Reviewer: captburke
Date: 06/22/09 23:32
Chapter: On Being Eleven Years Old and on Top of the World

Four boys, one Invisibility Cloak, three of them fairly good at Potions? The combination is definitely going to cause trouble. Nice chapter.

Author's Response: Thank you for all your response. You have definately lightened up my day. As to your assessment of the plot: you're right, it's just the Marauder's life. Keep reading!

Reviewer: captburke
Date: 06/22/09 23:25
Chapter: A Very Painful Meeting

Poor Remus. His secret is out and the Marauder's accepted it as we knew they would. You're doing a good job here.

Reviewer: captburke
Date: 06/22/09 23:14
Chapter: Some Winter's Tales

Really nice chapter. Sirius has definitely figured out Remus is a werewolf. He won't tell anyone but James. Peter doesn't need to know quite yet. Sirius and Remus may discuss this is for any reason a fullmoon happens while the others are gone. LIke the way the Invisibility Cloak is passed down.
Great imagination and the story is progressing very nicely.

Reviewer: captburke
Date: 06/22/09 22:39
Chapter: A Secratary for Anny

Brilliant strategy! The game was fun. Slytherin is going to get handed a defeat at some point, and Remus is going to have a hard time explaining why there might be a problem if a game is on a full moon and it runs longer than usual. I like this story.
Oh yeh, I usually comment on overall stuff in a story.

Reviewer: captburke
Date: 06/22/09 22:27
Chapter: Operation Fan Club for Trixie

Okay, teaching moths to fly in formation is a little hard to swallow. But it's funny and I'll buy funny. The Marauder's have a great sense of fun. Bella is a slimey evil b$%#& and always will be one.

Reviewer: captburke
Date: 06/22/09 22:17
Chapter: Flying Away

Good lesson. Remus obviously a) saw his mother die, b) can see Thestrals because he's a werewolf? First one seems more reasonable. How did Lily do flying? She doesn't like Quidditch but does she like to fly? Sirius is going to figure out what's happening with Remus before the end of the year.
Good chapter.

Author's Response: Answer is a). Lily wasn't too terrible, but she wasn't as into flying like James was.

Reviewer: captburke
Date: 06/22/09 21:44
Chapter: The Pecking Order

Love the way these guys think. Sirius' mum needs a slap upside the head with a rusty iron pipe. The friendship is solidifying and it certainly wasn't going to be long before they started the pranks.

Reviewer: captburke
Date: 06/22/09 21:22
Chapter: Mercy for the Werewolf

Poor Remus. Wish there had been something to help him when he was young. Granted his friends did everything they could as soon as they knew the truth.

Reviewer: captburke
Date: 06/22/09 21:16
Chapter: Near the Forest Edge

Brilliant reference to Harry's first year. Hmmn, is that why Hagrid chose the name Fluffy? What else might we hear? The interaction between everyone sounds very real.

Reviewer: captburke
Date: 06/22/09 21:09
Chapter: The Doors, Splendiferous Tree Frog Horns, and Fenris Push-Ups

Interesting first day. Fenris sounds like someone to avoid. The girls sound like they're already not liking the future Marauder's. Doors made good music.

Reviewer: captburke
Date: 06/22/09 20:57
Chapter: Food, Glorious Food

LIke the Sorting Hat song. Welcoming Feasts are always fun and the first years are always awed by everything which only adds to the fun.

Reviewer: captburke
Date: 06/22/09 20:28
Chapter: A Cat Called Spunky

Nice second chapter. Your characters are good and seem to be real people. Haven't figured out the plot yet. Or maybe it's just the Marauder's at Hogwarts. The friendship has begun.

Reviewer: captburke
Date: 06/22/09 20:10
Chapter: The Rat, the Stag, the Werewolf, the Dog.

Not a bad start to a story. Very different backgrounds for the boys. Interesting to see what happens when they all meet.

Reviewer: JeeviS
Date: 04/05/09 12:27
Chapter: Underneath the Willow Tree

haha i enjoyed it:P.... too bad it will take u a while to write again but im looking forward to the next one:D... try to write as soon as possible when ur done.... great chapter by the way!

Reviewer: JeeviS
Date: 03/30/09 3:11
Chapter: The Essay that Took Over Hogwarts

Haha i love the ending part abt ppl speaking normal english:P.... i feel bad for sirius though..... great job by the way! n again thanks for putting up this chapter really fast:D....

Reviewer: JeeviS
Date: 03/27/09 4:37
Chapter: On Being Eleven Years Old and on Top of the World

wow this chapter was updated really fast n i love it! update soon...cant wait to read more...

Author's Response: You're right, it was! I'm glad you're enjoying this!

Reviewer: JeeviS
Date: 03/26/09 8:57
Chapter: A Very Painful Meeting

the story abt Remus life is really sad... it nearly made me to cry... oh by the way, thanks for making James to find out abt it sooner than later... Remus really needs his friends for support.... i love this chapter !! It shows great friendship between the marauders...cant wait for the next chapter!!! n thanks again for updating this chapter earlier than expected...

Reviewer: JeeviS
Date: 03/18/09 12:22
Chapter: Some Winter's Tales

I love it... i had always been a fan of this story since it first started... still am till now..i think this chapter is great... at least Sirius knows Remus's secret.. but i do hope that James will know soon abt it and as well as on Sirius's life... plz update soon ya... im really looking forward to read the next chapter..

Author's Response: Thanks! Wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: Vindictus Viridian
Date: 12/03/08 15:53
Chapter: Flying Away

The Who-Cannons?

Author's Response: Sorry, your review came in before I got the e-mail. The typo has been fixed.

Reviewer: Trivia Camlee
Date: 11/26/08 15:30
Chapter: The Rat, the Stag, the Werewolf, the Dog.

Great job; a very intriguing first chapter. I feel like you have a set sense of who Remus and Sirius are as characters, and that's great- it assures the reader that ooc-ness won't take away from the story.

I feel so bad for Sirius.... :(

My Favorite line: "Never been better," Remus said sarcastically. "I like being hit on the head with the biggest books in the shop."

I'm off to read the next chapter. Nice job!

Author's Response: Thanks for writing in! You'll like all the other sarcasm, too, I hope.

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