Reviews For Saying Goodbye
Reviewer: BE Evans
Date: 01/01/10 17:53
Chapter: Saying Goodbye

Wow! I forgot about this completely until now! It even took me awhile to figure out which part I wrote! It was great working together though! I love the results!

Reviewer: Viv
Date: 04/17/09 15:27
Chapter: Saying Goodbye

I usually don't read much about the Marauders, but this was a nice little one-shot. I liked Seth's character, even if we only see him for a brief moment; how he was ready to risk his own life so he could see the people he loved again was touching. And it felt, with the ending, as if he almost knew how it would end up for him, with this quote he wrote for Lily. Nice quote by the way.

I would've liked to see a little bit more of the Marauders though, to see them react to their friend's death. We each react diffently to a loss, some are angry, others are in denial, etc. James and company sure seemed sad, but showing us how they were affected by the situation could've probably bring more depth to the plot. Of course I understand that the story was more centered around Lily's emotions, and I think you portrayed her well, though I was expecting her to react more "violently" when she was told her friend was dead (knowing her temper).

I spotted a little mistake here: The truth was hard to face, though not as hard as it was going to be to be around the Marauders again. You're repeating the words "to be" twice...

Other than that, I did enjoy your story, it was touching and well written. I think you did both a good job! :)

Reviewer: BE Evans
Date: 09/16/08 17:25
Chapter: Saying Goodbye

Thanks for the review, glad you liked it, Becca! I LOVE Elsewhere!

Author's Response: *headdesk* I forgot, you can't respond to the reviews! So sorry Brooke!

Reviewer: ringobeatlesfan4
Date: 09/09/08 15:24
Chapter: Saying Goodbye

This is such a great story! I love how they were so close to Seth, and that he had the gifts for them in Lily's dorm and that she remembered them. I read this book called Elsewhere where the girl, Liz, died before she could tell her father where his birthday present was. She contacted her brother Alvy with the help of her new friend and her father knew that she loved him. It reminds me of this a lot, and I just love all the emotion in it. Great Job! {BeccA}

Author's Response: I remember that book! Lol. And thank you. I love to here that people liked Brooke's and my story. :D ~Alyssa

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