Have you ever read To Kill a Mockingbird? Because I'm reminded quite a bit of the Boo Radley games here.
Have you ever read To Kill a Mockingbird? Because I'm reminded quite a bit of the Boo Radley games here.
I found the story boring with no point. It is as if you just thought one day that youd write a story with no point. On the upside, I think you have a great writeing style. Next time find a different topic and you could have a really great story.
you say that Ron is 8 so Luna would be the same or younger age as him(I can't remember what year she is in comparison to the Trio so). And didn't her mother die when she was 9? if so then her mom would still be living so Ginny wouldn't be playing "a dead person". correct me if I'm wrong about when Lunas mom died.
Author's Response: Thanks for pointing that out. I just realized that Luna's mom died when she was nine; I didn't even think about that when I wrote this. ~ Teresa
I was intrigued by the summary of this story, and overall the story was funny. Everyone was in character (specially Ron!)
I felt you could've made it so much better though. Most of this is dialogue - with some more description (e.g, Ron's expressions) I think this could've been a much better fic. I hope that helps you. :)
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I've never written Ron before, and I'm glad that he was in character. I'll try to put more description in the future. ~ Teresa
Cute! It reminds me of a section in To Kill a Mockingbird, although the kids in that actually got in trouble... and you're a lot funnier!
Author's Response: Thanks! This is my first time writing humor, and I'm glad it came out funny. ~ Teresa
This is really funny. It reminds me a lot of that scene in "To Kill A Mockingbird" where the kids are playing Boo Radley-- have you read that?
I was giggling out loud to myself when I was reading about George's portrayal of Mr. Lovegood-- and the whole childish logic thing about Mr. Harvey was great. The only thing that bothered me was that Ginny seemed a little bit too bright to be eight years old, but then, Ginny's special! Ron was hilarious, by the way.
This reminds me of when I was little. There was this guy at my church, I'll call him Mr. Bunko (even though that's not his real name) who handed out fresh fruit and vegetables outside the church, and my sister and I made up all these songs about him and how he would never let you leave without taking food. Actually, we still do that. The last song about him was composed about two months ago, I'm sorry to admit.
Author's Response: Hey! I did get my inspiration from To Kuill A Mockingbird; it's one of my favorites and I was re-reading it when I was writing this. Thanks for the review! ~ Teresa
He he he! THat was really funny. I bet having those four at home would have been rather interesting...
Author's Response: Thank you! I can't imagine being Mr. Weasley and Mrs. Wealsey; I would go crazy trying to keep up with Fred and George. ~ Teresa
That was a great story! I realy enjoyed it. I just have one question though, didn't Luna's mom die when she was 9? I might be wrong, oh well. Anyway, thanks for a good read!
Author's Response: Thanks! I checked about Luna's mom; she did die when Luna was nine. I didn't realize that; dates aren't my strong point. ~ Teresa
