It's great!! Very well written... eagerly waiting for the 2nd chapter
Good start! You interwove the back story with the present story very nicely - it flowed back and forth very well - and all sounds very plausible and real so far. James seems like a good character to follow through this Tournament - good luck as you continue!
Author's Response: Thanks, Gina! I hope James will be a good character, and some of the OCs too, as I've spent a lot of time with them. I just find the first chapter of a story is the hardest to write. I want to get right into the meat of the plot, not deal with all the setup stuff! :-) Oh, and happy birthday to the baby! :-)
A very well-done beginning. Lily's first word was Hogwarts? That's funny. Most children's first word is something to the effect of mom or dad. My nephew's was Buddy. That's the dog's name.
I especially liked the bit about Amos Diggory arguing that Cedric would want the torunament to continue. That was a nice touch.
Author's Response: Well, the first word being Hogwarts might have just been slightly sarcastic. :-) But yes, she's clearly excited. My nephew's first word was ball, and he does very well with mama and it's variations. But, he calls everyone close to him mama (even though he knows who his mama is). We think it's a term of endearment. Thanks for your review!