Reviewer: canufeelthemagictonight
Date: 04/29/12 19:08
Chapter: A Very Boring Piece Of Homework Warped Into Something Fantastic!

I can't help but giggle--I think you've clarified that Lily Potter is not exactly the world's best poet.

But I love it anyway!!

Reviewer: KittyCatLover
Date: 12/10/08 16:37
Chapter: A Very Boring Piece Of Homework Warped Into Something Fantastic!

Awesome! That was a lot of fun to read! I can never make things rhyme properly. :- / I just wanted to say this in response to Hermoine Jane Granger's review, about the fact that in the CoS section things seemed out of place.
And in a girl’s bathroom a diary was found.
Tom Riddle? Sounds like a bad guy to me.
But the diary was stolen! Who could it be?
A message daubed on the wall in red ink,
I think that this part was actually ok, and fine chronological order wise, since there was a second message put on the wall after Ginny was taken down into the Chamber, and thus after the diary is stolen. Again, it was awesome, and at several points lol.

Author's Response: Thanks, especially for pointing this out! Now I can pretend that was what I meant all along... ;) I'm glad you liked it!

Reviewer: Caledonia
Date: 11/02/08 10:47
Chapter: A Very Boring Piece Of Homework Warped Into Something Fantastic!

I couldn't stop laughing the entire time! Very creativ rhymes!

Author's Response: You can't go wrong with a bit of rhyming for the sake of it ;)

Reviewer: ink_daughter
Date: 10/30/08 19:40
Chapter: A Very Boring Piece Of Homework Warped Into Something Fantastic!

This is awesome! I How old is she when she wrote this? I didn't catch it. ;)

Author's Response: Glad you think so =] I'd say about third year, as she was obviously in a very silly mood when she wrote this!

Reviewer: BVBandGirl
Date: 10/28/08 23:28
Chapter: A Very Boring Piece Of Homework Warped Into Something Fantastic!

Very cute. I enjoyed reading this.

Author's Response: Glad you did =]

Reviewer: LizzyT
Date: 10/28/08 19:49
Chapter: A Very Boring Piece Of Homework Warped Into Something Fantastic!

I loved it! There may have been a few errors, but I won't go over them because I think it's great anyways. It was certainly the most entertaining poem I've read in a very long time. Or maybe ever. I read it twice, the best part would have to be the 'Quirrel was nude,' part, I think.

Author's Response: I don't see Lily as being the most attentive student, so the errors were there on purpse. At least that's my story and I'm sticking to it =] I just wrote the Quirrel bit in as a joke, but then I decided to leave it in! I don't think I'll ever be able to think of that scene in the same was again... Glad you liked it, though!

Reviewer: FriendofMolly
Date: 10/28/08 19:02
Chapter: A Very Boring Piece Of Homework Warped Into Something Fantastic!

BRILLIANT!!!!!! This was a greatly amusing synopsis of Harry's life, through the eyes of his highly irreverlent child. Wouldn't you love to see Binns reaction, and Harrys. Great piece.

Author's Response: I definitely would! But somehow I don't think Lily would let this piece of h/w ever reach her father's eyes... =]

Reviewer: ada22
Date: 10/28/08 6:06
Chapter: A Very Boring Piece Of Homework Warped Into Something Fantastic!

very nicely done!

Author's Response: Thanks =]

Reviewer: Spoony
Date: 10/28/08 2:39
Chapter: A Very Boring Piece Of Homework Warped Into Something Fantastic!

hey this was great- I never read poems- good work

Author's Response: Thanks! I never read them either until I submitted this but there are some good ones out there. They're all slightly more, erm... serious than mine but they're wroth a look =]

Reviewer: FireboltCrasher
Date: 10/27/08 20:25
Chapter: A Very Boring Piece Of Homework Warped Into Something Fantastic!

This is pretty hilarious! The ending was very strange, and so was the part with the Department of Mysteries. You should write more stuff like this.

Author's Response: If you meant he very end, I kind of agree, but I was trying to make it sound like a concludsion to an essay :S Ah well. I'm writing a story at the moment with more of Lily's strange view of the world, so if you want take a look when it's up! =]

Reviewer: Doxy Eggs
Date: 10/27/08 19:02
Chapter: A Very Boring Piece Of Homework Warped Into Something Fantastic!

Ha ha ha, I LOVED IT! This is going straight to my favorites! I especially liked the part about the Disney movies and "Dreams do come true!" part. Very nice.

Author's Response: Who doesn't love a bit of Disney? Thanks for the review! =]

Reviewer: PeaceLovePotter
Date: 10/27/08 16:44
Chapter: A Very Boring Piece Of Homework Warped Into Something Fantastic!

