Reviewer: Luna_Lovegood11
Date: 09/11/09 19:04
Chapter: Chapter 22: In Which Our Heroes Suffer Boo-Boos

Whoaaa, that was intense. x.x
I love the way you just totally saved Haley, although now someone ELSE has to die and that's..guh. I like all the others too much! (Apart from Ivy, but she has to stick around for Ted...)

I love the Neville and Luna thing.

Also, the point of reading chapter two is...? I read it, and noticed the Bungee things, but. Other than that, nothing significant. x.x

THE END, BY THE WAY. HOLY CRAP.

Author's Response: How do you know that Haley lives? I might have just spared her this time to kill her later. Anyway, I wanted people to read Chapter Two so people wouldn't say, "Hey, I can't believe you used that plot device to save her!" I wanted people to realize that it was foreshadowed from the start. ;-)

Reviewer: janewhy
Date: 09/08/09 18:17
Chapter: Chapter 1: In Which Jordan Has A Bad Experience With A Hobo

exerlant story plz up date asap

Author's Response: Thank you! I will update either today or tomorrow, so don't you trouble your pretty little head about it. ;-)

Reviewer: Ankh of the night
Date: 09/05/09 21:12
Chapter: Chapter 3: In Which Ivy Avoids Attack Chickens, But Not Hadrian Bellowes

“Yeah,” put in Ron, “I heard he always wanted to run his family’s wand business, but he couldn’t because he’s a Squib, so he just registers wands now. He’s terrified of magic, of course, seeing as he can’t put up a decent fight or anything.”

“That’s so sad,” sighed Ivy, looking back over her shoulder at Chester. Checking wands all day long, knowing that he’d never be able to use one and constantly living in fear that someone wouldn’t register their wand and would use it to kill him… she felt sorry for the man.

I have a real soft spot for squibs. Seriously, I'm writing a fic about one...no one seems to appreciate Squibs that much...
There should be a Squib awareness day.

Author's Response: Chester was a very important character in the first draft of this story, but I cut that whole subplot. :-( But I liked him so much, I had to keep in his first scene. I don't know why, but I like the idea of Chester Ollivander.

Reviewer: WretchedBadTiming
Date: 09/05/09 11:54
Chapter: Chapter 21: In Which Haley Takes The Plunge

keep writing fast!!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: I actually wrote this story over a year ago-- the problem is the submission process!

Reviewer: Ankh of the night
Date: 09/02/09 22:11
Chapter: Chapter 3: In Which Ivy Avoids Attack Chickens, But Not Hadrian Bellowes

Hm...what is it that Emma has done?*Gasp* No...it can't be....can it?
She wouldn't do that....
It was SHE whole the cookie from the cookie jar!
*obviously, that's not my theory..and I'm starting to think my theory seems a bit off..*
Well, as for when fate rears its ugly head towards one of the five, I know I'm gonna cry.

Author's Response: Ooh, I really would like to know what your theory is. Pleeez contact me and let me know! (Granted, I probably won't tell you whether it's right or wrong...)

Reviewer: Ankh of the night
Date: 09/02/09 19:31
Chapter: Chapter 1: In Which Jordan Has A Bad Experience With A Hobo

Yes..today and yesterday I have been chapter jumping...now is when I REALLY start rereading...
*by the way, have you submitted chapter 22 yet?*

Author's Response: Actually, no. It's the longest chapter ever, and I'm trying to edit it. It's DEFINITELY the most momentous and insane chapter of the story, I'll say that much.

Reviewer: Ankh of the night
Date: 09/02/09 18:31
Chapter: Chapter 20: In Which Things Start To Heat Up

“…and of course, the chief ingredient of Veritaserum is a large…”

“Potato.”

“Which, if used properly, will produce a potion with no discernable colour, taste, or…”

“Potato.”


Darn it...what IS that potato line? It leaves SO much to the imagination that I bet knowing what it is would ruin it. Yet, there is something about that mysterious potato that makes you want to know what the rest of it is.

