Reviews For Sirens
Reviewer: Kiryn
Date: 08/06/08 19:59
Chapter: Chapter 1

Well, you can be sure that I'll keep on the lookoutfor your next updates! And it's an interesting story idea, unlike any I've heard before. So good for you! =)

Reviewer: Kiryn
Date: 08/06/08 1:01
Chapter: Chapter 1

Well, it took me a while to figure out what was up with people not wanting her to talk. Only after I looked back at the title did it click. In your summary, I'm confused as to what Lily has to do with anything, or really where the story's going. And what I was hoping for you to explain in the next chapter was how exactly a siren ended up in the care of Muggles.

I hope this makes sense and clears up your confusion. Sorry, cause I was in a hurry when I typed the last review.

Author's Response: I hinted in the first chapter that there were no females born into Malody's family in thirty generations, until she came along, but you're right...it was very vague. Her fathers bloodline carry's the genetic makeup, but until a girl was born, the siren traits never emerged. That doesn't get explained until at least midway through the story. Sirens were said to have used their voices to mesmerize sailors and then when the sailors came to shore, they devoured them. Most legends considered them man eaters...which of course Dumbledore wouldn't advertise. So they keep her bloodline a secret and educate her as if she were like Lily, a muggle who could perform magic. The second chapter (which I'm waiting to get approved) details how Dumbledore asks Lily to befriend her and help her learn to socialize...they buddy up, of course. If you think I'm leaving too much out, I suppose I could put a paragraph at the beginning of the second chapter where Dumbledore basically explains to Lily what Malody is, prior to having her agree to help. There's a love interest (of course), who is purposely kept in the dark about her, and that's why I kept it vague...wanted the reader to figure it out along with the love interest... You have no idea how much I appreciate your comments! Thank you and keep em coming! I'm learning...slowly but surely.

Reviewer: Kiryn
Date: 08/04/08 23:33
Chapter: Chapter 1

This fic is well-written, but confusing. Hopefully you'll explain everything in the next chapter? I'm guessing she's a siren, though, am I right?

Author's Response: Yep, she's a siren... I'm a new writer and building on the HP characters was my first attempt at storytelling...I wanted to be vague in this first chapter, not sure whether I was going to reveal the siren thing or not...so if you have time to be more specific on what was confusing, I'd love the input. I actually have written the siren explanation about mid way through (tossing out hints along the way)...but maybe I need to rethink that. I'm waiting for the second chapter to be approved and I hope you read it and let me know what you think about it as well. Thanks for reviewing it. Wow, I can't believe someone actually read it! LOL!

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