Reviewer: Karya
Date: 06/05/09 14:22
Chapter: Chapter Eleven: The Head's Dormitory

Ahhhhhhh!!! Oh, you have outdone yourself this time! It'd been a while since i read it all and wanted to refresh before i read this chapter and i'm glad i did. This chapter was absolutely amazing, all those pranks, everything! Please Please keep writing i can't wait to read the next chapter!

Author's Response: Firstly, sorry for taking so long to reply. I'm glad you really enjoy this story, I love making people laugh. I promise I'm continuing to write and it will be finished hopefully soonish :D

Reviewer: Kopycat
Date: 06/04/09 12:07
Chapter: Chapter Eleven: The Head's Dormitory

A god for eternity for throwing a pie at McGonagall

Author's Response: :D :D

Reviewer: crzyabtpttr
Date: 05/26/09 1:02
Chapter: Chapter Eleven: The Head's Dormitory

hey! dat was real sweet.plz writ nxt chaptr soon!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: Thanks :)

Reviewer: Sdogg
Date: 05/22/09 17:28
Chapter: Chapter Eleven: The Head's Dormitory

Definitely love this chapter sooo much! I love the gradual way Lily and James talk more and more, and as a reader I barely realize they're become better friends! Great story, keep writing!

Author's Response: Thanks -- that was exactly my aim, sometimes I feel cheated when it happens to suddenly! Sorry this reply was so late :)

Reviewer: sarinne01
Date: 05/19/09 18:46
Chapter: Chapter Eleven: The Head's Dormitory

love it love it love it. Although I think the prank should have been an all out food fight instead of just one pie. I still love this story. Please finish it?

Author's Response: Thanks! This story is nearly finished. Only about 2000/3000 words to go?

Reviewer: ron lover
Date: 05/18/09 21:46
Chapter: Chapter One: Why Am I Doing This Again?

I love this story so far. It's one of the only ones that I check to see if it's updated. You do the characters perfacty. This is almost my favorite story and your doing a perfect job! :D

Author's Response: Thanks! Sorry it took so long to reply. I'm glad it's one of your favourites. Hopefully there will be an update in about 2 weeks.

Reviewer: LilyLovedJames
Date: 05/17/09 10:57
Chapter: Chapter Eleven: The Head's Dormitory

This is an awesome story! I actually laughed out loud when the pie hit McGonagall's face! Update quickly! I want to know what happens next!
x

Author's Response: :) That seems to be a favourite moment. I'm glad you like this story, sorry it took so long to reply

Reviewer: MagEd
Date: 05/16/09 10:39
Chapter: Chapter Eleven: The Head's Dormitory

I rarely read multichaptered fanfiction anymore, simply because I have very little free time and I more often spend it working on my own stories or reading quick, one-shots. I saw this story recommended on a Lily/James livejournal group that I frequent and it seemed like such a fun idea that I couldn't resist trying it out. I am very, very glad I did. I wish I had been a good enough person to review with each chapter, but I was too desperate to get on to the next chapter. I'll try and make up for that now.

First and foremost, you write very well. You have very good grammar -- something that always bothers me when its poor -- and you have nearly no typos. Your writing also has a great flow to it as well as realism. I can imagine everything you describe happening. As appealing an idea as it is, I can imagine a story about a girl and a boy switching bodies being very hard to tackle. You did it so well, however. Poor James having to put up with PMSing! My brother only just learned that girls go through that every month. His response was, "Oh Maggie, I'm so sorry!" I think you described James's reaction to all of that perfectly.

I also love how you have James so sure of his love for Lily. I can't remember exactly which chapter it was, but when you had James thinking how their children better get his Quidditch skills, I was smiling. I also like how realistic you make his feelings for her, how you describe him trying not to like her and declaring that he's over her only to keep being drawn back in and unable to resist vocalizing his feelings every few months. It makes a lot more sense than stories that have him continuously after her.

Perhaps my favorite part of the story -- or at least a large reason why I like it so much -- is that you show Lily slowly falling in love with him. It's not at all sudden, but the reader can feel it building. I hate it when fanfictions -- and books, too -- just have characters immediately fall in love with one another. Perhaps its because I don't personally believe in love at first sight or maybe it's simply because its fun to read about how love comes to be, but I really do hate it when stories skip that. I like to read about Lily falling in love with James, and you write it perfectly in this story.

It was a real treat to read this, and I can't wait to read more. You haven't really left this chapter on a cliffhanger (something I can't help but always do in my stories), but I'm still dying for me. Great job. Thank you so much for sharing your ideas and your writing skill :)

Author's Response: *Stars at the screen*
*Blinks*
*Blinks again*
*Realises she is not breathing*
*Takes a breath before she passes out*

Sorry about that display, but before I go on, I must tell you how much I love your stories. (Honestly, go and check out my favourite authors list.) Looking back, I must say some of my reviews on your stories were quite fanatical, I have definitely improved my writing! You have been my favourite author since from when I first read 'When Darkness Did Surround Us' and I have emulated you in many aspects of how I write (Many cliff hangers, notes on where I am going next on my authors profile, sneak peaks ect.). So this review has been the highest of compliments to me because I look up to you as an author.
br> Many thanks must go to my Betas for your first comment. Also, recently I started reading the story to my sister and editing as I go. Its amazing what you pick up when you read out loud. Thanks for the complements though! James putting up with PMSing - it was quite fun to write. Boys are so clueless aren't they? The line "A whole week?" actually comes from one of my male friends, when I explained that it isn't just a quick once a month thing. It got me thinking how James would feel...

