your doing a great job please keep writing
I really like this story! Its a good blend of the sarcastic and sweet for Draco, and the plot seems interesting. Keep writing! :D
hey this was pretty good...i think its funny how theyre always at each othrs throats..and cute how draco sees his mom in her...thts sweet....but like dracos kind of weird in thinking he wud rather die...he hasnt dun it yet u kno?....i mean i understand his parents died thts really sad and he wants revenge...but is tht th only reason hes alive? to avenge th killers or to be safe bcuz his mom told him to?...like im just confused...what duz draco think of life....if he thinks dying is better thn y is he still alive...unless thts just his front...ok lol sorry for blabbering......but story is really good so far n u do update well...and i love th mystery behind th whole vampire thing its really cool....this story seems realllyyyy promising...=D
Author's Response: What does Draco think of life? I guess we'll have to see (because I haven't decided yet either. >.<). But thank you for the review!
i really like this story so far and the dracula legend and everything update soon
Author's Response: The second the queue opens up again, I'll update! (:
You are doing wonderfully, My Mother who was talking to me while i was reading this chapter says so, evadently i ignored her while she was talking which A.) means its Mythology or Photography B) A amazing Fan fic. I normally dont tune people out unless im really intrested or loving what im reading or listening to. So Keep up the good work! I can't wait to hear about Hermione and Draco's trip to Hogwarts!
Author's Response: You like mythology and photography too? That's wicked.
YAY!! I LOVE IT!! this story is so awesome...
He was greeted by the sight of ten thousand stakes bearing dead people, including Mehmed’s favorite General, Hamza.
General should not be capitalized at all. You're stating what job he has, a general. Not part of his title. If you were saying his favorite, General Hamza, then it would be different. The comma kind of shows that it should be general, Hamza.
Sorry for being anal when it comes down to grammar. I hope you don't mind...
Hermione was intrigued. She was about to go on to the chapter that included Vlad’s transformation into the vampire Dracula
Should be a comma between vampire and Dracula.
Hermione realized that his pupils had dilated and that the normal blue-silver of his eyes had nearly reached a panicked dark blue.
Had shouldn't be used in this section. It's passive voice. Instead:
Hermione realized that his pupils dilated and that the normal blue-silver of his eyes nearly reached a panicked dark blue.
...he had turned a shade of red that would have made Ron proud.
Again, don't need had.
I like how this is going. I can't wait for chapter three to be up. It's a great read =)
Author's Response: How would you like to be my beta? My grammar is HORRIBLE. I'm serious.
The Wizarding World had been safer than ever.
It shouldn't be had been safe. It really should be:
The Wizarding World was safer than ever.
Also, Shacklebolt was a bit out of character.
Finally, I think that it would be a bit more interesting if you didn't make it Dracula the vampire, but one of your own creation, it would be a good read. Good job however =)
I am so glad that you got approved. As I am pretty sure you know you are an amazing writer. though I as your beta have the chapters ahead of I am still insuspense waiting for the rest of your story to come out. I am so happy for you, love!
i read that book i loved it. it's amazing. i heard their doing a ovie for it. i can't wiat.
Author's Response: I know! It blew my mind away; she's a genius! I really did hope I did her some justice.
