Reviewer: captburke
Date: 01/12/09 19:49
Chapter: Part Two: Purgatory, The First Terrace

Marvelous plot flow. I really like the way you bring traits out in characters that JKR hinted at but never went into detail on because they weren't essential to her plots or story line. Even Dumbledore alluding to being gay, which was never even overtly hinted at in the books.

Author's Response: If you're going to introduce another gay character like Freddy, it makes sense to write Dumbledore as gay as well. He jokes about it with Tonks because he knows that she is perfectly comfortable with such lifestyle choices. He also recognizes that Remus and Minerva are equally open minded. I suspect, however, that he would not have made any such references in the presence of a disapproving Umbridge. I tried to paint it just like it is in a regular high school where the students barely acknowledge that the teachers are human and the teachers (adults) know about each others personal lives, even if it is a taboo subject with students.

Reviewer: captburke
Date: 01/12/09 19:20
Chapter: Inferno: The Ninth Circle

I really hope Umbridge is/was in Azkaban for the rest of her unnatural life. I think I hate that woman more than Harry and friends. I like the expansion of some of the subplots from the books, especially of Tonks, Remus and Kingsley.

Author's Response: Remus and Kingsley form a real bond during this that will be carried over into their handling of the final battle. More of Kingsley's relationship with Tonks in the Auror department will be alluded to in future chapters.

Reviewer: captburke
Date: 01/12/09 17:47
Chapter: Inferno: The Eighth Circle

I love this side of McGonagall. The non-Professor side of her you've written is really wonderful. Do we ever find out what happened to her husband? I'm guessing she still had school age children when she started teaching at Hogwart's. I'm sort of hoping Tonks and Remus get together a little sooner than in the HP series. They most certainly need each other, and deserve whatever happiness they can find.

Author's Response: You're right that she probably had school aged children when she started teaching. The Marauders are part of that generation that falls between that of her children and her grandchildren. I've definitely tweaked with the Remus/Tonks interaction as there is absolutely nothing in the books before the showdown in the Hospital Wing after Dumbledore's death. But I still have to fit the infamous "too old, too poor, too dangerous" statement into my story so that affects my timeline. In true JKR style, though, the portion of the conversation that you overheard will led you to a conclusion that is somewhat different from the truth.

Reviewer: captburke
Date: 01/12/09 16:54
Chapter: Inferno: The Seventh Circle

Becoming more intriguing by the chapter. I wonder just how much Freddy suspects/knows and where he might be of more help than Remus thinks. The conversations between them are masterpieces.

Author's Response: I, too, love the banter between these two. Remus is really daring with virtual strangers, he only chokes up with the people that he's really close to. Can't answer the question about how much Freddy knows as it will ruin some of the future plot points, sorry. Just keep it in the back of your mind.

Reviewer: captburke
Date: 01/12/09 13:53
Chapter: Inferno: The Sixth Circle

I like the way the story is progressing. I was thinking Harry should be at the Burrow by now, but maybe not as much time has passed as it appears. The relationship between Tonks and Remus is waiting to happen. I wish he had given in before Dumbledore died.

Author's Response: In one of the next chapters I refer to Harry's birthday at the Burrow so that should help you with the timeline. Not to give anything away, but Dumbledore knows that Tonks and Remus will end up together long before he dies. He just hase to give the two of them the space to come to the inevitable conclusion themselves.

Reviewer: captburke
Date: 01/12/09 13:16
Chapter: Inferno: The Fifth Circle

I like Freddy, it's very clear he has Tonks best interest at heart and will do anything for her. I like his devious thinking, that part reminds me of me.

Author's Response: Freddy is so much fun to write. Especially how Remus has to rethink what they have in common.

Reviewer: captburke
Date: 01/12/09 12:55
Chapter: Inferno: The Fourth Circle

I most certainly had tears in my eyes reading Sirius letter. You've certainly captured Remus and Sirius as I pictured them from JKR's writing.

