Reviews For My World
Reviewer: SexY_LydZ
Date: 09/03/08 2:20
Chapter: My World

Oh, sunray, you know me too well. I'm such a sucker for a happy ending! It was so beautifully written, it just sucked me in right from the very start.

Author's Response: I'm glad you like it, Lyd! <3

Reviewer: Colores
Date: 08/22/08 18:06
Chapter: My World

Wow, Sunray. This oneshot was very beautifully written. The rhetoric is haunting and really pulls out intense emotions. Awesome work; you should be very proud.

Author's Response: Thanks hun!...um...Prof Fresca :D I'm glad you liked how I wrote it. Now can you see why the messed up version I posted earlier in class was a total train wreck when compared to what it was supposed to be?

Reviewer: Heiress_of_Insanity_
Date: 08/22/08 14:45
Chapter: My World

Aw! I had my doubts about who was who in the story, but eventually I got it XD I first read the story 'cuz I saw the gorgy-porgy banner that Queen Hal made you. And ALSO I thought that this was a poem at the very beginning, for some strange reason! Maybe because it was written slightly like one? IDK.

This was such a pretty story - the way it was written, the descriptions. You actually feel sorry for Nalanie before you know who she is. I luff it! The only thing is, I'm assuming the explosion was the one that 'killed' Peter and landed Sirius in Azkaban, right? I'm just wondering how he got out of Azkaban, and why he went back in?

Lurve this story, sunray!~

H_o_I_

Author's Response: Hey! Yeah, isn't it purrrrty? I love it, Hal is a-m-a-z-ing! The explosion was one I made up. I had always imagined Voldemort basically magically bombing an Auror training facility, at one point or another during his reighn of terror. Does it show I was traumatized in my youth? XD Anyhow this is before Lily and James die. I wanted a story that didn't even address that. (*I have way to many, I've discovered ;p) I'm glad you like it, hun!

Reviewer: Elf01
Date: 07/29/08 3:39
Chapter: My World

I liked this. You wrote it very well. The love that they felt for each other and the pain she felt at losing him came through in the writing.

Once we learn who the male character is and that there was an explosion, we think that we know what happened, but you prove us wrong. I like the way you brought in the twist.

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Mistletoe
Date: 07/28/08 9:48
Chapter: My World

That was… wow. I love the POV you wrote it from. It made it that much better. You did a wonderful job with keeping me guessing about who the main characters were until you intricately wove it into the story. The pain and suffering you portrayed in this story were so tangible. I felt an ache in my chest the whole time I was ready this.

I really love how you showed so many pieces of their lives. The flowers, the hammock, the doorway. You kept repeating time, emphasizing their importance to her. The way they met is so Sirius too. Saving a damsel in distress :D Very nice job at characterizing a character who isn’t even present!

This was so original, so heart wrenching, and just simply beautiful. I don’t think a story has been able to evoke that type of emotion in me in a long, long time. Good luck in your class :]

--Kat

Author's Response: Hey Kat! I'm glad you like it! Well, to many, Sirius is a knight in shiny black armor ;) Anyway, I'm happy you enjoyed the read! ~Sunray

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