is very clearly his type. And Sirius is more than innocent of the crimes he's charged with, the world just doesn't know that yet. Can't wait until Wormtail is outted.

Author's Response: It is funny how we all agree that Charity isn't his type ha ha Thanks for reviewing.

Reviewer: The_Dream_Team
Date: 09/30/09 16:50
Chapter: Chapter 14 - Disillusioned

Yay! I just recently started reading this and im not sure if ive reviewed... well i just love it! its the first Lupin/Tonks story i read and u really pulled me into the ship! this is a really good story and i liked this chapter a lot! please update soon because i cant wait to see what happens next!

Author's Response: Hmmm, next chapter, it's causing problems because there's a certain dog about to appear - ha ha. Thanks for the review and I'm glas you're enjoying the story.

Reviewer: MetamorphmagusLupin
Date: 09/30/09 15:13
Chapter: Chapter 14 - Disillusioned

I'll definitely bear with you until the next chapter because I want it to be brilliant. Ah, Remus and Tonks. I love them. Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Thank you for the review. MMM, next chapter ... because we all know who's about to turn up ...

Reviewer: ProfPosky
Date: 09/30/09 9:56
Chapter: Chapter 14 - Disillusioned

Ah, feathers... I do like how you've had Remus point out to Tonks how her belief in Sirius had affected her life for the better. I think that is absolutely in character. I also liked the made-up excuses for the nicknames - of course they would have had them...

Author's Response: Thank you, Thea. I wanted Tonks to feel better about her blind faith (except we all know she's right), and Remus is the man to set her straight. I had fun thinking up the excuses for the names ... but more fun with the feathers. Thanks again ~Carole~

Reviewer: Lucida
Date: 09/18/09 21:13
Chapter: Chapter 1- Cool!

Wasn't sure how this was gonna go for me but you were able to put meaning to everything at the end of the chapter. Good job. Gonna keep reading.

Author's Response: Thank you, Lucida. I hope you like the rest of the chapters.

Reviewer: LuNaLoVeGoOdLoVer
Date: 09/16/09 19:27
Chapter: Chapter 1- Cool!

Okay, so this effin’ compy wouldn't let me wrte a stupid review to this chapter!!! grrrr. so it took me like, more than an hour to manage it, so I hope you are duelly thankfull.
And i desided just to write what OI thought as I was reading this chapter. So it might be confusing to read, so let me know if I should organize it better for the next chapter!
So just reading this chapters summary was enough to drone out everything around me....
And you like using letters, don't you? They ARE quite useful in writing...
I like how you have Charlie in this story. I donb't read a lot of Charlie-related stories... I do like him, though. Also, in FF it's normally Bill Tonks likes, so I like how you don't have it so cliche...
Grrrrr. i LOATHE Alexa-wht's-her-name and her mother. If they aren't annoying...!
Uh, I like how Tonks always think of Remus... and when the moon is there... *sinffle*
Hehe, Tonks isn't all that consistent about calling Cahrlie Weasley (lol, I mean calling Charlie by Wealey...hehe)
Oh, and reading further, I desided to dislike Alexa, not loather her....
OMG, Remus is here! I just saw that! OMG!!! nice :P
And I think i spotted a typo, dearie.
When Tonks almost gets flamatized by the dragon but Remus tackles her to the ground you say:
Barely inches above was her a ball of flame.
But shouldn't it be 'above her was' not 'above was her'???
Ew. The sucking out the venom part? gross. Huh, have you read twilight? Redminded me a bit of the end of the forst book.... well, I must say, very romantic having your cruch suck dragon venom out of your hand. Yup, I totally want that to happen on my first date :P
Although their meeting really IS quite romantic (besides the Tonks-getting-delerius part, the sucking out the venom. Oh, and did I mention a hand that's quite it's normal size? :P) But it was unique, and they ARE a unioque pair.
Uh, and I noticed that nobody closed the gate. I see loads of baby dragons harrasing the place in chapter 8 (which I am off to read in a moment)
*sighs happily* back to Remus and Tonks. they are so pefect for each other. *sighs dreamily* I like how ypou made Metamorphmaghus (is that the plural form???) unlucly, so they both sorta don't fit in...
Okay, well, I fifnished reading the fic, but as i was feeling . angry at reviews, I didn;t leave any. Sorry! But I am waiting for an update!!!!!!!

Author's Response: Thank you, Andi. I shall fix the typo. It's quite fun reading your comments as you read - especially when Remus turned up. Ha ha. Okay, sucking out venom - Yes, I have read Twilight, but actually that wasn't where I got it from. It's realy an old remedy for snake bite (although it doesn't really work) so that's why I had Remus try it. Plus it was kinda like them kissing again - hee hee. Metamorphmagi - is the plural of Metamorohmagus. The gate - They Apparated out of there so I think it was closed - it is a magical gate after all.

