i love this one. Original and very much believable.
I think you have a really nice beginning here! They're very young yet, but you've done a really good job with the characters so far. And when Deathly Hallows came out I wanted something at the end where Harry grieved for everyone he'd lost, so I appreciated that first part. I'm a little confused though about how these first two chapters go together. You've almost set it up in the first chapter as if Harry's going to get some sort of insight into the Marauders' lives, but I'm not sure that's really what you were going for. It doesn't really seem like Harry's involved at all now. Just a thought. I really like your writing style though and I'm excited to see where you go from here!
Author's Response: alright, so you've caught me. i like writing the marauders a load more. see, he's at the first chapter and the last, and there really is almost no connection accept... well i can't tell till the last chapter. but the message of the whole thing is about death and what it accomplishes, so that's what relates. at this point i've written the whole thing but i'm having the hardest time getting it validated! Thanks so much for the review, you've inspired me to try again ~Burning Star
You done awonderful job. I love the quotes in the begginning of each 'section' it really adds a great tone to the piece.
I cant wait for the update.
You capture the emotion of the peice really nice.
Author's Response: thanks so much! you've commented on some of my favorite parts of the story. i love taking a long look at the characters and their feelings and the way they react to situations and put it all together in my own writing. of course, with them so young, it can't reflect as well. look for better characterization (or worse, if i've interpreted it wrong) later on. picking quotes is really fun because i have to capture the essence of each section, kind of the theme behind it, and put that up there but not ruin the stuff that follows. there are some of the most amazing quotes to choose, and i had fun with them, so expect more amazing jkr-ness to follow. next chapter is in the queue
OMG that is soo cute
i all most cried when i at the end with remus
great job cant wait for the update
Author's Response: Hey thanks so much for the review! I'm glad you liked it, since this is my first attempt at a real fanfic, and at getting in the character's heads and situations. I'm working with guesswork obviously as to what happened, but I like to think I'm on the same page as Jo... of you thought that part was sad, wonder how you'll like the chapters at the end. I'm actually done with this, it's only like seven chapters, and the last ones are heavier stuff. Thanks again, ~Burning Star
Hey! Your very first review!
Well, i liked it...i'm a huge MWPP fan, and am a sucker for sentimental stuff, so, i obviously enjoyed it! Carry on!
Author's Response: wow sorry i never got back to you! i have some more to come obviously. this is about seven chapters, all to come, and ends with their deaths, so more sentiment forthcoming. hope i captured the characters well. can't tell yet as they're quite young. next chap is in the queue! ~Burning Star
