*Shocked Silence* Oh. My. God. A cliffhanger. I hate those. But I like the story so far. Can't wait to read more.
Wooooooooooooooooooow. I really don't know how else to describe this story. There's so much drama. It reminds me a little of being at my school. I liked this chapter though. Bravo.
Ok, so I was like, I don't know, five paragraphs from the last one when I accidently looked down and saw what Madeline said. My immediate reaction? "OOOOOOOO! BURN!" Regardless, I did like the chapter. Very well-written, with the perfect amount of humor (but that's just me!).
Wow, it's been a long time! I got so busy I forgot to update this. I'm working on Chapter Four. Hopefully you all haven't lost interest. : )
hey,wat's next?plz updat soon!
holycrapthatwasawesome!!! and disturbing too. made me laugh till my stomach hurt and my throat was raw though. :) please get the next chapter up soon!!
I agree with Sdogg; you have an amazing plot, and you shouldn't rush what need not be rushed.
I can't wait to read more! :)
This story is fairly fast-paced, and I would love to see longer chapters, but I do enjoy it and it brings a smile to face. Good job :)
I really like your story. But the ends a little um... I can't really think of the word. Not cheesy and not corny but it was like... blunt. I don't think Sirius would tell Ellen that. But I liked how the reader got the feeling that Ellen wanted to talk to Sirius. It definetly makes the plot more interesting, and can't wait to see where it goes.
i liked it a lot!!!!
THIS IS SO FUNNY I CANT WAIT TO READ THE REST I WONDER WHAT HAPPENS WITH SIRIUS AND MADELINE AND REMUS AND ELLEN
" JAMES POTTER WANTS TO SHAG LILY EVANS" JOKES !!!!!!!
“JAMES POTTER WANTS TO SHAG LILY EVANS!”
Oh my goodness. I laughed so hard at that.
Already, after one chapter, I loooove it. :)
It amuses me further, as I read this chapter, I was listening to "Banana Pancakes" by Jack Johnson. Listen to the song, it's so .. happy-go-lucky, and It seemed to contrast with the chapter.
Okay I'm officially in love with this story! It is soooo funny, and well, it's great! A lot of James/Lily don't include Frank and Alice, and I love it. I love the part where Madeline swears on all things good and chocolatly! Oh and you wrote
"Frank slid down onto the couch next to Remus, taking Lily’s place"
I think you meant to say James instead of Remus, because Remus should be off snogging Ellen. Just caught it! Like I said love the story and can't wait for another chapter!!!!!
Author's Response: Thanks! :) Yeah I think I did mean James...whoops!
dang--this is so good but a little perverted (no offense) but i like where ur taking this
Author's Response: Haha yeah it is...but hey! :) They're teenagers. They're roughly my age in this story - a year or two earlier - and I really based a lot of this stuff on my friends, plus the information about their characters from the books and JKR.
Thank you both! I do love writing Lily/James fics and such, but I think that I kind of want to focus this more on Sirius and Lupin's experiences with romance pre-HP series (and pre-Tonks!), so I decided, what the heck! It will focus a lot on Lily/James, though, but not so much as Sirius/Madeline and Lupin/Ellen.
It's not so focused on James and Lily. I like it. Can't wait for you to write more!
i like how you started it. it made me laugh. good start on the story =]