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07/21/08 4:03 · For:
I think that you have given Crookshanks a very real personality and that you have kept Hermionie in character.
I would like to learn more about the Mrs. Norris incident if you want to write a related work.
I love your explaination for the memories that Hermionie and Crookshanks relive.
Author's Response: I actually have the start of the Mrs. Norris incident up, it is my story Switched. :) I plan on updating it sometime soon, so it is not abandoned, though it has been over a year since I updated. I'm glad that you enjoyed my portrayal of Crookshanks. I have a lot of fun writing him. Thank you for the review. :) Cyns
(Signed) · Date:
07/19/08 8:36 · For:
Interesting to read a story from the pov of Crookshanks. Wasn't that bad at all, found it pretty interesting. I noticed toward the beginning you seemed to use and quite a bit, but you got better as you neared the end. Some few grammar errors here and there, nothing too big. But the biggest quirk I have is the fact that you use passive voice.
As he was reflecting on what was different from his home, he realized his eyes had found one thing that was familiar
It could easily be:
As he reflected on what was different from his home...
I had that same problem too and was often criticized for it.
However, I did enjoy reading it!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review. I know that the different voices are my weakest point right now. I'm trying to get back into writing after not doing so in over 10 years. . . Not a real excuse, but the truth. :) I'll go make that change right now! ; ) Cyns