Reviews For An Uncertain Past
Reviewer: Elf01
Date: 07/21/08 4:03
Chapter: Chapter 1

I think that you have given Crookshanks a very real personality and that you have kept Hermionie in character.

I would like to learn more about the Mrs. Norris incident if you want to write a related work.

I love your explaination for the memories that Hermionie and Crookshanks relive.

Author's Response: I actually have the start of the Mrs. Norris incident up, it is my story Switched. :) I plan on updating it sometime soon, so it is not abandoned, though it has been over a year since I updated. I'm glad that you enjoyed my portrayal of Crookshanks. I have a lot of fun writing him. Thank you for the review. :) Cyns

Reviewer: washedmemories
Date: 07/19/08 8:36
Chapter: Chapter 1

Interesting to read a story from the pov of Crookshanks. Wasn't that bad at all, found it pretty interesting. I noticed toward the beginning you seemed to use and quite a bit, but you got better as you neared the end. Some few grammar errors here and there, nothing too big. But the biggest quirk I have is the fact that you use passive voice.

example:

As he was reflecting on what was different from his home, he realized his eyes had found one thing that was familiar

It could easily be:

As he reflected on what was different from his home...

I had that same problem too and was often criticized for it.

However, I did enjoy reading it!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review. I know that the different voices are my weakest point right now. I'm trying to get back into writing after not doing so in over 10 years. . . Not a real excuse, but the truth. :) I'll go make that change right now! ; ) Cyns

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