Charlie and Tonks is what I call my OTFP (one true friendship pair). I write bits about them at Hogwarts because they were the same year. Charlie will be back in the story at some point. I've not read any Bill/Tonks - intriguing and very possible.

Chapter 14 is with a beta and should be here soon. (I hope).

Thank you for the review and I am grateful. ~Carole~

Reviewer: rosemerta
Date: 09/15/09 22:01
Chapter: Chapter 12 Tea at the Tonks' House

wow, a very very good chapter! youre right about the photograph. it never occurred to me before, but sirius left home at sixteen and didnt return to grimmauld until about a yr after his escape from the astrology tower, so how did the photo get there?? well he probably brought his things afterwards but this is just as plausible of a backstory for the photo.

Author's Response: I thought ther'd always be someone guarding his flat, and Remus would have been under suspicion too - being a werewolf and all that jazz - so I decided Tonks went there. Glad you liked the chapter.

Reviewer: rosemerta
Date: 09/15/09 21:33
Chapter: Chapter 11 -Old Stories and New Friends

now how do you know tonks likes reviews? LoL. i love how in this story we find out interesting things like how tonks found out about sirius' escape. i love that about fanfiction-how often authors write about canon events from a non canon view pt. humorous how you casually mentioned "a 2nd yr student by the name of harry potter" in such a non chalant way. i mean i know he isnt the focus but as hes very famous in the wizarding world, its pretty funny how little play you give him.

Author's Response: Ah, she told me. She whispers in my ear all the time. I love writing about canon events froma different viewpoint. It's hard sometimes to fit things properly, but I like the challenge. Just wait for POA time - that's giving me a headache *groans* You're right though, perhaps I've been a bit too nonchalent. Thanks for reviewing. ~Carole~

Reviewer: rosemerta
Date: 09/14/09 23:07
Chapter: Chapter 9 - The Raid

i like how tonks held her own with her aunt narcissa. u go girl. of course the girl deserves some fun with a hot young boy before she settles down with her stick in the mud future husband. lets face it, as much as we love remus for tonks, he IS a stick in the mud a lot of the time.

Author's Response: Thank you very much for reading and reviewing. I do appreciate evry review but am sorry I took so long to respond. ~Carole~

Reviewer: rosemerta
Date: 09/14/09 22:46
Chapter: Chapter 9 - The Raid

a new man is on the horizon. how . . . interesting . . .

Author's Response: Ah-ha, Rob Avery ... hmmm, well she does deserve some fun ...

Reviewer: rosemerta
Date: 09/13/09 17:07
Chapter: Chapter 5- Opportunities

im glad that professor snape is allowing her to brew wolfsbane. i absolutely love it when authors add strange supposedly wizarding world epithets like good godric, or for godric's sake which is fairly common around mugglenet. but what got me was your line helga huufflepuffs best nightie. HILARIOUS. i love when people say stuff like that. hahaha.

Author's Response: That line still makes me laugh, too. Mind you, some people scold me for not being 'canon' but 'Merlin's pants!' gets a bit boring after the fourteenth time - ha ha. Thanks for the review, Rosmerta. ~Carole~

Reviewer: Tonks4life
Date: 09/13/09 2:47
Chapter: Chapter 4 - Grudge Match

OMGosh Tonks!

Author's Response: MMM, she got a bit battered in that Chapter. Thanks for reading and reviewing. ~carole~

Reviewer: captburke
Date: 09/10/09 0:59
Chapter: Chapter 13 - Old Marauders Never Die

Great chapter. I like this story. You're doing a great job and I can't wait for everyone to find out Sirius is the good guy.

Author's Response: Well, it can't be far off now.

Reviewer: Tonks4life
Date: 09/08/09 18:50
Chapter: Chapter 1- Cool!

this is so cute i love little tonks she's adorable and as you can tell tonks is my all time favorite character from these books.

Author's Response: She's mine too. I still can't quite forgive JK for killing her off at the end. Anyway that's why I;ve written this because I want her and Remus to have a had a longer friendship/relationship. Thanks for reading and reviewing ~Carole~

Reviewer: gene24
Date: 09/08/09 17:26
Chapter: Chapter 13 - Old Marauders Never Die

I can't wait to see how you work in Sirius's story from the end of book three.

Anxiously waiting for chapter fourteen!

