Reviews For Sixty-Six
Reviewer: Roommate of the Quillster
Date: 08/27/08 15:45
Chapter: Sixty-Six

Hm… this is interesting. I’m actually very intrigued by it. I like the liberties you took by making the story AU. It’s actually a nice change for me to read. But I suppose I don’t read much dark/angsty so I wouldn’t know how different it is from other stories written in a similar style.

I like the perspective you give from inside Draco’s head. It’s nice to see him as an objective person while inside Azkaban. It’s nice to see him grown up a little from who he was in Hogwarts.

Interesting about his wife… I would have thought there could be more description there. Not necessarily more emotion, but if there were more description or thoughts, that story sequence would have connected with me more.

I also thought that there would have been more with Draco and the guard. Or at least more of Draco’s thoughts around the guard to conclude the unexpected visit from his wife.

Also, perhaps I missed something, but I wasn’t quite sure why Draco was in Azkaban. I didn’t think you got sent there for substance abuse? Or were they after him for another reason because he was in hiding? I missed that part of your story, was it clear?

Anyways, nice work with this, it made me think, and it was nice to read from his perspective in prison—the one place that made him more rational. Interesting.

Author's Response: I don't read (or write, for that matter, with this as the sole exception) D/A either, so I don't know how it fits into the genre. It's funny, I only have one Romance story on the site, when out of the hundreds of pages of fanfic I've written 99.9% of it is solely that! Good point about Astoria. If I ever journey into the dark lands of editing I will look into it! Ohh, Draco was in Azkaban because he killed the Muggle bartender--it wasn't said explicitly; I just hoped it would be clear with the "flash of green light" thing... Hmm. I'll see what I can do to make that clearer! Thanks so much for taking the time to write a thoughtful review; I really appreciate it! :)

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