I'm glad you like the way I've portrayed James. James is often such a flat character in stories, where all he does is ask Lily around and mope. I wanted to show that he has tried to get over her, and that beneath he wants what is best for her, but continually gets drawn back. I think he has so much depth that people so rarely explore (hence why I love Someone to Watch Over Me).

I defiantly agree with you on the instant love thing. Why on earth would Lily suddenly change her mind for no reason? It takes time, and changed situations for old conceptions to break down. I'm glad you like it :)

Thanks so much for the review :) Honestly, it made my day.

Reviewer: thegirloverhere
Date: 05/15/09 22:01
Chapter: Chapter One: Why Am I Doing This Again?

Oh, wow, that was pretty epic. You're great at keeping it original and TOTALLY hysterical. I was sooo happy when I saw the update. Great story :)

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Sorry for taking so long to update/reply

Reviewer: padfoot n prongs
Date: 05/15/09 13:34
Chapter: Chapter Eleven: The Head's Dormitory

pls hurry and post chapters quickly!!..i loved thiis chapter..especially the ending

Author's Response: Thanks :)

Reviewer: padfoot n prongs
Date: 05/15/09 13:34
Chapter: Chapter Eleven: The Head's Dormitory

pls hurry and post chapters quickly!!..i loved thiis chapter..especially the ending

Author's Response: Sorry but the long waits... and sorry that it has taken me so long to respond. Info is now up on my authors page. Thanks for the review :D

Reviewer: the_DRIFTER
Date: 05/15/09 12:46
Chapter: Chapter Eleven: The Head's Dormitory

I absolutely love this story! It is hysterical - I must have laughed about 100 times already! Keep it up! This is amazing! Can't wait for the next chapter.

Author's Response: Thanks, hope you liked the next chapter. I'll try and update soon.

Reviewer: LilyflowernProngs
Date: 05/10/09 16:44
Chapter: Chapter Eleven: The Head's Dormitory

BRAVO!!!! thank you SO much for continuing your story! I love it! James and Lily written in perfection! Please update soon! i cannot stand the suspense!

Author's Response: Thanks for your review. An update might be a while, but I swear that it won't be as long as the last update. :) I'm glad you are enjoying this fic, there are only two or three chapters to go.

Reviewer: The_Dream_Team
Date: 05/09/09 13:48
Chapter: Chapter Eleven: The Head's Dormitory

omg! great pranks btw! i actually said "Awww" at that last part: “If I had a son,” she explained, her smile even wider then before. “I would call him Harry.” I LOVE THAT! great story and i cant wait until u update again!

Author's Response: Thanks, the idea for the naming thing just floated into my head and I had to write it. Glad it made you go aww :D

Reviewer: bk64
Date: 05/09/09 4:32
Chapter: Chapter Eleven: The Head's Dormitory

That (as always) was really good and worth the wait...i do wonder however, what both their resepctive friend groups think about them spending so much time together...especially when a lot of that time is spent with their heads together, looking very suspicious!

Author's Response: Sorry for taking so long to reply. Tee hee, their friends are suspicious, but would they ever guess the truth? Thanks again for the review :D

Reviewer: JustiPotter
Date: 05/07/09 18:27
Chapter: Chapter One: Why Am I Doing This Again?

Please write more, quickly!
You are amazing.

Author's Response: Sorry for replying so slowly! Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: QueenOlympias
Date: 05/07/09 6:40
Chapter: Chapter Eleven: The Head's Dormitory

again i loved it!!

Author's Response: Thanks :D

Reviewer: Passion For Prongs
Date: 05/06/09 21:46
Chapter: Chapter Eleven: The Head's Dormitory

Really great chapter. I loved it, especially all the pranks Lily did to get into trouble!!! And I liked the bit about Harry, too!!!

~Passion For Prongs

Author's Response: Sorry for taking ages to review! I'm glad you liked the bit about Harry - I couldn't resist including it :D

Reviewer: Bookaddict
Date: 05/06/09 18:56
Chapter: Chapter Ten:: Every Man's Worst Fear

haha boys so wood not like to go through PMS.

Author's Response: Lol, they wouldn't indeed :P

Reviewer: Little Miss Witch
Date: 05/06/09 15:10
Chapter: Chapter Eleven: The Head's Dormitory

Wow!
Well, I was going to give you into trouble for the long wait, but the chapter was so good I decided to forgive you. Happy Days!
I especially liked the name game...it was really good! Oh, and how DID James get the baby name book? Please don't say he'd had it for ages...
Keep up the good work, Captain!
(I don't know why Captain there...)
Little MIss Witch x

Author's Response: Sorry for taking so long to reply! Life got away from me.. How did James get the baby names book? Because he is James of course! Keep reading, Matey! (While we are pirates)

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