Author's Response: I really don't know what it is! It came from an RP I was doing on Neopets when I was twelve. (Yes, I first invented these characters to roleplay on Neopets in sixth grade... smooth, right?) Anyway, my friend and I were inspired by this Monty Python skit where this guy is reading children's books on TV that turn increasingly less and less appropriate, and in one of them, he stops reading, flips a few pages, blinks incredulously, and reads, "...with a MELON???" We thought that was hilarious.
br> So we did some roleplay where Emma or someone was testing out their new quill and Jordan was reading over her shoulder, "Professor Zabini should..." and then he did a double take and went, "... and a POTATO???" It was actually my best friend who came up with that line, and it became an inside joke after that.. Years later, I asked her what it meant, and she said, "I have no idea."

Reviewer: Ankh of the night
Date: 09/02/09 17:52
Chapter: Chapter : In Which Jordan is Unnecessarily Dramatic

I'm getting the impression that whatever Emma is hiding...wait...nevermind..I think I'll keep it to myself this time...
Also, I WANT Haley's gown. Seriously.

Author's Response: YES, THE SECRET IS THAT EMMA IS SECRETLY A MAN IN VERY CONVINCING DRAG! And she can't let Tyrone make out with her because he'd feel her torso and realize that her glorious curves are not real! Hahaha, yes, but I love Haley's gown. When I was in middle school, I had this wonderful red kimono minidress that made me look like a stripper. I loved it, but then I had a random growth spurt at age 14 and it became hilariously short, to the extent that I'd never be allowed in public wearing it. So sadly, that dress went bye-bye...

Reviewer: Ankh of the night
Date: 09/02/09 16:53
Chapter: Chapter 21: In Which Haley Takes The Plunge

Look, it's probably just me, but throughout the story..it sort of seems like Emma's hiding something or is guilty about something...I don't know, I just got that impression.

Author's Response: It's not just you, Ankh. It's me, too. ;-) You're onto something...

Reviewer: Nova
Date: 09/02/09 4:26
Chapter: Chapter 1: In Which Jordan Has A Bad Experience With A Hobo

Well, Hayley didn't die... SINCE THERE IS NO CHARACTER NAMED HAYLEY!

Duuuh. I'm stoopid.
I DID know that she was called Haley, but I was reading a fic just before this one where the lead character's name is Hayley with that extra little 'y', so I was stupid and got them confused.
Hopefully you can forgive me.

~Nova

Author's Response: Oh, I don't mind. I was just joking around by trying to get you to think I was explicitly telling you that Haley doesn't die... it's fine, haha, my sister always spells her name "Hailey."

Reviewer: Ankh of the night
Date: 09/01/09 21:26
Chapter: Chapter 21: In Which Haley Takes The Plunge

NO! I do it ALL THE TIME! Seriously.
I'm having such an idea, that I might actually draw some pictures out and whip out moviemaker and create a masterpiece. If you'd like that. There, it'll be a present. It'd take a while though, but I'd like to.

Author's Response: Oh my gosh, that would be the coolest thing in the entire worrrld...

Reviewer: Heiress_of_Insanity_
Date: 09/01/09 19:44
Chapter: Chapter 21: In Which Haley Takes The Plunge

WhaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaatHaley!!!!!!!!!!!????????????? D: D: YOU BETTER BE ALRIGHT, GIRLIE. And where's her wand? (Unless i'm so ADD I skipped over the part where she was expelliarmus'd...

loosely based on Pride and Prejudice but with added werewolf warfare.

WIN. That is all :)

“Giorgi is my friend,”

When he said this, LIAR! immediately popped into my head. So...I guess I felt it was neccesary to share this with the world?

They had to fight… or there was no alternative but death...

GET.THE.FRIGGIN.NECKLACE.ON.AND.RUN.
Uuuuuuuuuuuughhh >.<

I liked the little scene between Ted and Lupin :) It was really sweet and father-son ish in a weird kind of way (and even though Lupin didn't know Ted (very well...))

