Reviewer: Nova
Date: 03/28/09 20:12
Chapter: Chapter : In Which Jordan is Unnecessarily Dramatic

Woo! Updaaate.
I love updates.

Oh, wow. That chapter was like... I don't even know.

I wish Anatoly was a real person. He's just so cool!

There's a couple of weird sentences here and there, like when Jor-jums is e-mailing Giorgi...

'Still, I’ll going to legally come of age, which is exciting.'

It should probably be I'M going to legally... etc, blah blah blah.

And there's a couple of repetitions...

'Her soft cotton dress robes were a pale tea blue, with a square neck and they were accentuated by a square neck and short puffed sleeves.'

As you can probably tell, you wrote 'square neck' twice, without really needing to, and later on you wrote:

'“Here I go!” she announced, skipping toward the restroom to the restroom to get ready for the ball.'

But that's okay. I don't think anyone will care all that much, unless they're among the ranks of the grammar police or something...

Emma should be more accepting toward Hayley and Anatoly! They make such a cute couple!

I can't wait to see how Hayley's 'powers' develop.

Good luck with your school musical!


Author's Response: Oh, I'm SO glad you liked this chapter! I worried it'd be too overdramatic. And yes, it would not be a Schmerg_The_Impaler story if it wasn't riddled with typos! ^_^ Now, I'm not suggesting at all that Haley and Anatoly are a couple, but I do have so much fun writing them together-- and Emma is being a poopface. :-( Actually, Haley won't be developing any outstanding magical powers. I don't know if I made this clear, but Jordan isn't becoming a Seer because he's Merlin's heir, he's Merlin's heir BECAUSE he happens to be a Seer. Likewise, Haley won't be getting any braver because she's Gryffindor's heir. She's Gryffindor's heir because she's so brave! But we will be seeing more of her bravery later in the story.

I'm really looking forward to our musical! I'm the Queen of France and in the ensemble, and I think it'll be a lot of fun. But we only have less than a month to put it together-- yikes!

Reviewer: Lasselanta
Date: 03/27/09 22:41
Chapter: Chapter 13: In Which Ted and Merlin Chat With Some Professors

You do indeed have reviewers left - I can't wait to see more of your excellent story! :)

Author's Response: Well, I updated awhile ago, but it still hasn't been posted!

Reviewer: SP4RT4N
Date: 03/25/09 2:14
Chapter: Chapter 13: In Which Ted and Merlin Chat With Some Professors

wow. i have watched your stories go from wildly zany to this complexity and depth. nice stuff!

Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much! That really means a LOT to me. Of course, there is still plenty of wild zaniness... ^_^ Lovely username, by the way-- my school's mascot is the Spartan.

Reviewer: ringobeatlesfan4
Date: 03/23/09 16:12
Chapter: Chapter 13: In Which Ted and Merlin Chat With Some Professors

and i forgot to put this in my last review, but it says that you have chapter 14 accepted... but its not on the contents page... im confused...

Author's Response: It's not on the contents page? I've already gotten a bunch of reviews on it.... I'm confuzzled.

Reviewer: ringobeatlesfan4
Date: 03/23/09 16:07
Chapter: Chapter 13: In Which Ted and Merlin Chat With Some Professors

hi, Schmergo!

Sorry I didn't review until today when this has been up for a while, but it was exactly one year ago yesterday when I began reading Potter's Pentagon: The Five. I remember this not because I am a cyber-stalker, but because there was a chicken dinner at my elementary school that night and my father was leaving for Pittsburgh that day! I was on mugglenet, looking for an interesting fic to read, and I came across The Five. I began reading, but had to say goodbye to my dad and go to the chicken dinner. when i got home, i finished reading it, and have been hooked ever since! Well, anyway, I shall now review The Past (its come a long way since that chicken dinner)

Tyrone rolled over. “That was cold,” he said, giving her his best puppy-eyed pout of all time. “Don’t be hating on the mustache.”
hahahahaha! that's what my friend said to me when I made fun of his mustache! but toi be honest, it was no more than what Tyrone has...

that was really good! but to be honest, i didnt really understand the transition from Emma + Tyrone to Gryffindor + Merlin.... maybe it's just me... i dunno. but that aside, i really liked this! its wonderfully well-written, and i cant wait for the next chapter! {BeccA}

P.S. I deleted the fic I already had posted because frankly, I thought it was terrible! I dunno if you had a chance to read it, but I have a new fic in the queue right now! I have a feeling it'll be accepted soon, just to let you know :)

Author's Response: Wows, thank you! Your story about when you started reading "The Five" made me feel warm and fuzzy inside. I've been writing these stories for SO many years, it's ridiculous. (I invented the characters when I was twelve, and now I'm alost seventeen.)

