Reviewer: coolh5000
Date: 12/29/08 18:18
Chapter: Chapter 1

It took me a while to fully understand (and I hope I have grasped it all now) but I thought this was a great fic. From the way Addison was talking, I began to think that she was in real danger, but then to learn that the reason she went to such great lengths was just to hear the person she loved telling her that he loved her was so beautiful and so sad.

I was amazed that Snape agreed to do it, but the fact that he recognised his own feelings for Lily when he looked at Addison through Sirius’ eyes was very powerful and effective.

I’m glad that you are continuing to use the character of Addison and I thought the characterisation of all your characters was great. I especially like the way Lucius summoned her using ‘accio’, so typical of his disdainful treatment towards her.

Reviewer: Elf01
Date: 07/23/08 3:09
Chapter: Chapter 1

It makes a lot more sense now.

Reviewer: Elf01
Date: 07/21/08 4:36
Chapter: Chapter 1

I like most of what you have. Your writing is good, but I found this confusing in places and would like more background on it. I think that would help me clear it up.

This also needs an AU (or DH disregarded) in terms of the fate of one of the characters.

Author's Response: Ummm . . . It's just after Voldemort killed the Potters, so everyone is still alive! Boy, it is confusing!

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