And you do have to wonder why Jordan decided to bring Cecilia along...=/

Well, apart from Haley falling to her (supposed? hopefully not?) doom, I liked this chapter, especially the Little Kid Haley part. >=D Gotta watch out for them cute little eleven year olds!

Pweeze update soon! (And haha...this chapter was indeed a 'cliffhanger'...kind of...)~

H_o_I_

Author's Response: I don't BELIEVE Haley's wand was taken away... but I don't think it's in her hand, and by the time she got it out of her pocket, it'd be too late.

Hey, Giorgi is officially still just his friend. Neither has made any ardent declaration of love... but that doesn't mean he doesn't have a thannnng for her, hahaaa...

It's funny, people asked a lot about why I brought Ceci along. I thought it was kind of obvious... Jordan wanted her to see how her parents REALLY got their injuries in the Final Battle. He feels a bit insulted by how little she respects her parents, since he was a lot like her when he was younger and he learned the error of his ways, so he wants her to see how great her parents really are by showing her the battle.

Reviewer: Ankh of the night
Date: 09/01/09 19:11
Chapter: Chapter 21: In Which Haley Takes The Plunge

Oh god...I'm just reading this chapter again..waiting for the next one...
This was the WRONG time to listen to the song Hide and Seek by Imogen Heap. Seriously. Do you have any idea how perfectly the lyrics fit Potter's Pentagon? And that it was a bad idea for me to listen to this while reading what happens? Oh gosh...

Author's Response: Want to hear a creepy secret about me? Sometimes, I listen to music on my iPod, close my eyes, and make up music videos edited together from 'clips' of Potter's Pentagon stories inside my head. Yeah, I know, I'm a weirdo... but there are so many songs that fit my stories and characters uncannily well. Incidentally... if you're rereading... I might suggest you reread part of the beginning of this story. There's a lot of foreshadowing and clues and stuff that I'm pretty sure EVERYONE is missing because it's been so long. I'd particularly recommend checkin' out Chapter Two. Hinty hint hint hint. But if you have any sudden epiphanies, DON'T POST THEM HERE! Message me privately and see if you're right...

Reviewer: Nova
Date: 09/01/09 2:15
Chapter: Chapter 21: In Which Haley Takes The Plunge

AHHH!
I HAVEN'T BEEN ABLE TO ACCESS MY E-MAIL FOR A FEW DAYS SO I DIDN'T KNOW ABOUT THE UPDAAATTEEE.

So, here I go.

I like the idea of them going back in time to the final battle. It's a really smart idea that adds a lot of excitement. I would never have thought of that... I probably would have been like - "duuhh... lets kill them off with machetes and ninjas! *guffaw".
Yurp.
---
I love Ted's last name. Windowtoadspoon? Genius.
Also, that little Remus/Ted scene was very cute.
---
BAHAHA Hayley is awesome. I can totally imagine Hayley going around knocking on peoples doors in a Girl Guides uniform and trying to sell them cookies.
---
OH MY GOSH. Hayley can't die! D:
It does say in the story description that there would be character death, but HAYLEY? (ack, I just typed Haykey...) Noooo!
Or maybe she's not actually dead. Maybe she just broke several bones from the fall...
AGH, DAMN CLIFFHANGERS!
*sigh*

Oh well. I'm off to read PPJP.

~Nova

Author's Response: I dunno, I prefer your idea of killing off Bellowes with machetes and ninjas. Get Lady Catherine and company to do it. But the Ted Windowtoadspoon thing is inspired by the Emperor's New SChool, where Kuzco makes up a best friend (since nobody likes him and he had to write a report on his best friend) named Brad Bowlllaama, since he saw a bowl and a llama in front of him... I don't know, for some reason, I thought it was hilarious. Well, Hayley didn't die... SINCE THERE IS NO CHARACTER NAMED HAYLEY! Now, did *HALEY* die? That's a different story... and you will find out! ;-) Mwahahahaha...