Zahahaha, I'm just like Emma when it coes to boys with teenage moostaches.

Reviewer: Holly218
Date: 03/15/09 12:19
Chapter: Chapter 13: In Which Ted and Merlin Chat With Some Professors

URGH!!!!! Please hurry up and update! I just read your entire series in a weekend and I do not appreciate being left hanging!!!!

Author's Response: Ha! I'm actually submitting the next chapter today!

Reviewer: Xain
Date: 03/13/09 0:31
Chapter: Chapter 13: In Which Ted and Merlin Chat With Some Professors

I love it. But PUH-lease don't make me wait so long!!! And Emma and Tyrone seem to be getting along a little better all the time. Hahaha. And I LOVE the princess bride! You killed my father. Prepare to die!

Author's Response: Thank yooooouzles! I will try to update as soon as I can (which should be very soon).

Reviewer: crystalphoenix
Date: 03/12/09 19:48
Chapter: Chapter 13: In Which Ted and Merlin Chat With Some Professors

yes! the princess bride is awesome! wow, so things are getting really interesting. how is jordan going to save emma? i can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: Thank you! And I'm so glad there are so many Princess Bride fans! But... who's saying Jordan will save Emma, eh? She's a strong, independent woman.

Reviewer: sorting_hat123
Date: 03/12/09 14:46
Chapter: Chapter 13: In Which Ted and Merlin Chat With Some Professors

I love the Jordan-centric chapters so much!

Author's Response: Thanks, me, too!

Date: 03/12/09 8:01
Chapter: Chapter 13: In Which Ted and Merlin Chat With Some Professors

I want to write a long review.... But my brain feels like mush... I barely slept tonight...
I'll be back later with a better review.


Reviewer: Rislans88
Date: 03/10/09 18:05
Chapter: Chapter 13: In Which Ted and Merlin Chat With Some Professors

YAY this is fantastic, and i'm so happy you're updating again!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm excited to be updating again!

Reviewer: Cascia
Date: 03/10/09 1:04
Chapter: Chapter 13: In Which Ted and Merlin Chat With Some Professors

Tee hee hee! Awesome!I wonder what will happen to Emma and Tyrone? Oh and I love how you did that thing at the end where Merlin says ''some things are left to future generations'' its funny cause they're doing the inter house unity project

Author's Response: Well, hooray! And yes, the 'future generations' thing was meant to be a specifically pointed comment. That Merlin knows what he's talking about. :-)

Reviewer: Cascia
Date: 03/10/09 1:02
Chapter: Chapter 13: In Which Ted and Merlin Chat With Some Professors

Tee hee hee! Awesome!I wonder what will happen to Emma and Tyrone?

Author's Response: *Coyly* Myessss, I wonder?

Reviewer: Santastic
Date: 03/09/09 23:36
Chapter: Chapter 13: In Which Ted and Merlin Chat With Some Professors

Well, now, I love it of course, although I am disappointed with the Hiatus. I mean, this story was the only reason why I joined the site!

You are an incredible writer, and this is (yet another) incredible chapter. I'm completely addicted- I don't want Emma to die! :(

Well, it's amazing of course. Please put up another chapter sooooooon!!!

Author's Response: Oh wow! I'm thrilled that you'd join this site for my redonkulous stories! But don't worry-- that hiatus shouldn't rear its ugly head again anytime soon.

Reviewer: Heiress_of_Insanity_
Date: 03/09/09 12:45
Chapter: Chapter 13: In Which Ted and Merlin Chat With Some Professors

UPDATE!!! haha, sorry, it's been too long! I think...I was still auditioning for Beauty and the Beast back then 0.0 woah.

"It’s like Count Tyrone Rugen, the super-evil six-fingered man from The Princess Bride?”

