Reviewer: red haired mom
Date: 12/30/09 13:07
Chapter: The Key to My Heart

“Lily’s-gone-completely-haywire-and-I-don’t-think-thay-you-should-leave-Harry-alone-in-the-house-with-her”
I think you meant to say, “Lily’s-gone-completely-haywire-and-I-don’t-think-that-you-should-leave-Harry-alone-in-the-house-with-her”
This was one of the cutest stories I’ve read in a long while. As a mom, I know all about little boys wanting cake now, now, now! I adored the names little Harry called the others and the cat’s name is just too cute.

I loved how you showed a mother’s love being able to bring her out of a black mood. It really does work that way. Any mother who can withstand her child’s good mood and stay upset is just too uptight in my opinion. You did such a great job on the characterisations and except for a few slips in Harry’s speech, I’d say a job well done!
~Wendy

Reviewer: Harry_Potter4life
Date: 09/30/09 16:55
Chapter: The Key to My Heart

Awwwww...I love it. It's so cute!!!!

Reviewer: OHara
Date: 08/29/09 14:23
Chapter: The Key to My Heart

That was very cute! I noticed that Harry didn't seem quite so enthusiastic about Wormtail coming over. Sharp kid! :)

Author's Response: Aha I'm glad you noticed that! Thanks so much for the review! I really hope you enjoyed it!

Reviewer: MJ_Padfoot
Date: 02/26/09 21:58
Chapter: The Key to My Heart

This is one of those short and simple, oober cute (yes, I did just use the word 'oober' . . . oh boy), and a great fiction. I'd like to see a little more. I can see a thicker plot come into play if you were to continue this. Thank you again for the banner and sorry for the type-o. ;) ~MJ

P.S. I really liked the PB & J part. That was really clever. =) ~MJ

Author's Response: awe thanks! Any suggestions for further development are very welcomed! The banner was no problem! I really enjoyed making it! Request and review again any time! :)

Reviewer: IndigoPassion
Date: 01/27/09 11:19
Chapter: The Key to My Heart

Aw, dude that's sweet as :)

I really like the charactarization of Lily. I usually hate her in all fics. I dunno why, but there's something about her that just really gets me.

Great, Caus I'm going to write a James Lily fic soon. Lol.

Anyway. Yeah, one little nitpick. Harry, I think he was much to sharp and intelligent for his age. He spoke to well, too.

Now if he was three, it would have been completly accurate. But at one, he would have just learnt his first words, so.. I dunno.

That's just me being picky, lol. Other than that, it was absolutly amazing. Beautiful. Haha.

' I pictured myself packing him a PB&J sandwich for his first train ride to Hogwarts. I could see him passing his NEWTs with all Os, and throwing the Quaffle into a Quidditch Hoop for the Gryffindor Quidditch team.'

That was my favourite line. It was actually so cute. Especially if you compare it to what really happened.

Harry didn;t get his favourite sandwhiches, he got nothing. Instead, he met a boy who had his least favourite.

He never even took his NEWTs. Instead he dropped out and went Horocrux hunting ;)

And he never did Chase. He was always the Seeker. :)

Lol.

Loved it :)

-Lex

Author's Response: glad you liked it Lek! Yah.... I know he talks a bit too much... but I really needed him to be like that for the story :P And the sandwich thing was what I was trying to point out... :') SOMEONE GETS ME!

Reviewer: Siriusly Mr Black
Date: 09/14/08 11:27
Chapter: The Key to My Heart

This has to be one of the sweetest stories i have read in a long time. i think you captured the mother son relationship beatifully, and the way a one year old would react.

Author's Response: That totally made my day! Thanks sooooooo much! And I really needed the boost too! YOU ROCK MY MULTICOLOURED DOBBY SOCKS!!!

Reviewer: Trivia Camlee
Date: 08/26/08 14:53
Chapter: The Key to My Heart

Wow! All this from just a prompt? It was an enjoyable story to read, very realistic. And I think the cat's name is hilarious :)

My only nit-pick is that everything seemed to happen so fast in this story. I felt like it went from breakfast straight to lunch, without Lily having done much else. But other then that, nice job!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! It went fast because it was originally a drabble, so I had to fit it under 800 words, and then I tried to fill it out afterwards.

Reviewer: PadfootnPeeves
Date: 07/22/08 9:37
Chapter: The Key to My Heart

Aw, so cute, Christine! Baby Harry's adorable, and Lily was portrayed nicely. I remember seeing this drabble on the forums- it turned into a very nice fic!
~Padfoot

Author's Response: why thank you very much PnP!! Thanks for the review!!!

Reviewer: Elf01
Date: 07/22/08 3:02
Chapter: The Key to My Heart

aww. Harry is such a sweet baby. I love how you show Lily's love for him (him holding the key to her heart), and he speaks like a one year old.

One tiny nitpick: the first time he says Sirus and Remus' names he should say Peter's too.

Author's Response: yah i kinda realized that one :P thanks so much for reading!! i love Harry too! ;)

Reviewer: DragonDi
Date: 07/21/08 20:47
Chapter: The Key to My Heart

Oh, what a sweet story! I love this! So typical of a small child and a mother's love. Very good!

Author's Response: awe thank you so very much!

Reviewer: iranian__rose
Date: 07/21/08 20:40
Chapter: The Key to My Heart

hey! i am the first to read your amazing story! love it!!

Author's Response: you rock my dobby socks! XD

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