Normally I'm not into to poetry, but this was very funny. Nice job!

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm so glad people like this =]

Reviewer: Calico
Date: 10/27/08 16:43
Chapter: A Very Boring Piece Of Homework Warped Into Something Fantastic!

What an undertaking this must have been! It was funny and lighthearted in spite of all the horrible stuff in Harry's life, and Lily's unique voice is really clear even though hardly any of it is about her. Amazing job!

Author's Response: Glad you liked it, although it didn't take me very long to write. I just sat down one afternoon and it all came out... the editing took a lot longer, though =]

Reviewer: mlskojin
Date: 10/27/08 15:31
Chapter: A Very Boring Piece Of Homework Warped Into Something Fantastic!

That was great. I loved the way you incorporated the plots from all seven years. But you also with held things that Harry would not want everybody to know about. Showing that Lily had questioned her father. I look forward to reading more of your work. And to see what else you can come up with.

Author's Response: Thanks, I'm currently writing a story about Lily and her various chums, so check it out when it's up!

Reviewer: beccleroo
Date: 10/27/08 13:39
Chapter: A Very Boring Piece Of Homework Warped Into Something Fantastic!

That is a beautiful summary of the whole Harry Potter series. If Peeves and the Sorting Hat came up with a summary, I would imagine it sounding a lot like this. Her voice is funny and genuine. Way to go.

Author's Response: Thanks, I like the idea of Peeves making this up, I can imagine Lily was slightly influenced by him =]

Reviewer: Hermoine Jean Granger
Date: 10/27/08 6:59
Chapter: A Very Boring Piece Of Homework Warped Into Something Fantastic!

Hello!

You've summarised the entire series quite adequately in this poem, and have touched almost all of the major plot points. Commendable job on that! However, I do feel that there are some points which you could've included; especially a word or two about Mad-Eye Moody and the imposter. The ending of that paragraph seems to bother me a little.Another thing which could've been included was the Hippogriff bit, which plays an important role in Sirius' escape. The ending again, was unexpected, but you wrapped it up quite well.

Another thing which occured to me while reading this was a question regarding a point which you make here. Lily Luna seems to know all about Disney, but as she was brought up in a all wizard family, that seems a little weird to me.

McGonagall was strict, and Snape was a bitch,
But it all kicked off on the Quidditch pitch.
Malfoy stole Prof. Longbottom’s Rememberall
And flew off with it, breaking the rules!

In this paragraph, the order of events seems to have been reversed. The meeting at the Quidditch Pitch was after the incident wherein Draco stole the the Remembrall. By the way, Remembrall is misspelled there.

And in a girl’s bathroom a diary was found.
Tom Riddle? Sounds like a bad guy to me.
But the diary was stolen! Who could it be?
A message daubed on the wall in red ink,

Here again, the events aren't in chronological order. The writing on the wall appeared much much before Harry found the diary in Myrtle's bathroom. Another thing which bothered me about this part was the rhyme scheme. It seems to go off-tangent over here, especially in the last line. You return to the random alternate rhyme scheme which you utilise throughout the poem, but here, the last line seems to jut out, and that makes it go a little awry. Once small thing: Basilisk is misspelt in this paragraph.

Task Three was a maze worse than at Hampton Court.
Here, though you've compared the maze quite well, I still wonder if Lily would know about Hampton Court at all. As I mentioned before, she was brought up in an entirely wizard atmosphere, and according to me, she wouldn't know much about the Muggle world.

Had an adventure and found a locket
Which, for the sake of rhyme, Dumbledore put in his pocket.

I loved the way you've used Lily's wacky attitude over here. It is funny, well, to me atleast.
And, at the Lovegood’s, a narrow escape.
That should be Lovegoods'

Locked in a cellar that smelt like doom,
They escaped from what could have been their tomb.

In this case, spelt doom seems much more precise and well-fitting rather than 'smelt like doom'.

Overall, I feel that the poem could undergo a few changes to the chronological order of events, and a few technical changes, with regards to rhyme scheme and spellings. I did like it, but I feel that this could sound a little better with a few changes .

~H.J.

Author's Response: Okay, thanks for the tips!

Reviewer: ilovesnape
Date: 10/27/08 6:43
Chapter: A Very Boring Piece Of Homework Warped Into Something Fantastic!

I loved that, made me chuckle out loud a few times! Outstanding!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Glad you liked it

Reviewer: Tariel
Date: 10/27/08 5:52
Chapter: A Very Boring Piece Of Homework Warped Into Something Fantastic!

well. that's a piece of genius, summarising the entire series in one poem. well done! :D

Author's Response: Thanks! You're my first ever reviewer =]

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