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Name: late_stranger (Signed) · Date: 08/08/09 22:36 · For: When Green Was Just a Colour
I'm crying. That was so sad... I'm sorry to say that Roldophus has always just been Bella's husband to me, before now. It's so heartbreaking, how the pureblood families totally ruined their kids' lives - it happened to Draco, and we all know about that, but it's great that someone cared enough to write Roldolphus' (unofficial) story.

This was brilliant, and I love Becca - she's just perfect (not Mary-Sue, just amazingly characterized). The only thing I would have loved to see (The kind of thing I would write a fanfiction of) is a scene where many years later, after he's married, Roldolphus goes on a killing spree with the Death Eaters, and he sees Becca again, and either kills her or doesn't (I'm not sure).

Also, I loved how you had Rabastan so strongly verbalizing his hatred, and using Bella as a bribe and a threat, and how Roldolphus is so upset and confused and hurt, and how the Sorting Hat tried to sort him into Gryffindor and Ravenclaw... It was brilliant. I love your characterization.

This has definitely transformed Roldolphus into a character, where he was previously just a name. Thanks.

Name: liquid_silver (Signed) · Date: 10/20/08 17:37 · For: When Green Was Just a Colour
Very nice. The emotions are wonderfully portrayed, and I love the ending. Good job.

Name: red haired mom (Signed) · Date: 07/24/08 8:36 · For: When Green Was Just a Colour
Holy cow, Alison! That was absolutely amazing. I loved it. I knew you could write Rodolphus as no one else could, but this… this is the best one yet.

I really liked that you have the inner struggle going hand in hand with the outer arguments with Rabastan. The slight, and not so slight, manipulations were masterfully done.

Becca would have made a great counterpart to the boy on the inside, but of course, we know it’s the man on the outside that is what got Bella. I even like that their names are similar.

I did find a small mistake close to the end. You’re good, and being with me would run you. I think you meant ruin.

Other than that… I think this is the best story you’ve written to date. Excellent job! ~Wendy

Name: Hufflepuff at heart (Signed) · Date: 07/18/08 10:33 · For: When Green Was Just a Colour
This was an interesting look at why a death eater might choose to be a death eater, well done.

I was wondering about the lines such as: '“Not all Slytherins are evil, in case you haven’t noticed,” I spat.'
Do you think that death eaters-to-be such as Rabastanthey would really consider themselves evil? They obviously see themselves as "dark", but they also seem to genuinely believe that they are superior to Muggleborns, etc.

But anyway, I'll get back on topic! It was interesting to see the story of a character who is very often forgotten about, and you portrayed his struggle between what he hopes for and what his family want well. Great stuff!

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