Author's Response: Believe it or not, I wasn't that big a fan of Sirius when I read the books, always thought Remus made a better father figure. But when I started to write this story, Sirius came to life before my eyes and then the tragedy of his death became that much more real for me.

Reviewer: captburke
Date: 01/12/09 12:12
Chapter: Part One: Inferno, The First Circle

I want to be Sirius when I grow up. Unfortunately I have no intention of ever growing up.

Author's Response: So now you're like Tonks. She's the one who I envision like Peter Pan.

Reviewer: captburke
Date: 01/12/09 1:03
Chapter: Inferno: The Third Circle

Dumbledore will always be my hero. Remus doesn't stand a chance of fooling him.

Author's Response: Dumbledore is also Remus' hero in many ways as you will find. I try to make him the voice of reason in many cases, infinitely wise and patient, but not unwilling to admit that he is not infallible.

Reviewer: captburke
Date: 01/12/09 0:47
Chapter: Inferno: The Second Circle

Definitely going to like this one too. Well, except for when Sirius gets killed.

Author's Response: Glad to know you discovered this one too. It's a lot different from the other one, though. Not as long in total length, but much more intense. The voice of the narration, since it is told by an adult (primarily Remus) is quite different from the other. I hope I have done a credible job of letting in on how his mind works. And it's definitely a mind that works overtime at times.

Reviewer: captburke
Date: 01/12/09 0:21
Chapter: Part One: Inferno, The First Circle

I like the beginning. I can easily imagine just such a conversation between the two of them.

Author's Response: I really grew to like Sirius so much more writing this. Made him dying again feel that much worse, though.

Reviewer: DragonDi
Date: 01/09/09 21:58
Chapter: Finding Paradiso: The Third Sphere

This is a beautiful and yet difficult chapter, because you can feel the hope and the love, but there is still enough of the trepidation and fear that makes you wonder if these two will ever get it together. (Even if we knkow they do...) You've done an amazing job of walking that tightrope. LOVE it! Love all the clashing (yet still hopeful) emotions, and how you've been able to capture it all. Looking forward to the next chapter!

Author's Response: The tango that these two do around the harsh truth and around one another has been one of the most interesting things about writing these stories. Like real people, they often have radically different takes on the same incidents. Mest chapter is already in queue and will take you through the nerve-wracking night that they patrol the castle while Dumbledore takes Harry to the cave in search of the Horcrux.

Reviewer: DragonDi
Date: 01/09/09 20:18
Chapter: Part Three: Finding Paradiso, The First Sphere

I love the interactions between Remus and Ginny. That was a great idea you had! (I really had been worried that Molly Weasley would show up...)

And THANK YOU for finally allowing someone to tell Tonks that though, yes, it seems like Remus has been a selfish, self-centered pigheaded prat, he has issues--huge issues--and she needs to be a bit more patient. (I'm sure that the fact that one's friends always seem to DIE might weigh heavily on one's desire to get closer to someone...) Now Remus has to just break out of that vicious cycle...

Author's Response: Don't worry about Molly showing up, she's a necessary character but hardly one of my favorites. Tonks probably wouldn't have accepted those words from anyone other than Dumbledore, but his quiet words of wisdom move her. The fact that people seem to keep dying around you is the basis of Remus' rapport with Harry. Same reasoning that Harry used to break up with Ginny at end of HPB. Don't you just love how the themes interweave?

Reviewer: DragonDi
Date: 01/09/09 19:51
Chapter: Purgatory: The Ninth Terrace

Egad! You had me in tears--AGAIN. Sheesh! You're only the second writer who has ever brought me to tears twice in one story. Amazing job! And you've made a point that I've said many times (and actually made in a story I posted on another website): Remus and Severus are very much alike. Their circumstances and their tendencies to mask their true selves from everyone have made them shadows of one another, in a way. If only they would have been able to get past the Whomping Willow incident (and Sirius Black!) and allowed themselves to be friends... Sigh. On to the next chapter!