Reviewer: justin ferguson
Date: 08/31/09 14:41
Chapter: Chapter 21: In Which Haley Takes The Plunge

Question: Did Lupin name his son Ted after "Ted Windowtoadspoon"?

Author's Response: That is a really good question, but no. He didn't even remember the boy's name or what he looked like after a few years. He just remembered what the boy had told him. He named his son after Tonks' father-- Ted's a really common name, so it's not that much of a coincidence.

Reviewer: Luna_Lovegood11
Date: 08/30/09 17:43
Chapter: Chapter 21: In Which Haley Takes The Plunge

Holy crap.

O.O

Author's Response: SORRYYYY!

Reviewer: Luna_Lovegood11
Date: 08/30/09 17:20
Chapter: Chapter 20: In Which Things Start To Heat Up

I was just about to say, the whole telemency thing sounded a hell of a lot like a mind meld...Which makes me a nerd, yeah, but whatever.

I'm slowly making my way through the chapters I missed! My sister spoiled what happened at the end of the next chapter, which pisses me off, but oh well. It's my fault for not reading it when it got updated.

Ooh! The plot thickens! I can't wait to see what's going to happen! But really, the most pressing thing right now is what the hell Zabini's up to...o.O

Author's Response: Mahaaaahahaha... but yeah, you actually don't find out what Zabini's up to for... quite some time. I think it's about four chapters, if my draft is current. But yes, things go a litt-le crazy from here on out.

Reviewer: CAPS_LOCK_ADDICTE
Date: 08/30/09 2:47
Chapter: Chapter 21: In Which Haley Takes The Plunge

All I could say the first time I reviewed this chapter was something along the lines of: "NOOOOOOO HAYLEYS DEAD I SOOOOO KNEW IT!!!!!" So I'll review again
!
“Follow me,” he said, “we have to pick up one more person.”
Aw man when he said that I thought he was talking about Giorgi or Anatoly.... But bringing along Cecilia is preety cool too.

“Giorgi is my friend,” he said, his voice flatter than a pancake.
Whatever you say Jor-Jums... Whatever you say...

“You,” he proclaimed, “are kidding. That is stark, staring, screamingly loopy, even for you people.”
“Yep,” said Haley brightly. “Want to come?”
Who can refuse it when you ask like that?

“It’s like the opposite of The Wizard of Oz,” remarked Tyrone, up on his Muggle films as always.
I loved this line so much but I have no idea why....

I also really liked the Ted and Remus chat... I love time paradoxes of that kind... (you know someone says something to someone in the past and because of that he hears it in the first place....) I hope you understood that last sentance...

Author's Response: Awww, thank you! I had fun coming up with the crazy little jokes and goofy lines and stuff, but I knew that most of them would be overlooked when people reviewed it. ;-) The Wizard of Oz line is something that I just randomly came up with right before submitting.

Reviewer: butterbeer_HaNgOvEr
Date: 08/29/09 22:26
Chapter: Chapter 21: In Which Haley Takes The Plunge

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHH
WHAAAT!
Haley!! Update!!
Thanks for the birthday present dude! I'm finally sixteen...
Gah, why DID Jordan bring Cecilia???
As usual, brilliantly written. the only thing is that danged cliffhanger! I love and hate it.
Update pleaase!!!!!!!

Author's Response: HAPPY SWEET SIXTEEN!! Jordan brought Cecilia because he wanted her to see what her parents did in the Final Battle... because he was in her place, he didn't appreciate what HIS parents did, and he learned how wrong he was, so now he's a little offended by her attitude. So he wants her to see what actually went down so she can change her mind on that front.

Reviewer: justin ferguson
Date: 08/29/09 21:47
Chapter: Chapter 21: In Which Haley Takes The Plunge

Oh no! Haley! *gasp* What's gonna happen? Did she die????

YOU'RE KILLING ME SCHMERGO!!!!!

Author's Response: No, no, Justin. I'm not killing YOU, I'm killing Haley! ... or am I... dunn dunn dunn...

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