HAHA! YES!! Every time I see that movie I think of Tyrone. Glad I'm not the only one =D

That whole Jordan-Emma-Tyrone part had me freaked out. I don't want her to die! =( Of course, I don't want any of them to die...I couldn't stand being Jordan. I'd be running up to people all over the place saying 'Don't do this! Don't do that!' =P eek

Of course, it'd be hard being Merlin, too...

Alright, well, I have to do French now, but please don't let the next update take that long! I was on PP withdrawal XD~


Author's Response: It has been WAAAAY too long! And yes, the first time I saw Princess Bride (which was after I'd already written the first Potter's Pentagon book), I started cracking up when he called Count Rugen 'Tyrone.' No one else got it... hehehe... and don't worry, updates won't take long this time!

Reviewer: QuandoGirl
Date: 03/09/09 2:58
Chapter: Chapter 7: That Obligatory Hospital Wing Chapter

This is now my fav chapter :D cause i have type 1 diabetes too!!!!!

Author's Response: Oh, wow! I hope I can keep things fairly realistic for you, since everything I know about diabetes, I learned from the Babysitters' Club!

Reviewer: Nova
Date: 03/08/09 22:52
Chapter: Chapter 13: In Which Ted and Merlin Chat With Some Professors

Long time, no review!

Jeez! Long hiatus?
I thought you DIED!
But you've come back!
Hopefully not as a zombie... O_o

But aaanyway.

Nawrrr! Poor Teddy. Don't you just want to pick him up and give him a hug? *squee*

AAAH! WAKE UP, JOR-JUMS! You can't let Emma die!
It's all up to you, Schmergo! You have to wake Jordan up and save Emma!
You must do so before the eleventh minute of the eleventh hour of the eleventh day of the fourth month... Otherwise she'll never get to see Westley again, and that would be terrible.
Because Westley and his mustache are just so cool.

But you know who's even cooler?

Prince Humperdinckkkkk.
His name makes me squee.


Aaagh. I hate Tyrone's un-mustache.
There's this guy in my Math class who has an un-mustache, and it's REALLY annoying. I just want to go up with a razor and chop it offff...


That's all, folks.

Author's Response: NOVAAAA! (I actually love your wacky reviews!) And speaking of zombies... yesterday, my friends and I wrote a brilliant story that is about the musical West Side Story... and TOILET DWELLING SPACE ZOMBIES! But I love, love, love Teddy, and I feel bad when I do mean things to him. But YES! I love Humperdinck, and I love Chris Sarandon, and I love his poofy costumes!

There is this dude in my Sunday school class who has this horrible unmustache, but he's the OPPOSITE of Tyrone. Whenever anyone mentions his mustache, he says, "What mustache?"

Reviewer: Sunny_Rainbow
Date: 03/08/09 11:23
Chapter: Chapter 1: In Which Jordan Has A Bad Experience With A Hobo

What do you mean hiatus? We must have left at the same time;P

Author's Response: Hahaha, I'll just blame my late update on you, then! ^_^

Reviewer: Sunny_Rainbow
Date: 03/08/09 11:09
Chapter: Chapter 12: In Which Charybdis Is Nott Happy

Le Gaspette! That was such a shocker! Great job! Btw the stroking the fake beard thing Haley does is something I do on a regular basis. ;)

Author's Response: Ha, thank you very much! And yes, one of my friends does that constantly, and she says, "I should really do something about this beard!"

Reviewer: Sunny_Rainbow
Date: 03/08/09 10:49
Chapter: Chapter 11: In Which Giorgi Smells A Rat, And Ophidias Isn't One

Omg love this! I took a break from fanfiction and just got back into it! I just love Jordan/Giorgi's realationship! Giorgi's awesome! And that was so sweet when Ted showed the lady on the Knight Bus that not all werewolfs are bad. Poor Ophidias I had a feeling he was mean for a reason. And I have a question, how did Ivy get stuck with a short name while all the Malfoy's have long ones? Is it short for Ivilayus or something crazy?

Author's Response: Thank you! Writing scenes between Jordan and Giorgi brings me FIENDISH GLEE! Oh, and Ivy's name is Ivy because I wanted to get the whole plant name in there-- Narcissa (Narcissus), Pansy, you know. And ivy can be either poisonous or benign, and it's hard to tell at first... and people were cautious of Ivy at first because she was from a Slytherin family. Ivy's also a very tenacious plant!

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