Author's Response: Good to know my analogy between Snape and Remus holds true for you as well. Where is the story you posted to another website? I'd really like to read it for myself since we arrived at similar conclusions independently of one another.

Reviewer: DragonDi
Date: 01/09/09 19:18
Chapter: Purgatory: The Eighth Terrace

Well, THAT just couldn't have gone any worse! And here I was setting myself up to read a touching, 'you've been an idiot, but you're my idiot--glad you're safe, but you're still an idiot' sort of welcome by Tonks. Guess I was wrong, eh? Still, it was very much in character all the way around, and I know--truly I do--that what you wrote would have been more likely what would have happened. Excellent characterizations! Have I said you're a wonderful writer? (Chuckle)

Author's Response: That's what makes the characters fun, especially when they're both hard-headed in different ways. Keep on reading for more dancing around one another.

Reviewer: DragonDi
Date: 01/09/09 18:53
Chapter: Purgatory: The Seventh Terrace

The sweat has now rolled off my palms and is dripping from my fingers, making my fingers slip off the keys. And if my new laptop takes a disliking to the moisture and dies, I will expect a new one from you! You have me on the edge of my seat... Have I said yet that you're a fabulous author? No? Hmm. Silly me. Now, on to the next chapter to find out about these oncoming wolves that it seems Remus is soon to encounter...

Author's Response: Glad to know that you felt the suspense and danger that I was trying to impart. Thanks for the stirring words.

Reviewer: DragonDi
Date: 01/09/09 18:29
Chapter: Purgatory: The Sixth Terrace

Gosh, I thought Remus was going to get caught for sure in this chapter! Sorry I haven't been keeping up, and even sorrier that I haven't reviewed--but I got caught up in the last few chapters that I'd missed. This chapter left my palms sweaty! Well done!

Author's Response: Catch up all at once can be fun, too. I was able to update quite a bit over the holidays as the queue time seemed to have shrunk considerably. Guess most people actually had a life. Thats where staying ahead of the curve really helped as I had a lot of things ready to go.

Reviewer: dee-hearts-sirius
Date: 09/25/08 21:29
Chapter: Inferno: The Fourth Circle

I love this story, and this chapter made me cry like a baby!

Author's Response: I'm so pleased that my words moved you so. Hopefully, upcoming chapters will make you laugh as well as gasp in shock as well. Things take a much darker turn in the second part, Purgatory, which begins with Chapter 10.

Reviewer: Calico
Date: 08/22/08 15:32
Chapter: Inferno: The Seventh Circle

This story really impresses me so far. Your use of language is really sophistocated, and the dialogue is fast-paced and witty. I especially like your portrayal of Remus, Ginny, and (in the first 2 chapters) Sirius, all of whom resemble JK's characters and yet have become your own. Keep this up - I can't wait for more!

Author's Response: Thanks for the encouragement. I've been having lots of fun getting inside everyone's heads. Just wait until you get to the parts with Severus Snape!

Reviewer: DragonDi
Date: 07/29/08 15:17
Chapter: Inferno: The Fifth Circle

Another brilliant chapter! I love it. You've done such a great job with Remus. I love how you dig deeper into his character (and your interpretation of it!) so smoothly and so thoroughly using Freddy and flashbacks. The descriptions and the adjectives you use throughout this chapter really are amazing--they set the scene so well, so that anyone can see it exactly the way you do. Great job!

Author's Response: Glad to know you like Freddy. Hope you like the layers that I add to Tonks' character as first, I make her light-hearted without being an immature ditz. Your words of encourgement are most welcome as I really went out on a tangent with the structuring of this story. For my general fic I just used JKR's template, but this baby is all mine. Hope to have the next installment uploaded by the end of the week, am having to retype on new disk (home computer is a dinosaur...)

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