Reviews For Take My Hand
Reviewer: Hufflepuff at heart
Date: 08/07/08 14:56
Chapter: Lead Me To Salvation

That was really sweet. I don't know what else to say but well done! I suppose since others have been big enough to admit it, I'll say it too! It made me cry, especially the lines
Stepping forward together towards the growing light Harry could see a crowd of people. Ron and Hermione stood at the forefront; arms wrapped around each other. Ron’s laughed in a way he hadn’t for the last six months of his life, keeping Hermione close to his side.
I think that's exactly how they would want to go. Well done.

Author's Response: :) I love Ron and Hermione and wanted to show people that they would last as long as Ginny and Harry. I'm glad you liked it!

Reviewer: maisa potter
Date: 08/05/08 15:02
Chapter: Lead Me To Salvation

I can't believe I'm actually crying.... I haven't cry like this since I finished reading the 7th book for the 3th time ( i've read that book three times)..... Your story was amazing, I loved it....

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I cried so much in the 7th book too. It's nice to know that my words can affect people. Thanks for the kind words.

Reviewer: Elf01
Date: 08/05/08 6:15
Chapter: Lead Me To Salvation

I like this. You show how much Harry loves Ginny, and how he would feel without her. You also show that he is not afraid to die. Warning I do have a lot of concrit, and I’ve noticed some typos, so I’ll point them out.

At least he still had his mind, that he wouldn’t trade it for anything as he had never expected it last so long. I would make this into two sentences. At least he still had his mind. He wouldn’t trade it for anything as he had never expected it to last so long.

Thoughts raced around his head but deep down he new it was true. new should be knew.


However, when Healers arrived at the Potter household to inform Mr. Potter, they found he had too passed away. I think that there should be a that between found and he. I would also change too and had around.


Now for the concrit. It looks long but it centres around one paragraph that I found awkward.
Ginny was in St. Mungos again awaiting treatment. She had been in and out of hospital all year but this time the healers had opted to keep her overnight. She was feeling dizzy and nauseous, but otherwise in good spirits. The healers were just keeping her there as a precaution. It was better to be safe then sorry. Harry however was worried. Ginny wasn’t as young as she used to be and Harry had refused to leave her side. Ginny had laughed at his fussing, telling him go home and get some rest. At first he was reluctant but she was stubborn so he left. He missed her terribly. I have a couple of suggestions for this paragraph. Then should be than, something that I didn’t notice on my first read. Maybe you could change She was feeling dizzy and nauseous, but otherwise in good spirits. to Despite feeling dizzy and nauseous she was in good spirits. It prevents you starting two consecutive sentences with she. My main problem is with starting two consecutive sentences with Ginny. This stood out to me. Maybe the second Ginny could be changed to she and At first he was reluctant but she was stubborn so he left could be changed to something like, At first he was reluctant, but eventually he gave in to her request and left.

Back to praise: I loved the image of Harry eating alone for the first time in years. This shows, without telling what losing Ginny would mean to him.

Author's Response: Thanks for the praise and the constructive criticism. I am always looking out for ways to improve. The main reason I get rejected is spelling, typos and grammar. I also have a bad habit of repeating myself or starting sentences the same. I will fix this fic up when I get the chance. Thanks again for taking the time to write constructive advice and tips for improvement!

Reviewer: elvendork_luvs_ginny
Date: 08/05/08 0:22
Chapter: Lead Me To Salvation

Wow! That was great! It takes a lot for me to cry but that did it. GREAT JOB!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! It's always nice to know when you make someone cry...in a good way I mean....

Reviewer: mennonitethespian
Date: 08/04/08 9:17
Chapter: Lead Me To Salvation

This is excellent. I saw Les Mis only days ago, and this story reminded me so much of it, I started crying. Thanks for the story!

Author's Response: Is it wrong for me to be happy that someone cried? I love Les Mis so much and the Epilogue is one of the best pieces in the whole play. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: potterfan48
Date: 08/03/08 23:32
Chapter: Lead Me To Salvation

That was a nice one shot. Very sweet!

Author's Response: :)

Reviewer: mlskojin
Date: 08/03/08 3:02
Chapter: Lead Me To Salvation

That was really touching. And very well writen. I believe that true love such as Harry's and Ginny's would have never ended and just continued on to the next world and They would have most deffently have been greated with open and loving arms of those that have pasted before them.

Author's Response: Thanks for the kind words. Its always nice to know when someone finds what you have written touching. True love shouldn't end with "death do us part" and friends will welcome each other beyond death.

Reviewer: FriendofMolly
Date: 08/02/08 19:59
Chapter: Lead Me To Salvation

Oh how wonderful, how sweet an end to Harry and Ginny's earth life. I hope you have more. The reunion in Heaven should be great.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review and kind words! Alas I didn't plan to write anymore from this particular story but maybe one day I will. A reunion in heaven does sound like a good idea....

Reviewer: lyssa0128
Date: 08/02/08 17:25
Chapter: Lead Me To Salvation

This was SO beautiful! I can't think of a better or more fitting end for their story.
Fantastic job!

Author's Response: Hey thanks! But is it the end or just another beginning? Thanks for the compliments and the review!!

Reviewer: JCCollier
Date: 08/02/08 14:26
Chapter: Lead Me To Salvation

Wonderful. A touching ending and reunion. It occured to me there was one more symbolic moment that could be there. I wish their friends had met them as they stepped from that heavenbound train from King's Cross (where Harry found himself when he first 'died').

Author's Response: Thanks for the compliments! Yeah that would have been a good Idea, but maybe Harry had experienced so much more in his life that Kings Cross was no longer the gateway, that it didn't really matter where the gateway was as long as Ginny was there? *Wishes she thought of Kings Cross idea* Oh well, I'm glad you liked it anyway!

Reviewer: Mudblood_and_Proud_of_it357
Date: 08/02/08 14:15
Chapter: Lead Me To Salvation

Usually its hard for me to think about Harry's death, but this is exactly how I would want it to be. Fantastic, heartwrenching job!

Author's Response: It's exactly how I want it to, Harry and Ginny leaving together.

Reviewer: Harpotfan
Date: 08/02/08 13:18
Chapter: Lead Me To Salvation

This is just as I would imagine Harry and Ginny doing for each other.

Author's Response: Me too. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: sirblackman
Date: 08/02/08 12:32
Chapter: Lead Me To Salvation

good stuff

Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you liked it! :)

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