Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 12/31/08 14:23
Chapter: Daydreaming

very suspenseful.

Author's Response: Thank you :)

Reviewer: Mudblood_and_Proud_of_it357
Date: 11/16/08 10:09
Chapter: Quiet Conversations

Woah, This seems like a really action-packed, dark, and interesting fic. Please keep updating!
Mapoi357

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you see it as that, and I plan for then next update to be as soon as possible :) Thanks again, ~Trivia

Reviewer: indigo_mouse
Date: 08/25/08 23:38
Chapter: Reality

What a lovely evocative beginning! The description of the dream was very beautiful and scary. I like how you let us know that Ellen is Muggle-born with the subtle detail of the light switch - wizards wouldn't have light switches, of course Your summary is very good too - a detail I always struggle with, but yours drew me to your story. It promised something different and interesting, and I can't wait to read the rest of it!.

Ok, a little con-crit here: I am a bit confused as to what era this takes place in. At first I thought Molly was Molly Weasley, but from your description, that seems to not be the case, and the slang seems much later than the 1950s for example: "messed up" seems too modern. I also noticed that "Brian" is spelled "Brain" the first time you use the name (little tiny oops).

Author's Response: Thank you very much! It's nice to have good and bad feed back; now I know what to continue with, and what to change. And it makes me happy :) This is taking place during the first wizarding war, the one that Lily and James were involved in. But I see how people might get confused; "Messed up" is more modern, so I'll have to replace it with something else... and thanks for pointing out the Brian mistake- I'm off to fix it! Thanks again!

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