Haven't seen Tonks in a little while... BUT if Lupin is there I guess that's alright. =] I was expecting more professors to interact with Lupin during his teaching stint. There hasn't been much mention of his lycanthropy now he's at Hogwarts. But, I have to say, I'm glad Snape isn't hanging over everything making everyone miserable. I love the Lily references!

Please, don't take any of this as bad, just trying to give you some of my thoughts one writer to another. I love this story and I can't wait to read more of it! Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: No, your comments are appreciated. Hmm, now I thought I'd mentioned the lycanthropy with the references to Wolfsbane and the like, perhaps not strong enough. I actually figured that McGonagall and Flitwick as his former teachers would be less inclined to talk about it - after all they just accept him (as long as he's on Wolfsbane)Ahh, Tonks, well she's there at the end ... poor love. I'm glad you're enjoying the story - Ch 14 is coming up very soon.

Carole

Reviewer: LuNaLoVeGoOdLoVer
Date: 09/06/09 16:53
Chapter: Chapter 6 - Old Mad-Eye

urg, my internet just crashed so it's forcing me to write the whole review again.....grrr
Ha! I wondered how you were going to explain that Harry never so the pictures of his parents in the common room!
The letter was very well done. I liked how you added stuff that happened in SS/PS. It gave me a better feeling as to when exactly all this was actually happening. That's a weird though, though, isn't it? Hard to imagine Harry doing whatnot in school while Tonks has Auror training...
yes, the Auror training. You described it very well,I could imagine it easily. We don't get a lot of information from the books... But it defianetly is bound to be hard. *go tonks!!!
Uh, and I loved Moody! His characterization was so good! Althouh I wonder why he though it was safe to speak so freely in that pub, he was so coutious in OotP... And it's a surprise Tonks didn't turn out so paranoied, with Mad-Eye training her :P
*Glowers at Proudfoot* He is SUCh and idiot!!!
And I was SO glad when Tonks returned her hair back to being colorful!!! *thank you, carole!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Oh, and I was reminded againg how sad Remus' life really was. I mean, look at how decint he was, but he had to work in pubs like that.... ):
And is your timeline right? About Andromeda and ted eloping at such a young age? I always wonder when that was....
I *loved Ted, btw. *huggles hubbie* And Andromeda, too. I have a feeling (or maybe I'm merely hoping) that we are hoing to see more of her in furure chapters.... she has such an interesing character, don't you think? And she lost so many loved ones in her life, no wonder she believed Sirius giulty (although I think she may have had doubts... maybe...) *sigh* That picture was so sad... thinking that baby Bellatrix, Narcissa and Regulus (and they think Sirius, too) became Death Eaters.... sad thing.... But actually, only Bellatrix was really evil....
well, I'm off to rtead the next chapter! This is a really good story! I'm defianetly goanna add it to my favs.

Author's Response: Thank you for the review - you're internet let you in the end *grins*. Ummm, timeline. Tonks was born in 1973 when Andromeda was twenty. I always imagine Andromeda and Ted eloping as soon as she left Hogwarts, but I have read some fabulous stories where she doesn't meet him until after Hogwarts - we don't know basically. Mad-Eye, good point about talking in the pub, however he's not really saying anything particularly secret - well not for him. Everyone knows he still suspects the Malfoys and everyone else too - ha ha. Hmm, I wonder why Tonks wasn't as paranoid - perhaps it's to do with the next person she works with ... Ted and Andromeda are in the story some more - and will certainly feature in later chapters *evil snicker*. Thanks for the review. ~Carole~

Reviewer: gene24
Date: 09/06/09 16:44
Chapter: Chapter 5- Opportunities

Just finished reading chapter 5, and I have to say I hope to see more of Snape! I also like how you add in Lupin's thoughts through the chapters, and how he and Tonks are unashamedly falling in love with each other. Great job so far! I'm completely loving this story. Keep up the good work, I can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: Thank you very much for reviewing ... there will be more Snape (you may have read a bit more by now and there's more coming at a later date). Glad you're enjoying the story. ~Carole~

Reviewer: rosemerta
Date: 09/06/09 15:05
Chapter: Chapter 1- Cool!

WOW. another person who understood the love between james and sirius -and who knew all four- who has reason to believe sirius has been falsely imprisoned. very interesting twist you threw in at the end there! i was shocked. i was also shocked to find out about andromeda's real reason for leaving tonks there. not surprised though that you portrayed narcissa as cruel and suspicious of her sister but andromeda as compassionate enough not to harm her pregnant younger sister, even when threatened. very insightful.

Author's Response: Thank you, Rosmerta. I'm glad you found this story and hope you continue to enjoy it. (Romania scenes are round about Ch 6 btw) ~Carole~

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