This was just... fantastic. I've never read this pairing before, but I think you may have won me over! Again, great job!
Wow. This is . . . wonderful. I felt like I was right there with them through the whole thing, feeling everything they were feeling. I'd kill to be able to write like that.
I don’t generally read slash, but I figured if I’m going to read slash, Lei’s fic is probably a good choice. Of course, I was right. I knew you could write Remus and Sirius well, and I was not let down.
I love the switching between Remus and Sirius. You’ve captured both of their characters perfectly. Remus is reluctant and Sirius is just a little bit selfish, and that’s how they were. It’s not only who their characters are; it also works for this pairing. One of them has to be reluctant and one of them has to be too selfish to bother with reluctance. That’s how the pairing ends up working (or not working). It’s great.
The ‘how it started’ thing is lovely. Sirius’s voice is so perfect, I can’t get over it; it’s clear even in a third person narration. Remus looking like shit is just priceless. You manage to include humor without straying from the slightly depressing nature of the story (not complaining about the depressing thing, by the way).
Ah, poor Remus. And poor Sirius. It’s so sad, the way you’ve written this, but it’s so good, too. Perhaps that’s why Sirius suddenly feels like the biggest fuck-up in history: because he has put them in a highly awkward situation and Remus will never forgive him for it. Yeah, I have no reason for putting that there except that I loved it.
He knew when Remus was fast asleep; the air shifted, and his quiet snores often tempered the cacophony of James’s. That’s lovely. It’s shows how connected Sirius and Remus are. Even though James and Sirius are supposed to be the ‘best’ friends, I feel like the relationship between Sirius and Remus is really quite special all on its own.
The end is heartbreaking but poignant and lovely and wonderful. You did a brilliant job here, Lei.
I agree with Binka Fudge... and the rest who reviewed... this was too short and sweet, too heartwrenching. I feel like I need a drink after reading this.
But great story overall. Sirius is how I picture him, even in a drunken stupor - brash and foolish. The dialogue between is real funny to me, espeically in the Remus is described before they started drinking.
I love the sense of regret in it, how it build itself up to that moment. It felt like Sirius knew he had to take a chance even though he'll hate himself in the morning after it happens. Life is like that sometimes - full of risks.
*takes a shot of whiskey*
Oh, poor Sirius. ;)
This was very well done. I love how you switched back and forth as you did, slowly showing what led up to what was happening. It was almost seamless - it all seemed to fit together that way. It's one of those stories that, if told chronologically, just isn't the same. I love how you told it. =)
The ending was amazing. I mean, it was sad and kinda heartbreaking, but you wrote it perfectly. Endings are the bane of my existence - so I can fully appreciate the amazing ones, and I do. It was just two short sentences, but they worked.
Overall, this is truly one of the better SB/RL slash fics I've ever read, and especially one of the best D/A ones. Great job. *showers with amazement and awe*
that was good!!!
Aww. That was too dang short :( I do love your writing style though. Where it lacks in the usual description it makes up for with... Well, what you've done. I dun know how to phrase it though. Beautiful style.
I think that you've portrayed Serius wonderfully. He's very cannon ('cept for the whole homosexual thing, I guess) yet he's... Ah, lost me' words.
As for the story, well, when it got to the part I was waiting for, it was over :( Therein lies the sad part. Any hopes of this continuing? You built it up very nicely and, also short, the resolution was perfect.
Very nice indeed.
This has left me feeling quite miserable but i'm not sure why. Very well written though.